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A Trace of Tincture (Triple Rictameters)

Missing image
shadow
small perception
outside periphery
of comprehension, illusion
that flickers fleetingly with remembrance
known from another time and place,
suspended and waiting
to emerge, the
shadow


calmness
exhibited
by the panorama,
diametrical dimensions
tempered by the tenacious tempera
with bold brush strokes of endurance
create splashes of light,
luring shades of
calmness


image
appears clearly
to the viewer beside
the canvas of a lost lifetime,
through the swirled patterns of obscurity
suppressed remnants of the artist
reveal his impressions
upon her heart’s
image

Author notes

Graphic: Picasso: The Shadow, 1953

http://www.lightmillennium.org/3rd_april_03/image/picasso_the_shadow.jpg

rictameter: (definition from shadow poetry) Rictameter
Rictameter is a scheme similar to Cinquain. Starting your first line with a two syllable word, you then
consecutively increase the number of syllables per line by two. i.e. 2, 4, 6, 8, 10 Then down again,
8, 6, 4, 2 Making the final line the same two syllable word you began with.

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  • rinzurajan
    November 1

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    done well with beautiful expression of colour ...i loved the form...its simple...would love to try...

    good luck


  • waydownuponjoy
    February 15, 2008

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    Shadows ...

    finding substance in your work of art. Your poem dives into the depths of this painting and gives it breath that sighs. The forms work well creating space for the reader to wander. One suggestion would be to exchange the word "tempera" for the title word of "tincture". Good luck in the contest.
    joy


  • Pollycheck
    December 27, 2006

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    Thank you for resubmitting this poem for the final round of this competition. I am still blown away by the abstract in this poem, but what do you expect when you use a Piccasso for inspiration.

  • Pollycheck
    December 21, 2006
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    I love this poem. It makes me feel like I am watching an episode of The Twilight Zone. As I was reading it I was imagining Rod Serling's voice. Your use of and choice of words in this poem is just outstanding. Great job.