That creates the flame.
I'm the reason
You'll never be the same.
I'm the catch
You want to keep.
I'm the depths
Of the ocean deep.
I'm the light
Shining on your face.
I'm your home
When you're out of place.
I'm the friend
To see you through.
I'm the love you seek
That you know is true.
I'm life's blood;
The color purple.
I'm the life
That completes the circle.
I'm the passion
That makes you thrive.
I'm the awakening
Making you feel alive.
I'm the desert,
In need of the rain.
I'm all of life's joy;
The root of the pain.
I'm the secret
You can't keep.
I'm the tears
Rolling down your cheek.
I'm the benefit
Of all your doubt.
I'm the trap
To let you out.
I'm the cause
To the ultimate effect.
I'm the heart
Your eyes reject.
I'm the blind
Looking through reflection.
I'm the object of all,
Except your affection.
I'm what's concealed;
Right under your nose.
I'm the field
Where your flower grows.
I'm the triumph
In all that fails.
I'm the dirt
Underneath your nails.
I'm love's defeat,
But I refuse to lose.
I'm the smiles
Amongst the abuse.
I'm the calm
Before the storm.
I'm extraordinary,
Far from the norm.
I'm memorable;
The good and the bad.
I'm the prolific future
In the times I've had.
I'm grounded yet fly free;
The cage in the beast.
I'm contradicting;
The rage in the peace.
I'm at times chaotic;
Like most compounded things.
I'm the ruffled feathers
Within your wings.
I'm the taste
Upon your lips.
I'm a world tour;
Worth making the trips.
I'm what's left
After being devoured.
I'm reincarnation;
Even more empowered.
I'm the reality,
Trying to overcome what's fake.
I'm the choice
You refuse to make.
I'm the lump in your throat;
At times hard to swallow.
I'm right behind you,
So I'm hard to follow.
I'm the moon
Surrounded by night.
I'm a shooting star;
Falling is my flight.
I'm the rising sun
Shining in the morning.
I'm the tidal wave
That hits without warning.
I'm at my best
When we are together.
I'm everlasting;
My love is forever.
I'm an opportunist;
Somewhat spontaneous.
I'm a little out there;
I like the craziness.
I'm the echoes of laughter;
Ringing in your ears.
I'm the vision you see
When the smoke clears.
I'm the stereotype
You perceive me to be.
I'm so much more
Than what you see.
I'm the hope
Within desperation.
I'm the closeness
With seperation.
I'm the faith
You try to keep.
I'm the mountain you climb;
Vast and steep.
I'm the thirst
Caused by hunger.
I'm the lightening
That spawns the thunder.
I'm the smile
Surrendering to laughter.
I'm the end of time
And therefor after.
I'm the sorrow
Of letting go.
I'm the heartache
I hope you never know.
I'm the forgiveness
That releases all guilt.
I'm the foundation
That has been rebuilt.
I'm the fuse;
Burning so slowly.
I'm your heart's explosion
If you'd get to know me.
I'm the sedative
To put you at ease.
I'm only the treatment
For your disease.
I'm strong enough to be the cure;
Your dose of medicine.
I'm the good in every man,
But you won't let us in.
I'm the undying attempt,
To provide you peace.
I'm your landlord,
Because all you do is lease.
I'm the darkness
When you close your eyes.
I'm the truth you see
To overshadow the lies.
I'm suicidal;
In light that I die for you.
I'm depressed;
In light that I cry over you.
I'm uncomfortably numb,
Because you don't feel me.
I'm hidden from you;
You don't see the real me.
I'm forever giving;
Sometimes I forget to take.
I'm without you even making it;
Your biggest mistake.
I'm the static
Upon your neck.
I'm the type of man
That commands respect.
I'm missed opportunity;
At times left alone.
I'm what you look for in them,
Except in me it's shown.
I'm what makes your heart beat;
The circulation of blood.
I'm the oxygen carried,
That initiates the flood.
Author notes
I know this is long, a little repetitive, and jumps around quite a bit with an uneven flow. Some of this is really old and some is recent so it clashes a lot and is pretty much a mixed bag. I'm just looking for any thoughts, perceptions, maybe ideas that may help me bring this altogether. All suggestions and comments are welcomed and appreciated.
A contest entry
- Give me your best ! by vasi.
700 points, ended March 10, 2007, 123 entries
Honorable mention
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I can say one thing to sum this up brilliant writing. Message me if you want your score. ( It's good.) Include the name of your poem. Thanks, bye.
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..oh my god..
You've really spooked me with this write.
I come home to see all your comments, and then I come to return the favor..and I'm awe struck.
This is one of the most..powerful poems I've ever read.
So much so, that you remind me of someone I knew..he was eerily eloquent, had an unnerving way with words. This poem..feels like what he might say to me.
..this part jerked back some memories of him.
I'm the desert,
In need of the rain.
This is something he used to say to me, because I'm a pisces moon.
Thank you for commenting on my writes, I really appreciate it.
S

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You're welcome.
You are extremely talented. There was no way I could not say something to the poems of yours I've read. I like the depth and the emotion behind your words (Very Powerful). As you probably put together with the picture of the lion; I'm a Leo. Hope any memories sparked are all good ones. Thanks for all of your responses. I look forward to reading, commenting, and even hearing more from you.
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awesome
wow wow wow, I was super impressed by this. I loved it. I think its wonderful as it is.. as close to perfection as it can get..thank you for sharing. Beautiful

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Thanks for your feedback. I'm glad you liked it. It turned out nothing like I thought it would when I first started to write it, or when I picked it back up again so I was a little concerned about this one. I was thinking about adding a few more verses just to give it a stronger close. We'll see though. Thanks again for the comments.
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