He did it again
him and his friend
hurt me so much
can't help but feel the pain
he held me down
I screamed so loud
his freind on me as I try to break free
I look up at him desperetly
but all he says to me is:
"It's going to be just like you and Andre"
He raped me with the one I loves help
now I can't see straight as I cry
putting on my clothes wishing I would die
I won't be able to sleep tonight
me and mom most likely will get in a fight
especially if she notices the cigerettes they stole
blames me whole and whole
If dad finds out I had sex he might disown me
I shall hurt myself as he would do
but I will finish the job making sure I am dead.
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very sad poem its hard to think of the words to say on what this poem makes me feel. im sorry you had such an experience. keep up hope and hold your head high.
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this poem is very powerful and filled with strong emotion. rape is a terrible, very painful thing. I was raped when I was 24, by my abusers best friend. I can relate to this poem very much. thank you for sharing this with me.
Kat
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G'day Babyboo1607
"If dad finds out I had sex he might disown me"
Darling, rape is never sex. Sex is a whole other thing. Rape is rape.
I am so sorry you had to suffer through all this and it sounds like you are young as well, which makes it more sad
I never told my Dad when I went through rape and now years later I wished I had or at least gone to the police.
I hope you find the strength inside one day to do so.
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Great poem, very depressing and full of emotion. Strong words and very deep. I hope this didn't really happen, no one should be treated that way.
Great job and good luck in the contest!
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wow... Thats an incredibly sad and heart-hurting poem. I loved the emotion it made me feel-it brought me to tears...
Keep it up!!!
Baleigh -
If this is a true story, then I'm very sorry for what you've been through. It's kind of choppy and difficult to read at times, but at least you got the emotion out. Good job!
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I would take those bastards to jail, remember after five years you can no longer press charges. but other than that eccellent poem
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Be angry, you have the right but don't let it consume your personalily. Don't give them that too. Your worth so much more.
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nice work. is this a true story? its unbelievable how bad experiences can inspire our pens to write such magic. wonderful piece. if this truly has happened its not so wise to keep it inside. true, writing words helps maintain the feelings, but no one should keep things like that bottled up forever. tell someone. wonderful work. miss finalist.
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Oh my gosh, I am so sorry...rape is a terrible thing and sex should be with the one you love. I don't know why people do this, maybe it's stupidity? Well either way, everyone should know not to do this.
Never hurt yourself because of something that happend to you...you couldn't help it, you were forced.
My best friend was raped, it was by her father. She was never the same again...it makes me wonder if he really loved her.
I think this is one of the most moving poems I've ever read...I can only imagine your pain.
All you have to remember is that you don't need those kinds of people in your life, I'm sure you've already figured that out. You did a great job! This puts such an impact on the readers, especially hearing about a true experience.
You have a beautiful write.
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wow....
WOW..!!!! thats really all the words i can say this was such a GREAT poem i could really feel where you were coming from i love it great job and b strong=)
luvs xx
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if this is as true as i think it is then u need to tell some one they dont need to do this to u
this is a great write though it is well writtin and shows alot of emotions i truely like
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this was a great write and i really enjoyed reading this..your words were powerful emotional and flowed well this was a really great write..keep writting your talented
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good
hmm... i have mixed thoughts about this because having been in a somewhat similar situation, that was not my reaction....
i applaud the creativity though...
p.s. ... it definatley rhymed
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wow this is sucj a deep write and i am very sorry this has happend to you.i dont see why people have to be that sick...my favorite line is where you said he looked at you and you tried to plead with him...how can some body not think they are hurting someone and the persons eyes are scared and they are saying no...or if somebody says the person asked for it nobody asks to be ripped apart inside...nobody....i love this poem and wish you luck in your future and hope your doing ok now!!
miranda
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wow this is such a touching and expressive write.
you really grabbed my attention from the start and held it all the way through.
I hope that your parents didnt end up reacting like you predicted in the end of the poem. keep your head up
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srry but i have to take u out of the contest cuz the poem didnt rhyme anywher that i could tell so im srry...but if u want to u can always put another poem in ther and ill accept it...thanx for entering
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I don't see how you can not tell were the rhyming is but that is fine...maybe you should have paid more close attention...plus it was a really good poem
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LADY U KNO HOW 2 REFLECT UR FEELINGS
tat was actually tu blu,bt dbt wry I ll pray 4 u GOd bless -
Good God that is depressing.. That is a very sad poem you have there, I hope you win that contest. (PS if this is written from personal experience, you just tell me where he lives and the problem won't happen anymore, capice?)
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Hey
Yeah it is from personal experience but I wouldn't worry bout it I don't know were they are...it kinda sucks it turns out this poem is already posted at my profile so I have to write a new one. lol.
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