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Prince in Tattered Armor

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My

 

love

 

my friend


i give to you

in the midst of your starvation

of love lost.. and found


all i am

and all i have


not because you can not

stand alone

but because

you are worthy of every gift

i can make for you

as my woman


in your grace

i am humbled to be a man

caught in the care of your love


therefore

i tender to you


my soul

my ambition

my dreams for us


for your salvation

i give no less.. than all i am

to be yours

to have as you will

and make your life at peace


from your trials

i see myself reflected in your face


I feel your heart

now that i love you

as i would my self


and i promise


to love

to care

to become your dream

to put your tears aside


i ask you.. take me

to adore you

as you

are


and

hold me

as you will



your prince

in tattered armor





LeeL

Author notes

This is a rework of a poem I love so well with the words made new

It was written for a dear friend, now married

In a list

A contest entry

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  • NurseyPoo
    August 1

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    Truly deserving of trophies. I love the feel and flow of this read. Please give us more. Pen on...~Poo~


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 1
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      Hi Nursey


      What a wonderfull comment to me
      Thank you so much for carring for my words
      I will be writing for a contest you have running
      Then we will see... whom I am in words

      Rick

  • Faithbound gold member
    July 21

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    Beautiful as always. Love the last line.

  • Awww Mr.
    I remember this piece so well,
    it seems even more beautiful now, if
    that is possible.
    Sometime I read your poetry over and over
    again, and each time I get something new from
    it. You are so magical wiht your writing,
    you have such away of coming up with the most
    loving and caring and meaningful piece of art.
    From day one you have amazed me.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Love You Mr.
    Me ~~~

    • Endeavor gold member
      July 8

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      Sweet Joyce


      Thank you for seeing so much in my words
      and caring for it, as a Gold

      I just personally love the words for the meaning
      My pleasure to PIF this contest

      Give me a few days to think of a Contest
      Thank you so much

      Love, Rick

  • Gwenevere
    May 30

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    This is such a beautiful poem of what love should be.Well deserving of the trophies it has recieved, Ros

  • DenyMyLove
    May 30
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    This is beautiful!!!! As usual!!!!

  • Sorry, the system wouldn't let me leave you applausse here.. hmmm... a glitch in the works...
  • Beautiful!!!

    Who would have ever thought of a romantic poem featuring a knight in tattered armor?!!? This is a wonderfully heartfelt piece, and I thank you for sharing. Write on!!! Peace, Cyn

    • Endeavor gold member
      May 30
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      Hi Rose


      Thank you so much for reading this

      so pleased you liked my words

      Rick
  • WOWWWWWWW! I've never read a poem like this. There is so much love and so much more in it that i cant even explain

    You have a true gift. God Bless You!

    ~~gracy~~

    • Endeavor gold member
      May 30
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      Hi Gracy


      WoW is a good comment

      You are kind to read me

      Rick

  • M a r l u x i a
    February 25

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    I like how it is in the concept of a prince to a queen... yet it is a little sad, because the prince is in tattered armor. It really makes me think and wonder "Why is the armor like that?" These are such beautiful words, but why must the person who speaks them have such armor? This is quite the read.

    Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a

    • Endeavor gold member
      February 26
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      Hi Marluxia


      I wrote of the prince in tattered armor
      in the way that most of us will reach love
      arriving there, sometimes dammaged yet more ready

      Thank you for your thoughts on this

      Rick

  • lake of whispers
    January 29
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    you're so sweet. i adore your poem. everywoman would adore


  • BeautifulFlame gold member
    January 23

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    A simple heartfelt smile for this verse.

    Love
    ~Lisa~


  • TransparentHeart
    January 23

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    This poem speaks deep in my heart. It seems as if you are proposing to the person this is directed to if their is someone. I believe that most women are waiting for this special person you re portraying and it gives hope to those who would have stopped believing that someone like this could never exist. I think the beginning is an amazing set to the following poem and it prepares one for the romantic beauty in it. Lovely write.
    -TransparentHeart

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 23

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    So beautiful as always!! You write of love in a way that we all wish to feel.

    I wait for my Prince in tattered armor....

    . Rewarded 4


  • genevieve3
    December 8, 2007
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    is that your ideal of love or what you feel is a womens ideal? ~as you are~


    • Endeavor gold member
      January 23
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      Genevieve


      To answer you, both
      I write of love in the highest level
      and let us as man and women, compermise it down
      As for a woman, they become as amazing as we care to make them be.
      We say, what is true and whome, is beautiful
      Every person carries their own vision

      Good question, Rick

    • Endeavor gold member
      December 8, 2007
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      Hi gg


      My thoughts on love...
      it is not for me, to lay out anothers emotions
      I leave others, to love as they wish
      These are my thoughts of care

      Thank you for reading me
      Rick
  • nothinghere silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    It is beautiful when we are inspired by the beauty of another human, in my book it is not done enough anymore... I like to drown in the liquid pools of hope that are my husbands eyes. The love they contain within them is enough to sustain me through anything I might have to face, it's beautiful that you are providing the same for someone else....

    I am feeling ever so attached to your writing, I am normally a two line commenter, but everything about the way you write has made you an instant favourite and I don't even know you lol... I hope you don't see all these comments as stalking LMAO just someone in awe of talent... real talent

    Karen


    • Endeavor gold member
      September 8, 2007
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      Karen

      You are very kind to read me

      You are very lucky to have a great husband

      I am pleased to be a new favorite

      The best words of love containe deep humility

      Rick

  • geminidiva
    September 6, 2007
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    beautiful!

    Please tell me you married her and now live happily ever after...


    • Endeavor gold member
      September 6, 2007
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      My Friend


      I so wish I could

      I loved her enough in that way

      We were great laying down, tearble standing

      She is gone

      I also wrote "Forever and a Day" for her

  • Dissodatore Cuore
    August 22, 2007
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    That is amazing. Completly amazing. Wow.


    • Endeavor gold member
      September 6, 2007
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      My Friend


      Amazing is good to me

      I thank you

      Rick

  • slayenemy909
    August 22, 2007

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    quite an oath

    I loved how this read like a pledge. It flowed amazingly well and had great sincerity in its words. I am not always into love related poems simply because they often come off as cheesy or cliche', but this was different and I enjoyed it thoroughly. well done.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Whisper Mckee
    August 22, 2007
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    Love this almost sounds like wedding vows


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 23, 2007
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      Whisper


      Thank you for your thoughts

      I may use them some day in that way

      Rick

  • Nature Song silver member
    August 22, 2007

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    So smooth and yet graced from your fine pen. I have no words to describe how I felt reading this lovely poem! Awesome, brillant...some of the words I choose! ~Sie

    . Rewarded 4


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 23, 2007
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      Sweet Sie


      If I moved you, I am pleased

      I appreate you reading me
      your a fine writer in your own right

      I thank you

      Rick

  • Perception
    August 22, 2007

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    Aw. Beautiful write here. Just, amazing!

    Your short lines kept an airy appeal, keeping the mood light.

    Great job!

    • Endeavor gold member
      August 23, 2007
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      Tears


      Thank you for reading me

      Thank you for saying amazing

      Rick

  • A u r i e l l e
    August 22, 2007
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    I know this is you Rick again...nice i should of know you were the king of love poetry

    • Endeavor gold member
      August 22, 2007
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      Hi Aurielle


      You are so correct about the author, you do know me... lol
      I send this to you, because this is my favorite for words of detication to a woman

      I hope these humbel thoughts will surfice

      Rick

  • Forbidden Tempest
    August 22, 2007
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    What a endearing write, it read like a whisper.
    well done and best of luck.


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 22, 2007
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      Forbidden


      Thank you for saying enduring

      I appreate you reading my work

      Rick

  • catz Moderators member
    August 9, 2007

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    What more could a lady want, Rick!! This is such a romantic and loving poem. Any woman would be blessed to have a man who will be all these things for her.

    It's a lovely well written poem


    Dee


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 22, 2007
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      Hi Catz


      Sorry I missed your comment

      I state my feelings in this verse
      and then struggel as any man would, to make it true

      I thank you for your kind thoughts

      Rick

  • malevolent
    August 9, 2007
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    I wasn't aware that they made men like this. This was a very pleasurable read.


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 22, 2007
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      Malevolent


      I consider you comment to be a great complement

      A few who know me, would say I am like my words

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick

  • Jalalbel gold member
    July 30, 2007

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    no tattered armor here

    but a prince dressed in silken strands of gold woven with his lines of love- written by his own hand.
    smile,
    Judy


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 30, 2007
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      Judy


      The finest dream, espacally love
      will tear and wear at our sence of self

      Only in humility, can we serve, a lost word
      and have the care we desire

      I like you poetic responce
      You thought is sweet

      Rick

  • moon2u silver member
    July 29, 2007

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    Another beautiful piece

    Well I must tell you, that you certainly know how to write to touch a womans soul. Not many men can do that. You have been honoured with a rare gift.
    namaste'
    moon2u


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 30, 2007
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      Noon2u

      This verse is not of my makeing
      I felt it, and let my mind creat the words you now read

      Sometimes there are just magic moments in our lives
      Emotions that just press us to the edge of our soul

      That was the time I made these words

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick
  • bergettigirl
    July 25, 2007

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    Every word you express with such beauty. Such intense sweet love every woman dreams of. You express it really well. Keep writing


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 30, 2007
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      Hi Girl


      Your comment tells me you felt the thought well

      We say what are the limits of love
      how deep we car, by our own wish to risk

      Most love on a contingency, pending the return
      I care not, I will risk and crash on the rocks

      A great woman is worth the fall

      Rick

  • Lonewolf2008 gold member
    July 21, 2007

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    delightfully done

    complete surrender to the princess, from the Prince in tattered armour. I am sure she will reply post haste.

    . Rewarded 4


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 30, 2007
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      Wolf


      Nice to have you read my words

      I like your comment

      Rick

  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    July 21, 2007
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    Awesome!!!

    I enjoyed reading this soul-baring, heartfelt poem - it deserves the gold!!! (Just curious why the lowercase letter "i" in some places?) Peace

    . Rewarded 4


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 21, 2007
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      Rose

      Thank you for reading me
      I know you to be a good poet

      You are kind to see my words so well
      I use the small (i) as a thought of humility
      In this, I am secondary, to the loved woman
      A server, if I may say that

      Almost a forgotten term in 21century Pride

      Rick
  • mysty rain
    July 21, 2007

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    BEAUTIFUL!

    Beauty flows so easily from your pen. You write of love that is reminiscent of poets like Elizabeth Barret Browning. This is just so beautiful and keeps the reader entralled to the end. Your friend in Poetry, Mysty Rain


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 21, 2007
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      Mysty


      Love the Browning part of your comment

      I read little of the classice now
      for fear of replicating another`s style

      In this I am free to write, as the words come to me

      Rick
  • WeAreMany
    July 20, 2007

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    A beautifully moving poem. I saw my own loved one in that, and thank you for putting those words out there so perfectly when we cannot. This was truly a joy to read.

    • Endeavor gold member
      July 21, 2007
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      Many


      I say the words for thoes that love and live love

      Thank you for reading me, and caring for my words

      Rick
  • WildWillowTree
    July 16, 2007

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    This is one of the sweetest and most caring poems I've read in a long time. I love it! Oh, and I also love the concept of "tattered armor".

    • Endeavor gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      Wild


      That was a very nice comment

      Thank you for liking the concept

      The words came to me easly

      Rick

  • azlyn gold member
    July 7, 2007

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    Very nice! Loved the concept of the "tattered armor". Very creative write and as usual...so full of true love and pure romance.
    Azlyn


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      Azlyn

      Sometimes the memory of a verse, brings me near tears
      for the thought of the woman they were created for
      Some thoughts are a one time experance
      Yet...
      I am compelled to give them to another
      because they carry with them
      the essance of love... as I wish it, for another

      I say Tattered, because love is often, less than easy

  • michellemybelle gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    I can't believe this has never won a gold

    It is golden as it shows your heart
    humble-as we are small in something as big as love
    and as devoted as wedding vows

    perhaps you can use these words as vows one day, your bride would be blessed

    • Endeavor gold member
      February 3
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      Michelle


      I just saw that this verse was bookmarked as a favorite
      I am honered that you like these words this way
      Thank you for keeping this marked

      Rick

      • michellemybelle gold member
        February 3
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        Rick, you captured love at it's finest, purest moment in this. You are blessed, gifted, to have even thought this, I am blessed to have read and will reread.
        blessings,
        Michelle

    • Endeavor gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      Michelle


      Just reading your words

      and seeing your greatness

      Rick

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 10, 2007
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      Michelle


      To me, in love there is no pride
      just the humility of being loved so deeply

      It is a gift, beyound repayment
      a human treasure

      Rick

  • Dragons Lady
    June 4, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Beautiful. It pulled me in with the title (I love historical romance) and held me with the sweet words. A love so complete that he wants to give his all to her. If only that sort of love were still alive (sigh, daydreaming again). I really love your work. It's nothing short of enthralling. This should have taken a gold trophy or two.


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 4, 2007
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      Hi Angel


      I see from your words, you found the essance of this verse

      Thank you for loving my writing, you are kind

      Rick


  • ibsons hysops
    June 3, 2007

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    this really deserves a gold or two, you do know that right/ this is as graceful a poem as i have read so far since i have been a member at this wonderful site!!!

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 3, 2007
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      Ibsons


      Thank you for the wonderfull comment

      Love to have you read "Forever and a Day" on my Authors Page

      I thank you

      Rick

  • Cannonsfire silver member
    May 26, 2007

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    I would believe this could make a bride very tearful if her knight would say those words as he stood before her. It is a mantra that would sigh a heart of any woman just upon hearing them. So beautiful. Love, C

    . Rewarded 4


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 26, 2007
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      My C.


      That is a great complement
      It is a rare day that I can write like this

      The woman I made these words for, was lost to me
      I loved her for one summer of my life

      She was damaged beyound my skill in care
      As she fell in love, she became more afairade

      I thank you for reading

      Rick

  • coffeeangel316
    May 26, 2007

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    I told you I would read again. It is so beautiful that touched my heart deeply. Thank you for sharing your talent with us because it has sure touched my heart, every poem I have read and also just by talking to you.

    • Endeavor gold member
      May 26, 2007
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      I thank you


      Awesome is a wonderfull word for writing

      The reader realy makes the words live for them, by the nature of their own history, and depth of care within.

      If you feel the words well, you are blessed as am I...

      I thank you for reading

      Rick
  • magneticblue
    May 26, 2007

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    Prince in tattered armor brings to mind the exact image this poem painted. Wonderful title, it grabbed my attention, and the actual poem was very heartfelt and beautiful.

  • coffeeangel316
    May 26, 2007
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    Awesome

    This is awesome. I love this poem. I will have to come back and read it over and over. It is awesome.


  • Gwenevere
    May 21, 2007
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    Wonderful

    I love your poetry.To see the face of love in the mirror of tattered armour.AHHHH!!!!!! As you can tell I love anything to do with knights etc.This poem evoked so many visions for me.Well done on another intruiging write, Ros


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 21, 2007
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      Gwen


      I can see how you may like this style from your name

      You may like "Forever and a Day" as well on My Authors Page

      Thank you for your kind words

      Rick