Do you watch everything I do?
My curtains are drawn
Does that excite you?
I see only darkness
As my candle dances...
I look out my window,
But see no one there...
You linger
But never touch me...
And i wonder
Which one of us
Is the voyeur~
Author notes
I couldnt find a good enuf pic to go with the poem
Whe i hit vouyer in google all I got was porno sites what an eye opener that was geez:(
If you all know where I can find a better pic please IM me
Love ya all
Susan~
Written May 22nd, 2003
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Sucked me in with Tittle, had to come and check it out.
A tight, well written poem, short but full of story none the less. Again, presentation to be noted, always captivating - words suit the tone and mood of the piece. -
I love this! Simple and flowing nicely. The quesion at the end... ah... yes... who is the voyeur?
Great write...:)
My best to you!
Mary Ann -
This is a really neat, creative, and funny poem. I think the pic suits it very well. :-D Smiles great job. :-D smilessss peeling
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LOVE THIS! Especially the way you turned it around at the end. Yes, this is terribly erotic without having to be nasty. It's amazing the thoughts you evoke without even saying anything erotic! lovely lovely~
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excellent!!
Absolutely perfect....I wouldn't change a word. The last line is classic...thanks for creating it
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hmmm...i remember posting(and removing) one with a very similar theme. Being watched...knowing one is being watched...watching the watcher...
oooh, just conjures up all kinds of intense little images in my mind! Like this one, Susan.
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Susan I loved the picture, and the subject you shed a cleaner light on that subject than I could have imagined, I thought you had a peeping tom problem , and was what is this write LOL< but well still not totally sure, but then the way you made it seem like it was cooperative, actually added a weird, in a nice way, romantic fee to it, I like how you did that, was a wonderful write, took a lot of talent to pull that one off sweety,
Kindest regards as always,
most sincerely,
joe -
so few words...such a powerful write in it's own way..Loved this..
what artis said of this piece is exactly the way it was as i read..to a point..hehe...he tends to add stuff that kinda makes ya go drool...LOL
Excellent!
Much love to you
~Pamela -
This is fantastic! Yay! I like this a lot better than the one about country air . . . this is something more personal; this is an admission of a barely-conscious indulgence. This is erotic and dark and mischievous, I love it! It digs into you, scooping out your good stuff and splatting it on the page. Great write.
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oooooooo, susan, oooooooo.. now you know i like this one, this is sooo my style. I wish i could think up a poem this rand. really, sex emoliates from it..very powerful, i love it so much, write more like this one, its great.
~*Lynn*~ -
what an excellent write!
this is such a simple little poem, yet it has multi-layers
of meanings and feelings. complex and yet tight and concise.
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hehe...all i can think of are dirty pictures
but that's cuz im kinda dirty. i think in a way everyone is some type of voyeur...you can't help it..you always wanna look, whether you should or no...it's like death..everyone hates it, but everyone can't help but look (ie: car accidents).
i liked this...very subtle and very erotic at the same time.
Nyx... -
good read
Nice image and then I love the way you turn things around so that you are watching the person who is watching you. What a nice poem. -
It is extremely well done love it
great stuff! can't wait to read more
Ambre -
The picture is brilliant and it does fit the poem as this isn't in your face or seedy.. I love the twist in the tail.. very well done :)
~GILL~xx -
I think that this picture is perfect for the poem... This poem is such a beautiful one. it is short but very powerful.
Yvonne:) -
Repo can't spell voyuer at all LOL
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Dancing eyes in the dark of night,
Drawn toward your window light.
In search of beauty, long forgot,
I see you there then see you not.
Vain wishs to your window pressed,
That you might hold me to your breast,
And comfort in your soothing charms,
To be made new within your arms.
Oops. ya musta seen me, LOL Honest susan, I was just licking the window clean.
I think we're all vouyers in a way though. -
the picture is in your mind when you read this...you watching me....me watching you...you knowing I am or so I think..you do..me thinking you want me watch...me watching and knowing not what you are thinking...breathless anticipation that something really sexy might just occur....then it does....trash can tumbles as feet fly due to innattention to balance and thoughts elsewhere...hastily grabbed sheets cover all that was...and skulking feet pitter patter down the alley in a hasty pudding in one's shorts....lol....just going by what i've read of course...Artis
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excellent
Susan , what a great write The twist in the end made it carnal versus scarey. I sure was not expecting that at all
Reenie
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aaaaah I think the picture goes well with your write Susan....
Seductive and sensual...and i love the twist at the end...
certainly makes one wonder.
Ann -
Excellent
Naught, naughty, naughty!
But just enough naughtiness to make it nice ....
Love the way you have done this Susan ....
Take every care,
Sammy,
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perfect
This has an almost ghost like quality to it...chilly yet erotic...I love the silky naughtiness of the piece...As always I am in love with your words and the picture just sets the verse off perfectly...HUGS, Ro -
Excellent! Enjoyed the read!
HeeHee Titillating poem you wrote, Sis! Good question you ask at the end!! I think the pic' is fine, too!
Love Ya,
< 3 Maureen
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Excellent piece, Susan...
Sounds like she is an exhibitionest...
leaving the curtains open...
a voyeur's dream come true.
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a very beautiful poem.. I love the simplicity of the words, and ... ok, I'm tired, so bear with me... I dunno, the idea behind it and... erg, I don't know how to say what I'm thinking...
But, I did have a distinct feeling of 'wow, this is a great poem. I love this' when I read it...
And the girl in the picture is purty
-Heather -
Oh i like the Picture Susan...Think it's just right
This poem leaves a lot to the imagination
Kind a bit of excitment as well as the fear of the unknown
I Surpose it would be OK" if it was someone your wanted
to be looking ..but not someone you didn't...now that
wouldn't be good..LOL...Wonderful writing Susan*
You seductress You!! Really great job on this Hon*
Love and Smiles to You! :) Mina~
Edited on May 23 because ''. -
This is very well written and I love that picture. I know what it's like to be watched. I've been stalked before, no fun. You feel like you can't breathe and guys that do that can be dangerous.
Red -
I like that, it was very good. It is what soft and sensual. Awesome! Hugs, Tisha
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yeah, susan, who is the voyeur you are him?
interesting turn of events here...
i liked this one!
blessed be
mike
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nice twist on the end...
which one of us is the voyeur....
nice
Tamars -
This was very sensual..and good..
Carrie -
This is nice hun, and why change the piccie, I think it goes well with this poem.
Love the way you ended this, hmmmmm, indeed!
Hugs, ~ Ce -
What a seductive, heady write.
Has a hint of fantasy ...is he
out there? Are you posing?
Anticipating? Hoping?
Thrilling and naughty. -
SMILES
Hi Susan
MMM this was sooo sensual and ummm niiice. I love the turn of events in this piece WHO is the voyeur YOU ir ME? That's fantastic! This was very hmmm voyeuristic thank you for sharing this pulsing write with me.
~Johnny -
this was so good. i think that you did this one with stye and grace. it made the poem of your is so good that it made feel like i was taking a sneek peek. i really like this poem of your. i thank you for shareing this poem with us.
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such the naughtiness to this
but done so tasteful
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