-she shivers-
Courage
overcomes
fear of
failure in flight
and feet take the jump.
-holds breath in-
Free falls
ruffle feathers-
fighting fatigue-
fathoming futility.
Great expectations
and wishes for nothing
but impact and bang
are concieved
during the drive to down under.
-screams-
Anticipation
hurts...
It does.
It really instigates
excruciating physical pain.
Air is intoxication,
wind is daggers,
wait is endless.
-smiles-
Sweet is the suicide
when sought-
arms extened-
body embracing
gravity's wish-
racing towards
the gravestone.
-!!!!BANG!!!!!-
Collision
creats calm
and provides
the craved comfort
in chaotic closure.
-and-
Bang is Music
Blood spatter is Art
Death is Deliverance.
-sleeps-
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i cant but to read this again and again and again..
omg hana how just friggin amazing u are..
pure amazement.. (duno if thats how its spelled bt wth lol..)
~rana~
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I don't know what to say about this poem sweety!! It makes me sad cuz you give me some amazing comments and then you go and leave me speachless with everything you write.
You are so amazing and this poem... *sigh* just as amazing as you!! Thank you for the wonderful words you place upon your pages!!
Love,
~Krys~
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Dramatic as usual from you Hana Well done
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Sleepless says:
she;s good,
Sleepless says:
i guess,
Sleepless says:
in a way that i can't really connect to her poetry unless i read 1000 times
guess the elves went to hawai this year... says:
heh yeah!
guess the elves went to hawai this year... says:
she's definitely my fav!
Sleepless says:
guess the elves went to hawai this year... says:
and she's a really great person
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one think i can say is that u're one of a kind.
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the fall .. the screams .. the sounds .. the pain .. the shot .. the blood .. the art .. the smiles .. the whispering silence .. the forever unwakin' soul ..
its all .. amazin ..
me
xxx
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You drew a whole path from the awakening till the fall ..
To me.. This seemed like a procedure.. a road to be walked through when we're savoring the pain. However I do believe that after each fall, it is up to that individual whether he wants to rise again and continue.. or just stay "asleep"..
In your words.. there's just something that grabs the reader into this different world..
Man, this is amazing..
Seriously.. u r friggin outstanding!
Mwah
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"Air is intoxication,
wind is daggers,
wait is endless."
[...]
"Bang is Music
Blood spatter is Art
Death is Deliverance."
wow
~rana~
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"Free falls
ruffle feathers-
fighting fatigue-
fathoming futility."
hana ! how do you do it ? it's just amazing, this music that seems to spread from every word you write...
beautiful piece...i'm gonna repeat amazing kamen
all my love
serge
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hana oh my friggin god whoever whatever wherever she may be (still talkin bout the god lol)!!!
ummm.. what to say.....
this was breathtaking
the fall.. yeah... well, one might think that u actually jumped, died and now telling us bout the whole process of "the fall" ...
this was so real.. the description of every single phase u go thru as ur falling... OMG!!!
umm.. im out of words.. again!
OH MY FRIGGIN GOD!!!
~rana~
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Intense and beautifully done
Hi, my friend....
You have a way with dark poems that I do not have..This is mindblowing...
Intense and beautifully done, my friend
Lynda
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awesome
damn
come here u dnt know what to say it this is just beautiful
Sweet is the suicide
when sought-
arms extened-
body embracing
gravity's wish-
racing towards
the gravestone.
Collision
creats calm
and provides
the craved comfort
in chaotic closure.
wow so gr8 so my hana love u
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So well done the impact of your trip is frame by frame in experience of hopelessness and loss...a great poem...
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