From the depths of despair, impaired and too scared to move on
Too afraid, but now look what I've made, who do I have to prove wrong
A new song to sit in the archives, art hides behind this ugly face
A waste of space, can't keep the pace, the dis preceeds my grace
As I proceed to engrave my name deep inside of anothers brain
I'm so ashamed, I'm lame, I'd sell my soul to obtain some fame
I take that back, a knife in the back of the people I love the most
If I don't re-do the done and gone's then I'm already a ghost
So here's a toast to the king of "What If's" cracka T won't look back
The same mind that provides these rhymes' the degredation of crack
The segregation, not black, I'll go away and I won't come back
My words have prescence like presents under the tree, they're unwrapped
All of my songs are un-rapped, so long, long gone, with wind I blow
My better half is my better "have", since she's been starting to show
I don't know what I'm going to do, I don't know what I'm going to say
Another month til' our bun is done, two times a month I get paid
When I look into his eyes, I'll cry, and try to decipher a plan
Cause I know deep in my heart it'll take a boy to raise a man
Author notes
My first biological child is due on the 22nd of January, And I have to admit I'm afraid.
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderfully written my friend !
I really admire the part where you wrote.I don't know what I'm going to do,I don't know what I'm going to do that is me mostn of each and every day.Good Luck! And keep up the wonderful write's I feel that you will go far in life. So just keep your head held up high,and do not worrie for you are giving everyone some good ,Wonderfully,sound,careing,honest and meaningful view's on life as it is for all of us here,
*******LoveSpell-PurpleRose*******Brenda gae harper
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Oh. This is a nice poem that you have written here. It sounds a lot like a rap of some sort. That's what it is, isn't it? The message is very thoughtful though as you're thinking about your life and what you should be doing. I think it's ok to be scared because a baby is such a big responsibility but it's amazing that you're trying to think about your child. I think that means you'll have a great chance at being a good daddy! And congratulations!
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read araby by james joyce
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quite impressive
i just want to point out how the rhyme scheme in this poem flows really well. Many poems have such stressed rhyme scheme, but i didn't see that here. good job -
so craziness but thats the same day my friend is due...
anyway theres alot of joy that comes with having a child adn its all gonna be ok...im sure u will be an excellent dad...the fact that u care enough to be afraid in and of itself speaks volumes -
Feelings...
Well done! It show a depth of feeling and understanding which proves the boy has already became a man. Hope all goes well for you and yours.
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This is written in a very unusual way, but that makes it stand out. It had a really nice flow to it and was easy to read, very creative in the way the pieces fit together. Congratulations on being a dad
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hmmm i heard that saying before????
or not?
lol
anyway
a great write
i cannot say dont be afaid
for it is really scary
raising a child of your own
thinking how can you give him a better future
but im telling you
once the child is there
smiling at you, kissing you, giving you things that can make your world right
everything will be easy (it'll be easy for you to get up and create a layout for your family's future)
good luck
(a brilliant honest piece i say)
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Honest. Excellent
This expression kept my attention to the last word "man". I can relate to this because I was that boy who raised men and women. Sometimes I had no idea where the sustenence was coming from. Pampers milk food rent light bill phone bill one job not enough. Living just enough for the city was a goal. No matter what was going on that child will look back at you with a smile and their innocence will give you fuel. This write is real contemporary honest and I loved it. Keep up the good work. Honest superb Excellent!!!
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