Upon a wintered hilltop
Swathed in silver light
lays the shatter of deceit
the pieces dull against the might
Conquering the heart of she
Chains that bind the soul
falling through the darkened sky
it's keeper take thy toll
to fall upon a blackened ground
on wings that cannot fly
nevermore the woman true
while heaven's angels cry
Feel the wrath love brings us all
to darken hearts the black one sings
a song to haunt our fall.
Author notes
~~to be published May 2007 by the international library of poetry~~
I got alot of hubub over it at school so hey... maybe it's actually good.One of my earlier poems.
A contest entry
- Angst and Entwine by BarbedWireButterfly.
552 points, ended January 1, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - x.Dark/Options ♥ by love tank x.
550 points, ended January 3, 2007, 30 entries
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450 points, ended January 8, 2007, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - blades or love??... by my savior-pedro.
300 points, ended March 22, 2007, 16 entries
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think, or at least whats you interpretation.
Comments
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this is a very deep and emoitonal write. there is so much impact and meaning in such little amount or words, it worked out awesome. I really love the last verse, adds alot of power to the write and really finishes it off.
great write.
thanks for enterign and gooduck -
this was a good write and I can really relate to what you are saying and feeling in this poem..your words are very strong, powerful and emotional..keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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Great
This is so.... something i don;t know really. It rock's.
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good poem..... wow. lol. good luck!! and thanx for entering!
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I really liked this poem! Where'd you get the idea for this poem> You sure have a lot of talent when it comes to poetry! Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! My favorite lines were
"Feel the wrath love brings us all
to darken hearts the black one sings
a song to haunt our fall." Take care and once again good luck
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kick ass!
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it rocks! i love it, so much depth in just a few short words. and i totaly agree with kelly. great rythum!
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it's really beautiful, in a dark sort of way. You express love from a realistic viewpoint instead of sugarcoating it, and it really works for you well done.
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"to fall upon a blackened ground
on wings that break and cry
nevermore the woman true
while heaven's angels cry"
I love those lines This is a very touching && sad piece [a lot of what I was looking for] && you did a good job. Thanks for entering! -
I like this. Is there more? It just seemed to end. Meh, its still pretty awesome. The image is pretty cool too. You use the stanzas as an impact effect thing, good work. Ok, good luck. Thanks for entering
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It's really good. I like the flow and the rhymes! ^^
<3 Kelly -
Welcome to AP
A truely haunting poem. You speak of love with such sadness. I like to flow and structure. The rhyme doesn't feel forced and that is good as many have trouble with that.
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