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Among The Haunted

Asleep in hallways paved with linoleum,
Woken in rooms of haunted dreams.
Tears of grief intermingled,
With screams of the lost.

Alone in the heart of desperation,
Escape sought in the soul.
Lost within the labyrinth of memory,
Distorted images of death.

Idols of love,
Lost with dust from the tomb.
Anger insatiable,
Overflowing banks of misery.

Images of past resurface,
Brillancy in light.
Withdrawn at attempts to touch again,
Numbers on cards are all that remain.

Where inside hallowed ground,
Lasting impressions death.
Carved signatures of pain,
Among the haunted. 

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  • GuardianPhoenix7289
    January 30, 2007
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    Interesting....

    I liked this one, interesting topic for sure, and it really grabbed my attention. Your use of words like insatiable and hallowed, and the like, were definitely captivating and impressive! Very nice! This almost describes how humans are becoming I would say! Sadly... =/ Good job!!!


  • starlight--x
    January 22, 2007
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    Loved it You seem like a pretty rockin' gal. x


  • darklilangel
    January 14, 2007
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    Wow. You said mine was good? Your amazing. So may I ask where do you go to college? My nephew just graduated from Indiania University. You have alot of depth. Im sorry for whatever loss this was. Have a great day!


  • dream5111
    January 7, 2007
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    very good


  • me steve
    January 5, 2007

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    I feel so at a loss

    Reading this poem Aidenn is giving me such
    Insights as to what I that am so faraway as I read
    Between the lines, like your sister you both show
    Such skills at a young age, Guess that comes from
    Having a great MOM. Thank you very much
    For writing such master pieces just marvelous, and
    Gifted, for the first time I am speechless.


    • Aidenn
      January 6, 2007
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      thanks!

      wow. thanks alot for the wonderful comment. It really means alot to me that you enjoy my poem. Thanks again. I have never recieved a comment as nice as this.
      THANKS!!!!!!!!!
      Holly


  • Grey Mouser
    December 19, 2006
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    My dear, Can feel your loss so strongly in this write. The pain is always with you, never to go away. Which is good in its way, for it allows you to keep the memories alive and strong. Take care my friend. You can always call on me anytime.
    Be well and be blessed Holly.
    Love Dave

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