I had to have an ultrasound,
To find out what was wrong.
"Your baby has died, I'm sorry"
Was the conclusion they came to.
They sent me home again that day,
Why? I have no idea
They said that they were busy,
And that this would have to wait.
So for three long days,
I had to grieve,
for a child that was within.
On the Monday you were born,
Very late into the night.
I got to hold you in my arms,
i had to say goodbye.
We buried you on Friday
In a coffin, oh so small.
I could have fit a shoe in it,
It nearly broke my heart.
But now I hold you close to me,
Forever in my heart.
And wait to see you, once again,
When from this earth I pass.
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499 points, ended April 5, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
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aw :(
this poem is so sad... im sorry for your loss.
it expresses alots of feelings sad and really melancholic ones.
I loved it.I really dont have a favorite part. but i was trully amazed by the entire it.
Thanks for entering this gorgeous piece.
i really cant imagine how that feels.
Thanks again, you have talent. <3
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Hmm. A rhyming scheme might've worked well for this poem. Anyway, tons and tons and tons of emotion here. Truly heart-touching. Thanks for entering!
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Aww..seriosuly powerful stuff, I don't think I can think of anything worse than losing a child. My parents gave birth to twins (very prematurely) before I was born and one of them died...I am sorry for your loss. Good luck and thanks for sharing your experience. Take care x
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This poem is so painfully tragic, it's always the worst when a baby dies without being given the chance to live, I'm so sorry this had to happen to you, the poem was beautifully written, best of luck
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Oh my gosh! How sad. I am really sorry for your lose. This poem is beautiful in so many ways and I am seriously crying right now because I know someone who lost their child due to a miscarriage.
I am sorry, once more.
~ I.t.
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very sad and emotional. nice write thanks for the entry.
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What Imagery
While I can not relate, I can emphatize. Your words are a lasting tribute to your child. The love expressed here will be an eternal one.
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so sad, im srry for ur loss, this poem has a lot of feelings/emotions in it
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Very beautiful and moving. Losing a child is such a painful experience. My sister had the same experience, she carried her baby for a week after she had already died. It was very overwhelming. I am so sorry for your loss. I hope you find peace for your heart. Thank you for your entry in my contest.
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God you brought me to tears with this it is so beautiful but terribly sad I loved the last 4 lines. It reminds me of lifes trials they will always knock you down to make you stronger. I loved this it is so beautiful. It also shows that to feel the words that wrote this poem you must have a very amazingly strong wonderful heart. I wish you every happiness in the future.
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I'm so sorry for your loss...
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So touching and sad... I really enjoyed this poem, it has so much emotion. Thank you so much for this wonderful poem and good luck in my contest.
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This is a very sad poem that you have written. I can't imagine how horrible it must feel to lose your unborn child. So innocent and true, but not destined unfortunately
I wish you a lot of strength in your grief
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This is beautiful. I can feel the pain you have and my heart aches with you. I am sorry for you loss, but your baby is safe in the loving arms of God and sometimes, thats the only thing that can keep you sane.
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very good
this poem is realy good, im sorry for your loss but you bring your child back to life in your words, very well written and thank you for entering, good luck -
I know what it is like to be with someone when they have lost a baby.... im sorry that this has happened to you.. my heart is with you through any struggles you may come across. Thank you for your entry.
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Wow...
The whole thing was just deep, disturbing, painful all the way through, and I am so sad that you had to go through such a thing. It's always tragic for a parent to have to bury their child, but thank you very much for being strong enough to share this with the rest of us. I am honoured. I will keep you and your family in my prayers.
God Bless,
Laura
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Moving
Thank you for your contest submission. Very moving piece, too bad it doeasn't rhyme, ( see rules). On a personal point, this subject is one that is close to me, if a slightly diffferent variation, so I did feel the pain within the prose. Good Luck -
Indeed this is a very sad poem, but you write very well! Where'd you get the idea for this poem? My poems aren't even close to how good yours are! Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! My favorite lines are
"So for three long days,
I had to grieve,
for a child that was within." Thanks again and take care!!
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oh man...this was really sad also. i'm really sorry about what happened. but just remember, the sun always shines after it rains.
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WOW I hope this didnt really happen but if it did i am sooo sorry. This is VERY moving and tear jerking. good job and keep it up. Good luck in the contest.
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wow, i almost wanted to cry, I could not imagin that kinda pain. If my baby died within me it would kill me...Your poem was really well written and i am so very sorry that happend.
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deeply touching
I'm so sorry for your loss. It sounds like you've been to hell and back through all these experiences. I take my hat off to you for managing to capture the raw emotion involved and it was very brave of you to share such personal feelings. Best of luck for the future,
~K xx
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this is beautiful darl..your words touched deep within..losing your baby would would be so hard and yet you still soldier on..even in times when deep down i know you are hurting so bad..thanks for sharing hun...told you id be sooky lala..loves ya heaps mwah
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First, let me thank you for entering my contest.
Second, i am sorry for your loss.
Third:
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SO SAD
i have no words to comment on this,
deep and painful,
this is a very brave write
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