My love for you, never to faulter nor break,
No matter to what extent you became more fake,
Illuminating candle of my heart displaying joy,
Once lit so bright, now so dim, life so morbid,
The mirror of my mind, left shattered and broken,
Can only reflect my most inner and deep desire,
That of which will never become almost fulfilled,
Whilst your twisted snake tongue continuously spins,
Still spins your web of deceit, lies, and betrayal,
Reaching out, I held onto my belief in you, my love,
Only to be left behind, meaningless in my entirety,
Enveloped in sorrow, I fall into immense darkness,
Forever entangled in your never ending web of lies,
Addicted to you, I'll never try to struggle or strive,
Strive for my freedom from you, with my life renewed
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Well, I'm not so sure I like this. Care to give me some feedback?
Honest critiques welcome
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i love the dramatic effect of this poem really potrays alot of my own feelings alot of different times in my own life..i liked the part that read.." Reaching out, I held onto my belief in you, my love,
Only to be left behind, meaningless in my entirety," such a wonderful piece keep up the great work dear...
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Can only refleft my most inner and deep desire,
reflect?
This is beautiful. I've never seen you write something so elegantly before and if you did this all by yourself, you are definitely growing and getting better. I loved the way this way written and the meaning behind it. It reminds me of a couple of people.
Proud of you, so be proud of yourself.
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Hmm...who does it remind you of?
+ Yep. I did write it on my own 8D
Thanks for the comment and the note on the type <3
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