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Song Of Myself

I see hatred of differences everywhere I go…
I see suffering in everyone, hidden from the world…
I see lies of love breaking apart families…
I see flowers overpowering concrete, one of many…
I see sacrifices for the untrue with the consequence of heartbreak…
I see selfishness and egos blinding love and charity…

I hear the sound of imaginary voices and melodies…
I hear the sound of rocks shattering hearts of glass…
I hear the sound of evil giggling from the mouths of succubi…
I hear the sound of bells announcing the arrival of new souls…
I hear the sound of Future plotting heartache decades in advance…
I hear the sound of thunder destroying small lives as it strikes the ground…

I understand the hurt and hated…
I understand that people can be afraid and unconfident…
I understand the weather changes to rejuvenate the earth…
I understand that we can’t answer all of life’s questions…
I understand that I need to be myself to accept others…
I understand the need to surrender yourself for your loved ones…

I look at the many broken homes…
I look at humanity destroying the natural and pure…
I look at the mess that we have brought ourselves into…
I look at the hearts thrown away, just over a small dispute…
I look for the heroes of this life, and the next…
I look towards the sky in hope of change…

I think that everyone needs a second chance…
I think that there is healing for the hurt…
I think that there is enough acceptance for all…
I think nature can overpower its obstacles of humanity…
I think that I have a place in someone’s heart…
I think that the wholesome will prevail in this world…

I feel abandonment when people escape from their duties and responsibilities for petty reasons…
I hear the silent cries of those running from Fury’s handymen…
I see death lying in a hole, or scattered in the wind; massacring ones’ paradise…
I know betrayal in the purest form of love and hate, seen only in our pasts…
I sense the hatred in lives across the nation… across the world…
I heed battle fields scattered with bloodied warriors still fighting for their souls…
I observe narcissistic creatures evading the needy with greed…
I hear Plague’s whisper as it preys on yet another unsuspecting victim…
I am saddened by the indolence of friends and loved ones…
I hate the pollutants that are ruining out natural world…

I feel that in life, you can fall, float, or fly…
To fall is to die. To fly is to live.
Flying would be the best,
Since your heart is going upward,
Not plummeting into the nothingness.
But if you choose to fall, you may miss your chance,
And have to come to terms with death in its rawest form.
To those that choose to float: nice job giving up. I would rather fall.

Nature teaches you your finest truths.
Below the ground, where the worms writhe,
Where our loves are buried, and where dirt molds,
We learn that we can help this earth,
But we must give ourselves in return.

I am part of this world. Nature accepts my soul into its bosom.
I feel like I can climb the mountain,
But I am shot down by superficial expectations…

I am the daughter, the master,
The lonely heart in a sea of genes…
Lover of all animals, gentle caretaker of few…
The shoulder to cry on when things get tough,
The heart to crush if you absolutely need to…

I smile upon the world, but cry about my life…
My soul can’t take much more,
Though, I haven’t grown up all the way…

I must have someone’s approval,
Even if it a small thing, there has to be acceptance…
I am disappointed in many, miserable about myself.
Imagination rules me… scares me…
All in all, I am me. Take me… or leave me.

Author notes

Who can tell me where that last line is from (the last half).. Guess..

I made this for a school assignment.. It is a take-off of Walt Whitman's poems "Song of Myself", "I Hear America Singing", and "I Sit and Look Out".
The instructions were:

"...Add at least 5 specific images and details to EACH of the followng statements. Use the literary element parallelism in these lines. Look at "Song of Myself" for examples. [I see.. I hear the sound of.. I understand.. I look.. I think].
...Write a catalog of at least 10 injustices (bad things) you are aware of from the past or present. Refer to "I Sit And Look Out" if you need hints.
...Use the literary element repetition to discuss your personal views of life and death in one stanza.
...End the poem with a section of yourself. Who are you? Make a catalog of attributes of characteristics that are unique to you. Dont be shy - be pround, be boastful! Talk about your individuality, your philosophies, your truth, your vision of life!"

Yeap.. thats what she said.. and this is what I got out of that! You can make your own if you want.. send it to me..

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  • GirlyLissa
    December 19, 2006
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    Great

    I may never know exactly how to move on and forgive you and myself but I can tell you this your not the only one who is jealous because I cant even come close to how good you are at writing.If Mrs.Talbott doesnt give you an advanced she's crazy, great work.


    • Snippy
      December 19, 2006
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      I got an advanced


    • Snippy
      December 19, 2006

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      She wanted me to read it to the whole school..>.> Im not good at that.. I dont think that I could do it.. and thanks..