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~ Winter's Grace ~

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~ Winter’s Grace ~

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....Whiteness...

A ray so bright engulfed my sight

in it’s midst, a peacock in celestial lightness

with feathers whiter than swans, took flight

Rapt within bewitching dreams, tumbling askew

as pure as white in a tangled sky of heaven’s hue

...Christmastide...

Sparkling snow gems and the birthday of a King

though earth is frigid, hearts are warmed inside

Lights adorn the fuzzy firs and the children sing

a star, beams radiance over me and you

as pure as white in a tangled sky of heaven’s hue

...Gifts...

An angel’s wing drops a dazzling plume

to tango in light breezy snow on a powdered drift

Winter’s scramble in a masquerade costume

delightfully majestic, when a frosty peacock flew

as pure as white in a tangled sky of heaven’s hue

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Author notes

In dedication to my young brother now in Heaven...

Written in the form of 'Wordflair' my own creation.

A contest entry

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  • trekkergirl
    August 28, 2008
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    very well written. I am sorry that your brother has gone to heaven. As my favorite character Mr. Spock of star trek would say... "I grieve with thee." This was beautiful and I loved the picture. It helped me to think highly of this poem. Thanks for joining my contest.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    you've been hoodwinked!

    Oh my, this is rather well done is it not? such a marvelous dedication and I know he is most pleased.

    sorry for the loss however.

    Peace be to you.


  • tawk gold member
    August 10, 2007
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    Hood-Wink!

    Such a beautiful and touching poem you have dedicated to your brother. I too have a brother in heaven who left on December 5th about 10 years ago. Maybe they will meet in heaven that would be a joy. Sis what a wonderful and so full of love and hope poem.

    Excellent write, you have just been Hood-Winked sis


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    August 10, 2007
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    HOODWINKED !!!

    This is a grand poem you have dedicated to your wonderful brother. Your Wordflair poems are SO GOOD!
    This one is packed with imagery and depth of feeling. Wordflair is an outstanding tool with which a poet can craft a meaningful and lovely poem with.

    You have been Hoodwinked by your beloved Bandits.

    Dennis


  • blondone
    March 26, 2007

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    Oh so stunning, I've said this before and I must say it again this wordflair form makes the most beautiful poems I've ever read...This write is stunning from the picture to the backdrop to the flow of words, the imagery it gives is so outstanding, just when I think I've read your most beautiful write I get the chance to read another...written from the heart P.S. you've been Hood-Winked by the Poetic Bandits


  • Lady-Pegasus
    March 26, 2007

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    Ah my friend *sigh* I want to write like you whenI grow up, hehe. Such a wonderfully composed piece, so eloquent and elegant. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *

    YOU HAVE JUST BEEN HOODWINKED ; Courtesy of the Poetic Bandits


  • Tam
    December 23, 2006
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    Elegant Form...

    And beautifully penned! Such beauty from words is amazing to behold.
    This is simply spectacular! Congrats on the Bronze...
    A breathtaking read. May memories of your brother fall upon your heart like the gentle flakes of fresh fallen snow from Heaven.
    Blessings! Tammy


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 22, 2006
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    My Dear Sis :f~

    I have already commented on this poem from the contest, however, after reading it again here in the Group, I must say, I can't believe.....well....yes I can.....I can believe how beautiful it is....it's an image of you.....perfection ~

    brother Bear ~

  • Thedragonisgone
    December 22, 2006

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    Radiant

    This is a fantastic dedication piece. Hopefully this has been a healing write. The Holidays can be bittersweet when we know we will not meet all of our loved ones on this side of Heaven. I am sorry for your loss. This will be the second christmas since my grandfather's passing - he was like a father to me. Take care and I wish you peace.


  • grannyeri gold member
    December 21, 2006
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    A lovely presentation you have here - the whiteness of the falling snow, the white peacock and the lettering all make this such a great entry into the contest - winning bronze is a plus and congratulations on that win.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 21, 2006
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    This poem is amazing . . . I love the wordflair form and your use of imagery is splendid! I wish that I could have a whitee Christmas . . . but it is summer here right now. Your words have left my imagination open to the beauty of the season . . . very emotive writing

    Stay sweet

    Polly


  • ShelleyA gold member
    December 21, 2006
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    Hi Lilac. Just stopping by to let you know how much I enjoyed this poem. I've commented on this one before, but I want to congratulate you on winning Bronze. Well deserved dear friend. Take care. Shelley


  • PerfectImperfection
    December 21, 2006

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    Very lovely and unique form, well written and creatively expressed! Great use of soft yet vibrant shades of imagery - sharing a tribute in all winter's glory. Best wishes!

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    December 20, 2006
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    Breathtakingly Beautiful

    I can't even find the words to tell you how much I love this one. I would not change a thing and am envious of such talent. I have come to admire your writes and look forward to reading many, many more of them dear.


  • Lady Altheia
    December 20, 2006

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    I love the background and the poem. Youtr words and imagery paint a beautiful winter wonderland. Your brother would be proud of you.


  • December 19, 2006
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    Wow

    Sis, this is a beautifully written and one that has gotten me wishing for a White Christmas... as of now, it's going to be a green Christmas here in Toronto . Keep up the great work Sis.

    Cheers
    Terry

  • Arkbear gold member
    December 19, 2006
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    My Dearest Sis ~

    I left a message on the contest page hoping that everyone will know that it was YOU that helped me to win this Gold ~
    You are forever loving and giving in your time and talents ~
    Congrats on your trophy sweety ~
    Your poem is a winner for sure ~

    brother Bear ~


  • pixxiepoetess
    December 18, 2006
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    Forgot applause. So here it is

  • pixxiepoetess
    December 18, 2006
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    You have a magic pen, I just know it. This is a stunning tribute to your brother. Your rhyme and meter are delightful as always. Your imagery in this piece is also wonderful. I'd wish you luck in the contest, but I'm sure you don't need it. --->pixxie<---


  • Lauren Noir
    December 18, 2006

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    Honey this is a slice of perfection
    The images are superb and the emotions are so exquisite you could just about touch them
    And I delved into your mind with this one
    Your beauitful, thoughful mind

    just the message....stunning
    I can't explain it really, I was just moved

    Love as alwasy my beauitiful mum
    I just want to give you all the huggles in the world

  • ShelleyA gold member
    December 18, 2006
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    Splendidly Written Verse

    Hi Lilac. A beautiful write and message. This is an excellent Wordflair. Lovely imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Vivid descriptives. Excellent word choice. Lovely metaphor. Very nice alliteration. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read. Shelley


  • WolfHeart
    December 18, 2006
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    Exquisite

    This is as delicate and lovely as a snowflake. Intricate beauty that haunts. "Rapt within bewitching dreams, tumbling askew

    as pure as white in a tangled sky of heaven’s hue"

    These are my favorite lines. Everything about this is a treat to the senses.

    hugs Wolfie

  • Arkbear gold member
    December 17, 2006
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    Superb ~

    The form is most unique ~
    The beauty which radiates from this write has your signature all over it Sis~
    Carefully you painted your hearts love for your brother ~
    Each verse is splendid hun ~
    I wish you alll the best in this contest ~
    brother Bear ~

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