If you've got a good woman
be sure to treat her right
give her roses in the daytime
give her all your love at night,
consider her with tenderness
if you don't fit the bill,
she can always find another man that will.
You can tell her every day
you'll always love her so
but if you don't prove it to her
she will never know,
don't treat her like your cook
or someone you can take to bed,
or you'll find her love for you
will soon be dead.
If you've got a good woman
never wear a frown
you should always be happy
and never put her down,
and once she shows her love for you
hold her if you can,
all you really need to do
is be a good man.
A contest entry
- Rhyme ^^ by burning alive.
550 points, ended April 1, 2007, 43 entries
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I like it!
This is a really great poem!! It says most of what I would like to hear from a man! The only thing you could work on is the flow. It was a little jerky... try adding commas or filler words to help with the flow for a better recited poem :0) -
thats really nice!!! the 2nd stanza is ma best !!!! good luck in da contest!!!
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I love this!!! i think absolutly all men need to read this and learn from it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.
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i want to thank you for entering and wish you the best of luck. viyanna rosemarie
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It's nice to be appreciated, but this has an element of cliche to it, the rhyme is of the overused variety and the last line of each stanza is short of syllables and sounds awkward.
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That's very good ^^. Being a woman and all it's nice to know that some one know's what they're talking about haha. Keep on treating the ladies good and good luck in the contest.
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Oh, this is sweet. lol. Very interesting, and so very true. I wish my husband would read this, and I'm sure a bunch of people agree with me. But honestly, I think this could be switched around. There are some men who treat their wives and girlfriends wonderfully and get treated like crap for it. Why can't the people who cherish each other find each other? hehehe. This is really nice, though. Seriously. Great job.
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If she talks alot its always good to be deaf thow. Just kiddin even though I am partialy deaf but I still have a good woman. Love the poem and keep up the good work.
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This piece is a pure delight; once again it’s technically correct. It’s like going to the movies. Your flow falls off the lips as if the words were always meant to be put in this order. I found that the sylable count was a bit off disrupting the meter but the emotional imagery combined with the physical imagery is a marriage of pure art. Well done poet. Amera
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Bravo!!
I like the thought that you composed here. Always treat us like a rose. May the ink in your pen never run dry. Keep on penning.
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I saw this in the featured, went to your page to view it so's not to waste your points, I liked it, says a lot about the character of the poet,....not sure I like the syllable counts, feels choppy to me (but at my age, everything is getting choppy )- the rhymes are good, no doubt about it...its the rhythm that I am struggling with…like i said, may be just and age thing on my part. Content is perfect and the your topic admirable, heck you may get a few proposals out it....
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i am crying now!!!!
i truly wish someone had sent this to my now ex-husband. he somehow forgot that i was a person. you made me cry when i read this. it is so how i wanted to be treating. though i have forgiven him, being treated the exact opposite of how i should have been leaves scars which are bone deep. thank you for showing that someone knows how to treat us women. thank you. sincerely. now i must go get a kleenex. really.
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My Husband Should Read This!!!
My husband is really wonderful...but I think this poem would be great for any couple to contemplate. Another sweet poem dear Clown!
Blessings,
Azlyn
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I like your pome and when you have someone good in ur life u just have to treat them right cause you never know if you would a other good one again so this pome was very good. i hope to read more poem from you luv queen aka beautiful
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The brilliance of truth
You write rhyme very well. This reads like a song. Well written and very true.
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beautiful
awe Clown, this is so sweet
ang
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