A father's parting words betrayed
His grieving son told where he's laid
The war that politicians made
The price he paid
The price he paid
Beside his graveside, left to tend
His son's raw wounds too deep to mend
" To Hell, warmongers should descend
My dearest friend
My dearest friend"
No bloodier battles ever fought
Though lasting gains still come to nought
Of human loss, but not a thought
No lessons taught !
No lessons taught !
And once again, though modern times
Into a fighter plane he climbs
Convinced that these are not such crimes
As church bells chime
As church bells chime
No future war would this surmount
For no-one's left to take account
As endless victims' bodies mount
The final count
The final count
His hellish cargo to bestow
A dying planet spread below
Those sealed instructions now to know
A fatal blow
A fatal blow
He tries so hard to understand,
his predetermined last command
That fateful button at his hand
Then where to land?
Then where to land?
Author notes
21 - Armageddon
A Monotetra styled story of a young fighter pilot, who has lost his father in war, and now carries the 'ultimate deterrent' as his payload. His orders ? To drop the bomb, but then what?
In a list
A contest entry
- World of War by Lively Matter.
1200 points, ended April 15, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - UnUuuSual: Poems that will make me go HOLY COW! by Angel Full Of Hurt.
1034 points, ended October 13, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - what's the point of digging countless graves, when there's no one left to fill this countless graves? by Aroarathebloody.
1000 points, ended November 10, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nice write dude
this was bad ass
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I am very glad this one earned itself a golden trophy, most deserving. I wonder often about all the wars in the past and now, what is ever really achieved, apart from death and bloodshed, there is nothing to be gained from killing or being killed.... superb take on such a story... and again.. the form.. amazing
Karen
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Holy Cow!
Well deserved gold, my friend! Very well written, flowed well, just an all around great poem.
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Amazing and Wow
WOw do i have to repeat my verdict? this poem is wonderful....really wonderful....i din know what i was getting when i set up this contest...i din know there were poets who could blast me up to the moon..and that you did...and other poets who entered were preparing me for the launch..after reading this piece i am on the moon already..YEAH HOLY COW i say!
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happy hoodwinking
Great work on this poem, you've managed to express your point of veiw well. I don't know that I agree with it wholly, but i can certainly see your standpoint. Great work anywyas!
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Wonderful monotetra and so powerful and dramatic, and leaving the last question unanswered is very dramatic, if a bit maddenning for curious kitties like MOI! LOL well done piece, Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
YOU HAVE JUST BEEN HOODWINKED
; Courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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Brilliant again
A brilliant write that graphically gets the message home. Wonderful flow and metere and a very powerful poem. Congrats mate.
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Wow... fantastic. Great style, superbly written and intruiging. Thanks for your excellent entry.
By the way, my brother, Diddashn, is sick, so I am now your judge. He just asked me to judge this contest, and I hope to get it done today. Thanks for your entry and patience. -
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Oh, ps, red isn't the best color you could have picked for font color.
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Well done again. Another good piece well written. And it speaks very well of this young mans battles. i'm not really becoming a fan of the monotetra style but i like this none the less.
thanks for the read
One Angry Monkey
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BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved this! The rhyming was some of the best... its hard to do that rhyming scale but oh well, its always nice to have some ppl who read the rules thanks for entering and good luck, oh btw it rocks!
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Awesome :)
Wow, Amazing! Talk about hitting home.
My brother in law just got back from over seas; We all Thank God he's alive and well.
This really makes ya think about what we (humans? )are doing to each other
& our home, (earth) how much longer are we going to have a home
if we keep this up?
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Brilliant
I am left weary after such a heart tugging verse. And exceptional work and labor of love. Well done. ~Pam
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This is a very good poem and I LOVE the format
Maybe I'll try this style soon =)
Very interesting subject and very intimate poem for such a harsh subject as well
Very impressive =!!
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War leaves such destruction, to our planet and our spirit. I really dont understand the comfort one would get when losing a father to war ..the comfort being he died a hero. Are there any heros in war or just a lot of senseless deaths, both sides being victims of stupid governments. When that button is pushed, there's no going back.
Anyways, superbly penned - this style is certainly your forte
Bravo,
galf
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The sad thing is...it may yet happen
Good morning, WD. Just as Melissa has said, there is always a joy in reading your poetry, and never any disappointment. I especially love reading your work, because I read it all in a sing-song Welsh accent (
) which gives it all the more lilt and resonance and makes for a superb few minutes of pleasurable poetry.
You do indeed have a great talent. Keep that pen moving, boyo!
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Excellent Excellent wonderfully Excellent.I love the rhyme form love the message related.Loved the way you managed to link the ages of war together into the final act of stupidity. What a dilemma to have delivered the final pay load only to be left high and dry. Great work a most enjoyable read
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