My entire world would be spinning around me
Fever claiming my mind preparing me for death
I saw the blood down your head and arms
Being caried back into the shelter of home
Such odd feelings swept through my soul
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C
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R
E
D
My head was not clear enough to think of anything
You were first priority in my tumbling down world
My heart stopped beating when I was told
Echoeing into the depths of my swirling conscious
The one who was the caused looked at me with sorrow
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N
G
E
R
I will not lose you to anything or anyone
Hate consumed whatever I was feeling; uncontrolled
Though you called my name, asked for my presence
A bell rang from Hell and my mind became aware
What would have happened to my soul if you died?
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O
S
T
I would be lost without you my life, my life
I've almost lost you today and I cannot forget
Just how much you mean to me; now and forever
Promise that you will never leave my side
I promise to hold you and love you until death takes me
Forever in love
Author notes
I love you David. I almost lost you today, forever. It made me aware on how much I really love you. Stay with me, please.
Much love
Alie
I heart him. Dunno how many more times I can say that, but okay.
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A contest entry
- Love Me [Tell me] by ronfan6.
603 points, ended December 26, 2006, 7 entries
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wow this is amazing. & u know what everyone misses you so much. its crazy to even think about anymore. this poem you wrote explains how everyone that loves you and how we all felt and still feel now that you are gone. you will always stay with me in my heart. you taught me so much about being myself and that i should write abotu whatever i want and be whoever i want because i can and it doesnt matter what everyone thinks about me. the only thing that matters is that i like who i am. and u taught me that. i love you so much and i miss your face so much. there isnt a day that goes by that i dont think of you. you changed my life completely. & i thank you so so so much. i know that you wont see this but i just want you to know how much u have impacted my life. i just needed to get all this out. thank you for being you and showing me to be myspelf. <3 you have inspired me in ways no one ever will
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Yes Alie it is quite ironic you stated you didn't want to lose David and we all lost you,I will miss you dearie,and so many more on AP will miss you as well,but atleast we have your poetry and with that your presence will always be here...
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To think you say you would die if you lost him... but in the end we all lost you... a lot of people say that they have the rest of their life to do something but you are an example that we don't... I never knew you but I wish I did...
I hope to see you again someday... 
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its ironic you wrote about losing someone but we lost you
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Amazing!
This is truly amazing poetry and so beautifully written! i was on the verge of tears! I'm so glad he wasn't lost and i wish you both all the best for the future. thanks for your entry and the very best of luck! x x
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o my goodness. this sounds like a quite a moment. romantic...maybe...but not quite in the sense I was thinking.
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Beautiful
....beautiful, sweetie. inside that blood'n guts ghoul
...dwells a heart of caring, beauty and love.
Thankyou so much for sharing this beautiful piece. I love your horror work too...and i have to get to more of it. sorry i haven't been around lately. got myself caught up in some dramas and health issues, and ...i hadn't been writing for awhile, so...i had to pour some of my trifles out.
much love to you, Rayne. and the best to all you love!
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It's true. I was nearly lost. Though the medics said it was only a scratch, if we hadn't have wrapped my head in a hoodie and kept pressure on the wound, I would have probably bled to death in a matter of minutes... I love you my dear, and I will never leave your side! This I promise you!
Evern after death I shall serve thee, your faithfull assassin Twilight.
P.S.- As always you write beautiful poetry ^_^ Keep it up!
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goodjob
im so glad you didn't loose him. good luck
btw change in authors box to i heart him please, it shows you read the rules.
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I said I love you. But okay...
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