I'm a Hell bound soul for sure
and I'm surely Hell bound for you
if my sins can be your cure
what else can I do?
I'll suffer the eternal fire
and I'll take that horrid fall
if it sends you ever higher
the flames wont burn at all
If I go to Hell for you
will you even know?
If I go to Hell for you
please send me some heavenly snow
If I suffer the pit for you
will you please promise me?
that no matter how happy you get
you won't forget about me
I'll cry for as long as the sun burns
if it means that you can smile
and I will live though my heart churns
if you can laugh for a little while
I'll sin and be damned to Hell
if it sends you to heaven
in fire I'll gladly dwell
here with my demon brethren
If I go to Hell for you
will you even know?
If I go to Hell for you
please send me some heavenly snow
If I suffer the pit for you
will you please promise me?
that no matter how happy you get
you won't forget about me
The flames are rising faster
and the smoke, burns my throat
is this song a disaster
like every line I ever wrote
But now that your in Paradise
the fires don't seem so strong
in fact Hell is mighty nice
I guess I belonged here all along
I went to Hell for you
and I really don't regret it
I suffered the brimstone too
and I know you won't forget it
I fell into the pit
of sulfur and disease
but love was the reason for it
and so it was a breeze
If I go to Hell for you
will you even know?
If I go to Hell for you
please send me some heavenly snow
If I suffer the pit for you
will you please promise me?
I know you will be happy
just don't forget about me
Author notes
partly option 3, partly option 8....you decide
Honorable Mention in a Contest., to think of it as a song, think of it in a Meatloaf light *artist not the lunch room meal*
A contest entry
- Lyrical Love by Meyeryakov.
300 points, ended May 17, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - THE BEST YOU CAN DO! please enter... :) by LilMrsAttitude.
1600 points, ended March 30, 2008, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You know I had an Idea for this but in a different way and I was goin to write it tonight.
Anyway, honestly this poem hits the spot for me, a direct hit, you sunk my battle ship lol!
The one I "love" right now its way too much for me and this poem says everything, well almost everything.
All in all its a great write!
Goin to skim through your other poems so watch for me lol
-Chris
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Nice
It's nice to that there is still romantic fools out there. Who's to say they wouldn't go to hell for you? If you've written other poems like this for this person, I'm sure they won't be able to forget you. Great job. -
GOOD
GREAT WRITE, BUT I PERSONALLY ARE NOT GOING TO HELL FOR ANYBODY.LOL I DO APPRECIATE THE LITERARY EFFORT. IT'S A NICE PIECE OF POETIC PENNING.
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This was phenomenal! wow...it was so passionate and it was a fascinating write. I would love to hear it sung!
Awesome job!
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Wonderful
Very deeply emotional. I liked this write a lot, it cut right to the heart. To think that someone would love someone so much as to go through hell for them. *applause* very well done -
Good write and well spoken. It definatly had the flow of a song, I almost started to try singing it out and putting a beat to it. All that aside, it is a nice read about what sacrifice for one you love can mean. Especially when it takes it to the utmost. Thanks for sharing.
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Great job. Was very shocked by this entry, I gave you this title, thinking you wanted a title for my darkwrite contest and was very surprised when you entered it into this one. Also, without your author comment I still got the Meatloaf feel to it. Good luck to you.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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