Soothing wounds that I thought would never heal
From times and from pasts that I tried to conceal
A touch so soft, so gentle and smooth
Scars of bad memories instantly gone and removed
Forgotten and vanished, starting fresh and anew
Just one touch was needed, just one touch from you
A slick silent whisper carried on the floating breeze
With it coming love, hope and happiness; all that I need
Gone are those days when I’d cry out inside
Gone are the times when I couldn’t decide
Whether it was better to live quietly or slowly subside
Into confusion and darkness, let my heart and soul die
You turned my life ‘round in every which way
Waking up with a hunger for what’s coming these days
Not fearing the future and hiding so small
Because you’re the one that I love most of all
Now just one touch from you is all that I need
One touch from you to help me break free
To finally conquer this pain deep down in me
To let my heart beat contentedly
i love you my angel .x.
Author notes
I saw your contest and I thought this fitted into Option 1 but I guess it is more about moving on which I surely hope you can do in the future. I am so terribly sorry to hear what has happened to you and just wish you all the best for the future. Take care always, seems irrelevent but good luck with your contest xxx love and peace xxx
Option 5
Any Dream Will Do
06/30/07
Option1: Love
ilovethomix
In a list
- VIII. Trophies IV: Gold • next in list
- VIII. Trophies III: Silver • next in list
- VIII. Trophies I: Honourable Mentions • next in list
- V. Love • next in list
- VI. My Favourites • next in list
A contest entry
- I WANT A FAMILY TOO! by Tempa Lee.
600 points, ended February 3, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Words of Freedom by Flames-of-Furey.
591 points, ended June 27, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All You Need Is Love by xSweetDreamsx.
800 points, ended August 31, 2007, 53 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LUST.LOVE.HATE. [easy points as usual] by Mybeautyisfake.
300 points, ended August 6, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me REAL by Logans-Mommy.
500 points, ended August 27, 2007, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Sparked from a random conversation
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i think the flow needs some work though the rhyming was good. I appreciate the entry.
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Aw.
The ending was cute.
Well done on winning all those trophies with this poem!
thank you for entering.
Best of luck!
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Congrats on the all the trophies. This is a nice piece full of emotion. Well done. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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This is really powerful. I enjoyed reading it!
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Gone are those days when I’d cry out inside
Gone are the times when I couldn’t decide
Whether it was better to live quietly or slowly subside
Into confusion and darkness, let my heart and soul die
Aw,this is so sweet.I am glad you have your angel,aw,this was just simply sweet.I liked it. -
a showcace of words love the flow and wow the imagery love the tones as i read great write thank you for entering
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I like this
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Great job with this!
Thank you for entering.
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This is so sweet and beautiful. I love it. It flows so smoothly and beautifully. Great job and thanks for your entry.
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WOW
Another one im adoring! This is pure genious! slightly thown off now coz of the contests you've entered it in and won, tried anoter poem? lol sorry that distracts from the poem. I can see why it's won gold it's an amazing poem no faults it's perfect except 2 words i can't remember now! lol well done!
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Haha yeah I know what you mean. Thanks for a great comment and for the applause x take care x
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Ah, this is what it's all about. Relaxing into life and looking forward to the future because you found the perfect person to share everything with. The inspiration in this is obvious. It's a real celebration, and you wrote a real, honest, original love poem. It's the oldest and most written on subject there is, so that's no small feat!
I hope things with her are still as great as when you wrote this for her.
Uncle Mark
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very very good!!
thank you for your entry.
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Absolutely beautiful-congratulations on the silver and hopefully you do well in the other contest!
Bravo!
love and peace
halleluja
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tears
this is amazing
It fits into option 1 and 3 and it is very well penned.
"Soothing wounds that I thought would never heal
From times and from pasts that I tried to conceal
A touch so soft, so gentle and smooth
Scars of bad memories instantly gone and removed"
The opening verse was pertfect I cannot fault the flow and rhyme it is perfect.
gone and remouved are the same but they arn't and some fade and some are physicaly lifted by somthing or someone and it was that mystery and double meaning that made this paragraph electrifing.
"Forgotten and vanished, starting fresh and anew
Just one touch was needed, just one touch from you
A slick silent whisper carried on the floating breeze
With it coming love, hope and happiness; all that I need"
This is great the way you kinda expressed my need for her preasance and the repetition emphasises how desparate i am for her safe return.
"Gone are those days when I’d cry out inside
Gone are the times when I couldn’t decide
Whether it was better to live quietly or slowly subside"
cry out juxtaposes with inside and internal emotions this is well thought about. It is interesting to read the options to the remouval of pain and solutions to my situation aswell.
"Because you’re the one that I love most of all"
This is true I love her she is my world always was and will be and I'm so glad this line is here simple and clear very well expressed thankyou -grin-
"To let my heart beat contentedly"
"I love you my angel .x."
favorite word contentedly a word that breathes safety and happiness in one a sense of completion and happy endingthis lifted my spirits and the last line is the greatest ending becasue i often called her angel so good guess.
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Very contemporary and good poem. The flow is nice.
My favorite lines:
A slick silent whisper carried on the floating breeze
The line is just wonderful...beautiful.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
~VIRGOAN~
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Aww, what a pretty poem! How lovely!
I wish you luck in the contest.
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That was an amazing write. Unfortunately you already won silver with it, and I said in the rules that I only wanted prewrites that had yet to win a trophy. Sorry, but you are DQ.
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this is an awesome write. thank you for entering my contest. good luck.
brittany
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this poem sings to my heart and uplifts my soul!
I dont have anything that i could even begin to say that the 22applauds it has already hasnt said. you are truely gifted
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Aww thats really sweet! Thank you *blushes hehe*
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Everyone go 'awwwww'. Not only do I understand the rhyme scheme, but I think this poem is kick ass. No shit. I adore this. It's just so cute, and yet so reformed-emo at the same time. If that's even a phrase.
It is now! Anyways, I seriously love this poem. Like, sooo much. The phrases you use are just so cool! And the way you rhyme things. Although, pet pirate? Isn't that demeaning to the Pirates of America? Just kidding lol. All I can picture now is a giant parrot with a mini pirate on it's shoulder, saying, 'Pirate wanna cracker.' That's very twisted.
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This was a great poem. Filled with love. Rock on and keep it flowing.
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Thanks a lot for the comment and applause x
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This piece has such a beautiful flow of thoughts and emotions. The rhythm and rhyme were perfect, nothing stilted. It's such a wonderful feeling when someone comes into our life and washes away all the dirt from the past. Fabulous piece! Thanks for your entry and good luck!
~Lori
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comment, it certainly is a wonderful feeling hehe ^^ Good luck with the contest and take care x x
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i don't think i need a pet. but i could use a brother or sister. it doesn't show your name so i don't know your gender. well great job and return the favor.
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Sweet!
Very heartfelt and genuine, I liked your poem in its sincerity. Well and intellignetly done rhyme scheme. Very well done! ~S
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Lovely
The spark of love was created by the look of it.This really is a warm and loving piece.Well done to you and thankyou for your comments on my poem, Ros -
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Thank you for the comment ^^ Take care x
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Awww. I love this. It is so sweet and romantic!
I'm sure your girl will love it too!!
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWW OMG
I loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee this oneeee wooow its so sweet and it made me cryy i LOVE it the words touched my heart and it was so...WOW loved it big bro keep up the good work take care
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Bloody Fantastic!!
Blimey George!! Every poem on here is about Thomi, does she know how much you love her?? It's great! It really does show what love is.
Also hats off to you on using so many words to just say 'I love you'
lyaamoc
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emotionally beautiful
When you find that one love, the one that takes you from the brink of loneliness, to a place where you can fly above the clouds, that is a precious and beautiful thing...outstanding dedication of love...smile...David
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very nice poem... you really love her and that's great.
love this poem a lot.
"Soothing wounds that I thought would never heal
From times and from pasts that I tried to conceal
A touch so soft, so gentle and smooth
Scars of bad memories instantly gone and removed"
that's a very good stanza. the rhyme is awesome too.
the way you express your love for thomasine is great.
i'm impressed
i hope she reads this. its quite nice. its beautiful.
thats an understatement. ihave no other words to describe how wonderful you say how you feel.
i am also surprised at how you could say i love you in so many words.
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Big softie strikes again!!
You are well and truely smitten my friend, she must be very special, costing you a small fortune in ink! You explain yourself very well in this leaving her with no doubts.
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