Filigree trees imprint on the clouds
strands of emotion
rising from a troubled world.
Thoughts fly up caught on wings
of insects and birds
or are trodden into damp and sorrowful earth
by countless paws and human feet.
Through roots and branches
trees absorb our lives
breathe them into the air
sometimes refreshed, at other times
rinsed clean, recycled and returned
to alight on synapses in brains
poised to think them anew.
Nothing escapes the cosmic web
where the mind dwells.
A contest entry
- Wednesdays at Winklings by Lyndon.
875 points, ended December 3, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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congratulations on silver
well done...a magnificent poem -
Congratulations!
A well deserved SILVER!
Anna.
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Cyclical writing, thematically.
Filigree trees ~ a fine image with which to begin with the traceries in the cloudy sky: half there and half-created by the imagination ~ implied (and VERY Wordsworthian) and it pleases. Oxygenated synaptic linkages ~ you take us a journey more cerebral than arboreal! Beautiful poem that I hope will not be wasted on the desert air! Ron.
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I love the feeling of coming "full circle" in this write, from thoughts of the mind to perceptions and emotions and the grand recycling of the oxygen fueling the whole process, of which trees are a vital and primary part. Lovely!
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Wonderful work, I really got into this one, I'd write more praise but it's time for my daily tree hugging!!!
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This is a refreshing view! Thoughts and feelings can hang around, how wise to hand them over to the cleaner. You have bound everything together into one consciousness, I love it. Best of luck!
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most original ...
and I certainly felt moved by the points that you shared, (which science will never prove!) Often, we may discover with patience that life breathes life and certainly trees are our partners-in-progress for breath. Enjoyable poem that enhances thinking which is always a good thing! joy
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Just a friendly note; sub-atomic science has proven the exsistance of a continual and interwoven life force, including trees!!
-Kao3
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This I like in its eccentric ways, as the web has spun, reminds me of W.E. Channings "spider", it captures a beauty of spirit in nature. I just simply adore it.
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nothing escapes ...
...your poem is so expressive. It moves outside the square and loks at the topic from a different viewpoint. I like the words: 'tress absorb our lives.' This is an excellent poem, a work of art, because it is written so well, with personification and effective rhythm. It provides much food for thought.
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A masterpiece!
This poem is just perfect! I cannot find any criticism in this one. I can only say that I love it. You have used such beautiful imagery, in which you tell us the interaction between trees and people. Very well done.
Anna.
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Hi Mum. An excellent free verse. Beautiful imagery, flow and tone. Lovely expression of emotion and metaphor. Thoughtful. Vivid descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of this cosmic web that none of us escapes. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. Shelley
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Explorative free verse
Yes, I can identify with your thoughts in this poem. The imagery is even, interesting, for the educated rather than the erudite mind. "Filigree" applied for the tracery of trees against clouds in your country now [not mine] is continued in "strands", "caught", "roots" and "branches", "synapses" ~ all part of what you term "the cosmic web". This is a wonderful extended metaphor from alpha to omega.
en you involve the recycling motif through the function of a tree, itself. Indeed, this is a poem of "More Thoughts About Trees". Thank you very much. Ron.
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One of the really good things abnout being old, my daughter, is discovering that people seem to respond more often than before to ideas you put forward. I've been banging on about our relation to the cosmic web for years, but it's only over the past 5-10 years that I get a positive response. Great. I shall continue to think.....!
Mum
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Hallo Lyndon and thank you for your generous evaluation. I'm especially glad that you like this one because it was an experiment is extending tree metaphors. I always used to say that I thought I had been a tree in a past life ..... I probably still do think that!
Joy
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