I'm a muted cacophony,
Sealed lips, screaming thoughts:
Evils never to be divulged;
This villain never caught.
I give myself to Silence;
My glaring truth concealed
But the endless tide of blood remains
Though clotted and congealed.
Marauding desolation
Jibes my fragile form,
But I speak not of my malady
And leave myself forlorn.
Eluded by redemption,
Caught in Satan’s pyre
I await incineration,
The sweet reprieve of fire.
For Well-deserved damnation
Shall be my last respite:
No longer bound by secrecy
No longer forced to fight.
Sweet hell is my sweet requiem
I’ll be amongst my kin
I’m heaven’s damned pariah
My secrets are my sin.
Author notes
Inspired by these words: “Another hero, another mindless crime, behind the curtain in the pantomime..”
- Queen, ‘Show Must Go On’.
A contest entry
- Contest: Poetic Motley of Choices by BrokenFiend.
497 points, ended January 21, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A very interesting poem with a good flow, a good message, and uses the quote well. I rather enjoyed it, and I found it a...well, interesting poem. Very emotional, in a strange way, and real. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck.
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I really enjoyed reading this poem. Like the others said, your vocab was great. It had a sad rythm to it that I loved. Keep writing!
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Wonderful
Welcome back to the world of writing. This is an amazing write, with a fluid flow and an interesting tale.
Your poetry has a definite rhythm to it, which I enjoy.
Another great poem penned.
Rosemary
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Thank you again. I have finished and posted the one I sent to you last night. Despite the overriding 'gloom' factor, I think I managed to squeeze in an ounce of positivity which surprised me considerably. I have also attempted some free verse but it is so embarassingly bad that I think I may delete it.
It is really good to be back writing again...
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You rhyme without causing the writers of Chicken Soup for the Soul to send you excited phone calls. This means that I want to spend my few points on you
Really nice writing; emotive without being excessive, elevated vocabulary and vivid imagery.
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Wow, I love the vocab you used. I love the rhyming and I absolutely feel the desolation and complete loss of faith in good here. This is an excellent piece and you pulled it off well. Good luck in this contest.
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