I was lost...
Somewhere in time
Lost in melodies
Song and rhyme,
You were there
Walking with me
Touching my heart
So silently~
You knew my weakness...
My need for peace
Yet you offered me
No release~
Yesterday meshed
Melted within...
Reminding me over
and over again...
I reached out
Pushed the hand to re hear
The melody of a memory
Keeping you near~
Author notes
I just thought this old time phonograph looked so fitting to go with the poem...
Written May 20th, 2003
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Excellent
Very was very well written. I absolutely loved it. The lines were so truthful. Keep writing. -
music is so time less... and i lost my self in it with this... it sounds to me like a song skipped... but who care i rather re listen to it from the beginning...
Doug -
wistful bittersweet, evocative, I like it.
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Susan, this poem reminds me of me:) and that makes me happy:) ya know how you said,
"You were there
Walking with me
Touching my heart
So silently~"
that reminds me so much of how i feel when i'm walking with that guy i like:)
i really liked this, and you're right, the picture really does fit the poem:)
kayla* -
this is a sweet write and also a familar feeling and i love how you rhyme and the rhythm in this
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\" Wonderful\"
This is beautiful...
so calming...
as if I were laying on a blankent
under the fluffy white clouds were
drifting over my head! and the sun,
was shinning... and the sky was nothing,
but blue! thank you for sharring!!!
~Rena -
Music is awesome therapy and soo nice sometimes. Smilesss. This is great. A beautiful write. smiless I am glad I came here to c heck your poems. Smilesss I had it on my list of things to do. I see yer name around here a lot and wanted to go check out your poems and I appreciate your comments on mine. smiless peeling
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Nice usage for Rhythm, I like it. melancholy, yet sweet. Nice.
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This brings memories to me, too... there's times when an old song would send me into daydreams of a past incident or person. I love the expressiveness of this poem ...beautiful writing. and yes, the picture does go well with it, kinda adds to the moment.
Gosh, it's been awhile since I visited your work.. glad I did this morning
{{{HUGS}}}
Dee -
oh my.....so beautiful
lovely write!!
take care
/michelle -
Excellent
Delightful Susan!
I reached out
Pushed the hand to re hear
The melody of a memory
Keeping you near~
Sighing .... How many times do we play those old songs?
Take care dear friend,
Sammy.
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beautiful,smooth,flowy wrt.
The old ponograph picture fits the poem very well. I think, it really sets your write off! I enjoyed the content, flow, the presentation and of course; very fond of your wrting style. Thanks for taking me on a quick mental journey. I did that myself with old music yesterday(that is now on shiny new CD's) instead of records, 8 track tapes and cassettes. I really time dated myself NOW! God Bless and thanks for brightening my day! I try to make a circle of favorites as quickly as I can. Yet always adding new writers. Thus the list is very long and take me a while. I'll be back! Thanks again!
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Isn't it true how a melody can contain a memory. This was beautifully written. Very good rhythm and rhyme. I enjoyed this.
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It does go very well with the poem...but the poem is the masterpiece here! I love the words, the smoothness of the read, makes me feel a bit meloncholy!!! Lovely write Susan! ~Laura
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Awww, Susan ya Hussy. I loved this one, i really did, but i say that about all of your work because you are so good at what you do. I miss you. I'll be moved by the beginning of next week and i kinda dont wanna go because i'll miss you so much. Anywho, enough sad shit, i loved it honey. I'll be waiting for some more new ones.
~*Lynn*~ -
beautiful write with so much melody and knows how to reach out straight to the heart,very nice ~jules
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This was super-duper fantasticalistic
I made a new word... anyway I LOVED it. It had a very sing-songy quality to it that really played into the idea of hearing the "melody"
My FAV part of the whole thing...
You knew my weakness...
My need for peace
Yet you offered me
No release~
It's so simple but it's just right out there "Hey! If you knew my weakness you shoulda gone easy on me!" Anyway, GREAT WRITE! HUGS -
This is lovely dear. Very beautiful. Somewhat of a bittersweet melancholy read, but tender and heartful nonetheless. I enjoyed reading it. 'Tis quite the beautiful read as well. HUGZ for you ladeee.
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this was really so very very sweet . I like it very much I think that you did a grand write here my friend. it was really up lifting to me. thank you ever so much for shareing it
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Susan, this is absolutely beautiful:) I felt the heart-break in this, and I adore the way you ended it:)
I have to agree with you, all memories do have melodies, each unique in sound and feel, just like the memory itself:)
Love ya,
Karen*rose**rose**rose**rose*/
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Between the write and the pic.....yes , could definitely almost hear everything .......real nice and soft and sad and .........
Reenie
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Lovely write, Susan...
Music is filled with memories.
You knew my weakness...
My need for peace
Yet you offered me
No release~
Lots of frustration felt here.
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So melancholy, a melody of longing. Painfully filled with memories of yester years. Too many emotions flood the senses.
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Excellent! Really enjoyed it!
I love this one, Sis! Very nice rhythm to it...I especially liked "the melody of a memory keeping you near". The pic' of the phonograph reminds me of the logo for RCA Victor (a dog listening to a phonograph).
Luv Ya, Sis!
< 3 Maureen
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So beautiful yet so sad Susan has a dreamy feeling to it.....Yes I like anything but the horrors LOL ((((((Hugs))))))
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nice flow!!
hugs,
jim
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