éternellement
You promised forever.
I'm spilling tears on this page.
I watched the space you used to lie in,
For longer than I should have for
My own sanity to remain.
Now I have to try and tell you
How it feels to not have you here.
To tell you how much I long
To touch your face.
I have to say goodbye
Without a hand to wave with
Without any object to watch.
No one to face.
This letter is for you
My darling,
Telling you how I will long
How I will wait
Until the day you promise
You promise to return.
I'll wait for you
until éternité.
Author notes
French Translations
éternellement= Eternally
éternité= Eternity
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Marvellous
I Love This One!
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I love the way used eternity and eternally with french words, very clever... This poem describes feelings that will be felt for eternity.. I like the ending, however I do feel it would flow better as 'for eternity'.. nicely written, thanks for entering my contest, I will comment more on judging.
Peace and light always.. -
It hurts to lose those we love, and even those we once loved (as I came to learn this past summer)
You wrote about it well. Great work and thank you very much for entering my contest.
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awww so sweet i love it especially I have to say goodbye
Without a hand to wave with
Without any object to watch.
No one to face.
this is really good and cleaver i will hope to read more of your work ofter this contest i think its wondeful well done xxx -
yay!!!!
i love this poem, i totally know what you mean
i agree with shady lane
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This poem is really beautiful and shows your love so well and the pain of loss. Great stuff. Good luck
Shady Lane
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