Your eyes are as blue as blueberries
Orbs staring back at me,
I love to gaze into them
Like a crystal ball, you see
So clear I cannot look away
For they mesmerize me,
I'm hypnotized, in love
For all eternity
Those blueberry eyes
They sear right through me,
Your pupils are dilated
Romance, I can see
I shiver and I quiver
Tingling inside, shaking,
Waiting and watching, I need more
As long as it's up for the taking
You undress me with your eyes
I feel the earth, tremble and shake,
You move closer to me, I sense hot desire
Provocative, sensual, sexy, I could eat you as a cake
You finally undress me
I think I've went to heaven up above,
Blueberry orbs a dancing
Then we make sweet, sweet love
Author notes
Your eyes
Blue as blueberries
Orbs staring at me
I love to gaze into them
Like a crystal ball, so clear
I cannot look away
For they mesmerize me
I'm hypnotized
In love
Eternally
Those blueberry eyes
Sear right through me
Your pupils are dilated
Romance, I see it
I shiver, quiver
Tingling inside
Shaking
Waiting
Watching
I need more
You undress me with your eyes
I feel the earth tremble, shake
You move closer to me
I sense hot desire
Provacative
Sensual
Sexy
You undress me
And we make sweet love
Hates and Lies
OPTION #7
A contest entry
- First Year Anniversary At AP! by Trixie08.
300 points, ended March 2, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Eyes by BabyBun.
450 points, ended June 19, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hmmm...this doesn't really fit my contest. Sorry, I will have to DQ. But a nice poem nonetheless.
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Great use of words - thanks for the entry
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great write...loved this...good luck in the contest!
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This is not my usaul kind of read but I liked it....It was cute...and happy and love..love..love..It had alot of emotion..They were well lucky to have you in their lives, to love them such as it is clear you did.
thank you for entering and good luck in my contest
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I liked this poem, not my usual kind of read, but I liked it. I liked the first four lines of your poem as well. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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Your eyes are as blue as blueberries
Orbs staring back at me,
I love to gaze into them
Like a crystal ball, you see
these first lines itself took me to the blue berry groove !!
i realy loved it and it was amazing !
thank you so much for entering the cotnest ,
your well wisher ,
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WOW this is beautiful I loved how you gave the blueberries human like characteristics and it was just masterful and brilliant.
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Thanks for entering
A truly lovely write with so much detail. You must really care for this person for very few people can describe someones eyes with so much wonder.
The imagery you conjure with this write is stunning. An enjoyable read.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
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A silky cream-filled cake? I dunno thought it sounded better..going with the sensual theme I'm feeling this person is rather silky? whadda ya reckon...oh and amend spelling on finally. Well written and I imagined those blue seas of eyes. good work!
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OH WOW~ I really loved this poem! Thanks sooooooooo much for entering! Your poems are way better than mines, and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks a lot and good luck in my contest! My favourite lines are "Your eyes are as blue as blueberries
Orbs staring back at me,
I love to gaze into them
Like a crystal ball, you see
So clear I cannot look away
For they mesmerize me,
I'm hypnotized, in love
For all eternity
Those blueberry eyes
They sear right through me,
Your pupils are dilated
Romance, I can see" Thanks again and good luck
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Oh, yes , you did it.
Was in a meeting today so I did not get back, sorry.
But you did it right,both times. The poetry both rhymed and unrhymed is gracious and well put, thank you. theasp
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Beautifully sensual!
Very good poem, seeing that I have indeed blueberry orbs, I shall have to shut my eyes at any alluring young lass, very sensual and the where at all times a sexual depiction gives of an ideal, lovely work!
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THANX SO MUCH
I HAVE 2 POEMS ON BLUEBERRY ORBS, THE OTHER ONE IS WRITTEN IN FREE VERSE.
POETDONTKNOWIT
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