I lay in supine thought one day
Amidst natures clothing, and open sky
And Followers of God
Thinking the answers to the questions of life
And a brilliant flash of revelation came
As the vastness of My Creation spread before me
Swallowing me whole
I was not falling down - but up!
A contest entry
- picture this !! by Silent Cougar.
425 points, ended December 27, 2006, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Do you know the answer to the meaning of life?
Comments
1 - 13 of 13
-
one cannot help but be uplifted by this poetry ... your final line is one of self realization, that you have not landed, but begun to rise as your heart takes you into the place your mind beholds as you see with more than just your eyes ... yes? Moqui
-
Creative inspiring!!
Congratulations you have created a tapestry beautifully woven of thought and images embracing nature and self; here you take the reader in short sweet tones to cradle self and the wonder about
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors Be well poet
-
Wow - this had such an open feeling to it. Allowing grace to take you in. Very moving ~ cheers ~ Mykeee
-
Live life,serve god, die with no regrets?
Very insightful
-
Very Inspiring
It's a beautifully said wisdom in simple words that make total sense. It's an upbeat inspirational poem that can turn a frown upside down. Sweet poem that forces the sun shine through the darkest of the clouds. Thanks for sharing. it is my pleasure to enjoy reading it. Take care Minoo
-
mmmmm
this is so sweet, i love the way you have made the poem so uplifting, it was a joy to read, take care, well done -
There is a cheekinesss in this poem that tweaked this reader. Put a smile on my face. There are some interesting points of view as shown by the phrase "vastness of my Creation" (underline mine). Still the view point physically could be seen as Earth.
I just see it as you being out laying naked in a field, suddenly feeling part of everything, The vision of the universe pulling you into it as in the moment you feel yourself becoming part of everything. Makes sense.
-
-
My Creation was sort of dble edged..a play on human arrogance..and the introspection of my own mortality and Maker...
i'm so glad you enjoyed it - you are bang-on - lying a field with the sudden realization that you are part of everything - connected..
Merry Christmas to you and yours !
s.
-
-
Revelation in pink...
Ah, I'd pink one too, wouldn't you? Sounds like you already have. I once shaped a set of lyrics around a piece of a Rumi poem, "The New Rule":
Last night the moon came dropping its clothes in the street.
I took it as a sign to start singing,
falling up into the bowl of sky.
The bowl breaks. Everywhere is falling everywhere.
Nothing else to do.
Here's the new rule: Break teh wineglass,
and fall toward the glassblower's breath.
Rumi still makes the hair on my arms stand straight up. Sure. Why not?
-
-
always thought-invoking comment, Balldinger..."Why" is a lot about sprituality...mortality.....are you about consequences?....
-
-
Oh Sherry-lee,now this,this is poetry that was a pleasure to read.The reader is taken to a moment in time that lifts the mind first to ponder too and then imbued with a wonderful surprize ending ( always a gift to get a surprize!) that was original,thought provoking and philosophical.
This is only an opinion that I now share,not a criticism,but I wondered if you had considered a different presentation within the choice of upper case placing? It is a preferance for some poets to place a capital and the beginning of each line,however when the piece is posted the lines are not always compatible with how it was written and that means sometimes capitals appear seem to appear mid sentence,wondered if you had noticed this and had any thoughts? I have this quandry when posting and tend to post all in lower case because of it. At first I posted in ALL upper case,believing it may deal with the problem and enhance the emotion but it simply provoked responses such as "STOP SHOUTING!AM NOT DEAF!" Ooh,it was vexing as I wasn't intending to shout,oops,am rambling,must stop it!
I love this piece,good luck in the contest,love and light,Yvette
-
-
i will heed your advice - thank you so very much!
Anna, your interpretations are always so "bang on" for lack of better words..i'm enjoying myself immensely and always appreciate your intuitive and insightful feedback..
best wishes to you too!
-
-
neither did you fall down on this write either. well done, and thank you for entering.
further comments on close to follow.
Adding your comment:
1 - 13 of 13
