Remove the doubt,
The fear, the sorrow,
The guilt, the fury,
The envy and the want.
No need for joy,
For love,
For hope.
Leave him empty,
But let him feel the loss.
Author notes
The actions in this poem are being done to me, not something I'm doing to others.
A contest entry
- Amaze Me! by Shantalina.
550 points, ended February 27, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes... As long as it's deep... by CrystalJet.
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This is a good poem, and I liked it. It may be short, but it is still good. I especially like the last two lines, I can't explain why. Thank you so much for your wonderful entry and good luck in my contest.
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I'm not a fan of short poetry, so this did very little for me, though I have to agree with Lizz Love, The last two lines were great...thanks for entering!
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Last two lines are good.
"leave him empty BUT let him feel the loss"...
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Thanks. It's what I was feeling at the time. That's the best way I can describe it. I felt empty, but it still hurt.
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I love this poem. The power of revenge is sweet isn't it. It was truely great..And Welcome to AP.
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Thank you.
I fear that you have been mislead however, perhaps on my fault. This was written as what is being done to me, not what I'm doing to someone else.
Nonetheless, I'm glad you liked it.
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