She stands in black,
tears streaming down her worried face.
Since he's been gone,
She just can't seem to find her place.
He left her too soon.
He took his own life.
He didn't stop to think,
what would happen to his wife.
He didn't realize,
she would have taken his hand.
She could have saved him.
They still could've done all that they planned.
If he had lived,
She could have told him the rest.
Their was a son on the way.
Life was changing, they were being blessed.
Now he'll never know,
about his beautiful baby boy.
He died right before,
his life was filled with fatherly joy.
Now she has to explain,
to their only son.
She'll have to tell him about daddy
and about daddys gun.
She'll never be the same
and his son will grow up without him there.
All because life was too much,
and he didn't know how much she cared.
Author notes
Just a reminder..let everyone you love know how very much you love them.
Comments
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Angry and affectionate. I like it
very good it displays the pain and distruction left behind when such things happen.you almost feel it as you read it.
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wow
im still crying -
Beautiful
What a heart felt, touching and sad poem!! I love it though! I think you did a beautiful job with it as you do everything that you do in your life. I miss you so much. I can't wait to read more poems..don't take so long in between them this time. I love you sweetheart! You're the greatest!!
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Good poem
Good poem. I could feel the main character's grief and pain.
The only thing I would look at is the rhythm of your lines. When you divide them up in 2 line phrases, the reader expects the rhythm to repeat in those lines all the way through. I would try to find a rhythm pattern and try to repeat that throughout the poem... or get rid of the two line presentation... that is the only suggesstion that I can see to give.
Keep up the good work.
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