#1
She gauges her eyes in haunt,
Whispers her wicked page,
Smirks similarity in taunt,
'Tis her rage-
Dead in the cage.
#2
Filled pow'r 'tis a feast,
Each to every day,
An evil smirking beast,
'Till death belay
and follow a way.
#3
Wild singing story's song,
Sing in fielded wheats,
The lyrics tell us right and wrong,
The melody beats,
and voice treats.
Author notes
The cinquain, also known as a quintain or quintet, is a poem or stanza composed of five lines. Examples of cinquains can be found in many European languages, and the origin of the form dates back to medieval French poetry.
The most common cinquains in English follow a rhyme scheme of ababb, abaab or abccb.
OPTION #2 - A European Poetry Form.
-Ryan
A contest entry
- Poet's Challenge: Round 3 by Raazi.
300 points, ended January 20, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
WITCH ONE DID YOU LIKE BEST?
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this should have been in the top 4.
12th place my ass.
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Lol, well it was the Mod's call
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Just to add here, you're last stanza is very strong to end with and I really admire that in a poem. So extra kudos for that
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Thanks
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Very nicely done style here. I admire the darkness of these and the metaphoric quality as well. Best of luck in the contest.
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Ryan, you've gotten so much better since you auditioned from Teen Idol Season Two, and if you entered the next one, and wrote like this, honestly I could see you making at least to the final 10.
(which is good)
I am definitely going to reserve a spot for you for the next teen idol competition.
As for these poems, I thought they were all great.
I thought overall the second one was the best... which I did think the first one was good, but I thought the second one was best because it had original use of language, the whole "pow'r" I thought looked interesting and reminded me of old English, like some of the words from The play Romeo and Juliet.
I love alliterations, so the first and second one did it for me right there! But if I really had to choose I'd go with the second one.
BUT, you should talk to Udit first. He'll tell you which one he likes best.
Peace dude. And good luck!
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Thank-you so much Tyler, means a lot to hear people say that I am growing in my poetry. Of course a lot of this All Poetry is responsible for- if you look at my first poems and then look at my newer poems, you can see how much everyone on All Poetry has done for me and my writing.
Thanks for the reserve- When is the next Teen Idol anyways?
Glad you liked the second one- seems everyone likes that one so far.
-Ryan
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Very skillfuly done
You put your understanding of this form on display with this posting. I think I personally enjoyed the second one the best. Mainly because it seem to have a special haunting quality that I felt was very effective.
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Thank-you very much for the comment penman
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