Once my earthly journey is complete,
humbly I’ll stand before Your judgment seat.
So in advance I faithfully pray to have
a positive ruling for you to mete.
Grace and mercy carried me;
Your covering on my life you should see.
Hopefully You’ll remember that I
promoted Your Kingdom for eternity.
Despite flaws and failures absurd,
hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word.
An attitude of lifelong praise I’ve spoken
based on what I’ve learned and heard.
With an inkling of spiritual clues,
I’m thankful for knowing You
and looking forward to that fateful day
when my life will be ready, for Your Review.
Learn more about me and my poetry at:
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Author notes
Option #1
A contest entry
- For those of you who've commented.. by Repetitious Chaos.
1000 points, ended January 5, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do you deserve it? by Ilitilian.
775 points, ended January 16, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Help Me Find Or Forget My Faith by AislinnAurora.
450 points, ended January 23, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me feel. . . anything. by Cavca.
500 points, ended May 21, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think; feedback is a good thing...
Comments
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Congrats
Congrats on your well deserved gold cup for this. We all have to face judgement and on your day what will He say?? Wow such a pwerful message and one can't help to think and be moved by it! I love this write please keep it up! -
your words seem to flow off the page i love it! were imaginative and i can see that you enjoyed writhing this
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I love your descrition of judgement day, and the way you describe everything
This type of poetry is actually similar to mine in a way. A little different, but you really grasped the importence and the depth of this subject.
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I think that the poem shows a lot about life and I really like it
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I found this write to be very well penned.. I really enjoyed it! I wasn't a fan of the rhyme.. but then im not a huge fan of rhyme even if it is well done. Keep penning poet!!!
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WONDERFUL!!
Thsi is one of the most spirtula poems I've ever read. You have put a very nice compouser in this the ryhme is exquist. Well done on this poem. My favorite part is "Once my earthly journey is complete, humbly I’ll stand before Your judgment seat." it just stood out to me. this is a beautiful piece of art. Well done. Keep Writing
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good flow. nothing seems forced or overdone. very great write. very enjoyable. keep up the good work! =]
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Been There done that
Read he restoreth my soul in my poems.
Good job
Jimek
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Good rhyming. The rhymes do not seem forced, except for the word "absurd"--a bit of a stretch in that context. The poem would flow better if the meter was more consistent. I really like the message. It is simple and sincere. And of course, your title/final line is very clever.
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Wow, this leaves me speechless - its so good, soon I hope to possibly purchase one of your books...lol and congrats on the Shiny Gold
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I can only pray that the soul He looks over on that great and terrible Day, will surely stand by grace and welcomed into the sweet rest of Heaven.
You have crafted a wonderful piece of heartfelt desire and have graciously submitted your plea before many. Count yourself blessed and highly favored of Him who is faithful. Continue to be carried by grace. -
very good
we will all come before the judgement seat so lets think while we are down here what we have done with our lives
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This is a very well written write I enjoyed reading it!
With an inkling of spiritual clues,
I’m thankful for knowing You
and looking forward to that fateful day
when my life will be ready, for Your Review
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WELL DONE MY FRIEND
YOUR GRATITUDE IS LOVELY
FLAWS AND FAILURES WE ALL HAVE THEM BUT WE NEVER LET THEM STAND IN OUR WAY.
PRECIOUS WRITE
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Beautifully written and expressed with so much meaning lace in every word! Uplifting and postive...well done, congradulations on the GOLD! Thanks for sharing
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this is a really good poem. i like the way it seems to fit together nicely without being forced at all. its very easy to read but i like the message within it. also, i think the rhyme is very successful.
well done for the gold trophy, i really think you deserved it for this!
keep writing,
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This is a really good poem!
I love the message, and how the rhyming doesn't feel forced at all!
Keep up the good work!
I'd love to read more from you in the future!
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Wow, this is amazing and very well written. It has a great message and is true. Good job on the Gold trophy! Keep writing! =)
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Congratulations on the gold trophy! This is definately a different type of write from what I usually find myself reading. I really enjoyed it, though. Well done, keep it up!
Sammie,
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Grace and mercy carried me;
Your covering on my life you should see.
Hopefully You’ll remember that I
promoted Your Kingdom for eternity.
Despite flaws and failures absurd,
hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word.
An attitude of lifelong praise I’ve spoken
based on what I’ve learned and heard.
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Very good
JJ your faith shines through every word of this enlightening poem. You have written this with emotion, feeling,, and from your heart and soul. A perfect 10, and thank you for sharing.
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I like what you are saying with this poem. Unfortunately, I thought all the rhyming was forced with the sole exception of the first two lines in the first stanza and the last line in the last stanza. It's not too bad, but it doesn't do the rhyme scheme justice and does need some work
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This is a good poem. But doesn't really inspire me. Also did you mean meet and not mete in the four line. Good try.
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This was a very gentle piece. Honest, and sincere, while it also seemed like a chat with a friend. Great work! I look forward to reading more.
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Oh yes!!!! I long for this day too and pray that I will be fit to kneel before the King - with Him knowing it was always Him I thanked, turned to and counted on
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this is great!
i can't find the words to say how this makes me feel.
this is really amazing and beautiful!
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I enjoyed reading this poem and look forward to more. God Bless
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Your meter throughout is somewhat sketchy: "Your covering on my life you should see" for instance is awkward to pronounce. Also: "I'm thankful for knowing you" sounds awkward. The poem itself has a lot of pretty terms of phrase that are reminiscent of 18th century poetry: "Despite flaws and failures absurd/ hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word." is nice in particular, but the thesis and imagery in your poem is neither original or very evocative in my mind: the poem makes the entire purpose of the character's life seem to have been the positive approbation of God, fairly defeatist in my mind
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Very good!
It reminds me of a saying: The point of life when death comes is to realize that you are coming to face God and truthfully say, Yes Lord-I tried to serve you and used everything you gave me. Keep up the good work!
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'Despite flaws and failures absurd,
hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word.' lovely!
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i love this, its so interesting, like what happens when you get to heaven, you can only hope that you did everything you were suposed to and that you were forgiven for the things that you did wrong. this is my favriot part because it says that the best:
"Once my earthly journey is complete,
humbly I’ll stand before Your judgment seat.
So in advance I faithfully pray to have
a positive ruling for you to mete."
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This is a brilliant poem. I enjoyed reading it. The words flow very nicely to fit the rhythm of the poem. Great job and keep writing!
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Great flow, good rhythm and language. Not my favorite type of poem (faith based) but still awesome and more power to you. Enjoyed it!
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good, poem, very inspiring , and interesting, everyone can take something from it, or interpret a variety of things from it
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this was really good...inspirational indeed. sounds like God is very important in your life. same here. i especially liked these stanzas:
Despite flaws and failures absurd,
hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word.
An attitude of lifelong praise I’ve spoken
based on what I’ve learned and heard.
With an inkling of spiritual clues,
I’m thankful for knowing You
and looking forward to that fateful day
when my life will be ready, for Your Review.
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Written with such Conviction!
I feel honored to have been able to read such a wonderful poem. this fills me with inspiration to keep pressing on in my walk with God. i like that you don't have a feeling of Hubris like many other Christians. while we may have the promise of eternity with God we should never let ourselves think that we are better than the rest of Mankind. Good Stuff! Keep writing!
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keep up the good work this was pretty good
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faithfully
Hello there, Joseph.
I'm glad to see that you will 'faithfully pray". It would be upsetting if you were to faithlessly pray.
World leaders who pretend to be religious while they muder inmocent people and watch many die in povery would be the ones who faithlessly pray.
Can you see how your phrase is not really necessary? I hope so. Otherwise your teeth will rot in hell eating chocolate and slurping sweet drinks dropped by the angels of mercy.
I think you have written an awesome poem and you are sure to win this contest.
have a wonderful day,
BJ.
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fine verse
ALL your poems have a philosophical touch,I like them most.
an aesthetic fervour in you has a grace unimitable
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We must all at some stage stand and be judged for what we are and waht we do.
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THIS READ PERHAPS WILL BRING AWARENESS TO THE WORLD, HIDDEN IN HEARTS ARE YOUR HOLY WORDS TRUE WISE WORD. GOD BLESS
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Wow, I am impressed. This is a very unique ryhme scheme.
I can relate to this on many levels, and I hope that when I meet the maker, I get a good review.
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We all hope that our life is worthy and when we go to meet our maker we can pass into life everlasting. Liked the flow of these lines, the sentiments expressed and the wonderful gold that you were rewarded with in the contest.
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COngratulations on the gold trophy, you really deserved it with this one! I loved the softness of your words... it was a captivating read thankyou for sharing this
Keep writing
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jjbreunig3 Excellent Poem Congratulations on the bronze trophy it was well deserved. Thank you for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck
Cara 
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This is unique, I like it very much. I thank you for sharing it and I hope to see more of your work in the future. I hope to see more of your work in the future
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i liked the first stanza; i thought it was cleverly written, and it grabbed my attention to read the rest. the rhythmn of your poem attracted me as well. it had a very nice calm flow that didn't allow the rhyme to make it bouncy.
the second and fourth stanzas were a little rough. the rhythmn seemed off a bit(add a syllable maybe?) on the third and fourth lines in the second stanza and the first and second in the fourth. the third stanza was beautiful. my favorite lines in your poem were "Despite flaws and failures absurd,
hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word." i think it was eloquently said.
overall, i think your poem is pretty good. i admire your devotion. you made me look up a word, i like that; mete is now my "word of the day." -
I'm so glad for grace. I know on my own merits I couldn't even stand before God at all. I'm so thankful that God changes me and shapes me as time goes on, and that I'm not responsible for the transformation, just to allow it and rejoice in it's unfolding.
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This is absurd.
You need to think about what you're saying here. Do you know what this poem says to me? I AM A GOOD PERSON BECAUSE ONE DAY I WILL STAND BEFORE GOD AND HE WILL JUDGE ME AND DECIDE WHETHER OR NOT I GET ETERNAL PARADISE OR DAMNATION. Now just stop and think about that for a second. Just because you fear judgment that you have no proof will ever actually happen is NO legitimate reason for you to lead a "good" life. Why? Because the only reason you're doing good is to avoid punishment. People should be good because it's the right thing to do, not because they fear the ever present Eye in the Sky who watches you while you eat, sleep and shit. Start being good because it's the moral thing to do, not because you're afraid of going to hell. Or change your poem so that the message isn't such a terrible one. -
jjbreunig3, Your poem strikes the heart. From the comments I have read on this poem this seems to be the case with most. God's gift through your words, is a wonderful blessing. Its time for some soul-searching and cleansing. Frans.
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very nice piece, I wish I could always have the attitude that you have, but I have had so many trials in my life that sometimes it is hard to even pray! I am always helping others, but I find it very hard to help myself....if that makes any since!
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Very nice
I liked the rhyme pattern you established in this- one worth trying.
It's good to have a realization that God IS going to review our lives one day- and we will be so thankful when we see that precious blood covering ALL.
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This was a great read. Your talent really shines on this piece. It is no wonder this poem won that contest.Keep up the great writing.
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I really like this, its very true, heartfelt. The truth of this poem shines through so bright! It had a nice flow to it. I love the title, and how you tied the poem together. it encouraged me to get to my judgement and see God. This poem deserved the gold, congrats!
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I don't like it. And I'll leave it at that.
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Interesting view. I like the last line. It really brings it all together. Good luck.
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Nice
I like the way your heart shines through here. Congrates on the Gold as well! Peace, and much love always, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Thanks for this poem.
Lately I have had problems determining what to do about a spiritual situation. I read this poem and found a great deal of enlightenment, because after all in the final analysis it is God that reviews what we do.
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It's very powerful and enlightening! It seems there is reviews everywhere, school, work, etc. It inspires in balancing up good against bad deeds and minimise the nature of sin. Love these lines -
hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word.
An attitude of lifelong praise I’ve spoken
based on what I’ve learned and heard.
You can go around in search of spiritual affirmation of all kinds. God inhabits Eternity and brings us safely to salvation. God is gracious regarding our shortcomings. A review in rightness and love. Regards.xx
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Very nicely written, Makes me think of a poem written by Robert Service. But not at the same time. I do like this piece though...I can see myself standing before god, awaiting my final judgment.
Sel!
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verry nicely done. Congratulations on winning the gold in the contest!
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Nice musical quality to the word placement. For me the poem indicates that no one is perfect so we rely on mercy from the creator. It has a nice soft warm tone void of pious indications. I always like that in a spiritual write.
I think you express the desire to live in a way that would live up to expectation, but the realization that we all fall a bit short of the mark.
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Nice!...
I liked the form you had on this one.
At first I thought it was going to turn out sing-songy when I read, but changing the end on each third line added a nice variation.
The theme was well-thought, too.
Congrats on your virtual prize!
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Congratulations on your GOLD! I especially liked the 2nd stanza (my favorite). Your spiritual insight truly shines and thank you so much for visiting me. God bless, ♥ Belle
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Keep Inspiring the world
Oh Wow I see why you won a Gold Trophy. Your words are so inspiring. I like the way you prepare for you your journey to heaven the day it come. (Lisa)
“Despite flaws and failures absurd,
hidden in my heart is Your Holy Word.
An attitude of lifelong praise I’ve spoken
based on what I’ve learned and heard.”
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This carries a lot of nice sentiments. However, it appears weak in places, almost like you are begging God for what He has already granted you.
The fourth stanza gives the impression that your faith is a mystery that you have only partially uncovered.
I like some of the elements, in particular the third stanza. The flow is slightly uneven, but the rhyming scheme is very nice.
Thank you for sharing.
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Very hymnal quality of this poem. I think S1 could have more a sense of judgement however.
I think there's not so much attention given to the rhythm of S2.
S3 is a real winner and represents the best part of the poem, in my opinion.
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this is a very good write from you. i have been writing quite a bit of spiritual stuff lately so i quite enjoyed this. good luck in the contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie.
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So strong a faith is prize in itself, and you show it proudly here. His Kingdom come, His will be done, on Earth as it is in Heaven.
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This is beautiful! I enjoyed reading it very much, thank you.
~K~
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bravo
Interesting poem with some fine rhyme and meter (note: one suggestions, I think it might greatly improve the poem if each were to even up the syllables in each line so that they have the same number of syllables.) bravo!
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A very good write, and, had I wanted different things for the contest, I'm sure you would have placed. I really like this poem, it is written well and is very inspirational, but it isn't quite what I was looking for this time around...
Great write, though. Good luck in whatever the future brings.
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Hmmmm. A nice soft tone you've carried through in this. (I can't /quite/ relate to the theme, given a difference in background and in thoughts on what is to come, but this is certainly well written and nicely expressed.)
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Wow, awsome!!
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Not a single deed goes unnoticed, not a fragrance of a thought, barely detectable remains unheard in higher realms. It is not a Big Brother system, not a celestial echelon, but a compassionate way to guide us through time and space. All up there have been down here; they understand what it is to survive the ordeals of this three dimensional realm of pain. It is transient and all we learn here we will one time use to help from above those who then will live down here. Congratulations on your win! Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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Wonderful poem. I feel what I have read so far, you poetry is anointed. Great work!
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Makes the reader think....
Excellent write. Your closing left a strong impression-something we as Christians all know we will face one day is HIs review and don't we want it to be one He approves of. I hope you fair well in this contest~vj
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Good content
This poem as a really good content. I like how it ponders what judgement will be like. Because we've all gotta face it one day and all our deed will be judged that day.
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Grace and mercy carried me:
Your covering on my life you shall see.
Hopefull you'll remember that I
promoted Your kingdom for eternity
Just beautiful are these lines. The whole message is breath taking. I enjoyed your write so much. I felt The spirit of God in this.
With and inkling of spirtual clues,
I'm thankful for knowing You,
and looking forward to that fateful day,
when my life will be ready, for Your Review.
This is wonderful. You paint God's love, our hope into a magical faithful truth. I love your words so much. thank you for sending me these links. I am enjoying them and my soul is being uplifted even more as I read your work. God bless you and never quite writing God's spirit. It is beautiful.
Tabith
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Great job! Nice work! The message is clear that we should live as He is reviewing us now so later he will tell us "Well done thou good and faithful servant." I was blessed by this.
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Well Done, Good and Faithful Servant.
Prove yourself able onto the Lord, and He will
pour into you His wisdom and grace.
~Quiet Chaos
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Indeed we should all live our lives so that we will have a good 'review' when our time is over on Earth. To read your work is always inspiring, my friend, and I am humbled. Hugs, Patricia
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Again, I say, "Amen!" The "failures absurd" is so true. When I look at all that God has done for me and given me, it is absurd for me to turn away from Him. I can have my life reviewed by God and not be terrified because I know His amazing love for me. I enjoyed reading this.
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