To say adieu to you
Despite, respite
To shake my lovers gaze
And know his
Circumstances, consequences
Reflect, object
To acquiesce, detest
His open offering
Of fulfillment
To know, betrothed
And stand incongruent
No minor judgement pay
To life’s retreat
Nor heed examination
Of songbirds inadequacies
Imprisoned.
Forever, chained -
Never be released by lock and key
Eternal destiny
Forbidden love
Author notes
......you are so fine to me ....Mr. James..for now..forever...for always..may we never be apart again..
Please tell me what you think
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First off - Welcome! From what I can tell so far, you will be a breath of fresh air here.
This piece is beautiful - very different and fascinating to read.
I have to echo what the others have said. Your creative command of language combined with what is coming from your soul is quite impressive. I look forward to reading more of you.
Excellent work!
Crissy
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very well done
Your finite tool doth cast an image ten fold its natural height... such prose. I think Willy said it best. "If music be the food of love, play on;
Give me excess of it, that, surfeiting,
The appetite may sicken, and so die."
Feed me more.
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i could only hope to satiate YOUR ravenous, never-ending appetite..
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fantastic!
using the words like tools on the hands of a master craftman. the grass is always greener on the other side, but is it really? you have great dexterity on your writing, great use of imagery. for me is therapy as well, one can get lost in this world that is only yours, some things people pick up, most, reamin our secret; its what i love bout writing. u do it very well. keep it up, and thanks for sharing.
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Very well Written!
Very well written poem. I love rhyme but not forced and your wonderful writing portrayed both with grace and poise. Command on usage of vocabulary is amazing. Very well thought Piece My favorite lines are:
While imprisoned by love
Forever, chained
Never be released by lock and key
Eternal destiny
Forbidden love
Yes I wouldn't mind to be imprisoned for my forbidden love, I sort of have a similar situation where I'm with a forbidden love & all I want is to be imprisoned by his love and throw away the keys forever. I love your poem, please honor me with more of your beautiful thoughts, can't wait to ream more of your writings. Welcome to AllPoetry, a poetry wonderland....Take care!
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i feel as if i've come home....i'm encouraged..thank you!
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A well written piece that has a good usage of rhyme,it was not forced but flowed well.Good usage of the english language,descriptive words which revealed the intensity of emotion within it's raw pain yet provoked thought.A poetic portrayal of the duality of love that has the ability to take the heart both mountain high and valley low at the same time,an intoxicating mixture that is not distilled like alcohol but ferments within the soul.
I see you are new to ap,welcome aboard our poetic community,any queries you may have may be answered by sending a mesage to the greeter on line under the feature box.I mention this as I didn't know when I joined and I was pleased when I found out.Also,when you have accrued points you may add a reward to your poem by clicking add feature,it increases the prospect of more opinions,all the very best
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thank you for you graciousness - i haven't written in years - this is wonderful therapy for me as i find my emotions again through words..
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