Amongst the evergreens; upon the
Mountains of love, lies a beautiful creature
Of the Lord's hands above. A very
Noble creature, filled with love and light,
Giving of pure spirit to fill your heart's delight.
Silent is this beauty, who breathes pure
Thoughts of good, praying for your strength
To see you as it should. Listen close and
Hear, the whinny of this mare; the whimpers
Echo softly, singing how she cares. Let her call
Envelop your heart and soul this day. Her
Vibrance for life is carried in her neigh.
Each shimmy of her voice to travel the canyon floor,
Reaching into your heart, so you
Grow stronger than before. She is a gift of
Radiance, let her light be your tranquility, and keep you
Ever held deep within her peace. She, the
Enchanted one, who walks amongst your dreams, for
Now is the time to grow as you
Step amongst the evergreens.
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A contest entry
- Poems for a child who is diying.**More points Added** by Widowmaker.
750 points, ended January 10, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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fabulous
what a grand acrostic! i felt i was there, wonderful imagery. you did a great job with this. keep the ink flowing. God bless you
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Thank you for your most appreciated comment. I do love writing the acrostics.
Storm
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What a breath taking write. It is so beautiful. It really touches all senses. Great writing and talent to be able to do that. Awesome job. Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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Thank you so much Jeannie, I always look forward to your comments. Glad you found this so beautiful, and I hope whom it was written for finds some inspiration in it.
Storm
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EXCELLENT
what a very unique and loving poem.Apoem from the soul with meaning and purpose.Wonderful words ,beautiful flow "Silent is this beauty,who breathes pure,Thoughts of good,praying for your strength. Thank you for sharing such a tribute in poetry.
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Thank you so much for your comments, truly appreciate it. I found I love writing acrostics so out it came. And this one just kind of jumped to life for the contest.
Storm
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Hi, it sounded like it could be about the unicorn, this was enchanting to read, dreams are made in poems like this one, all the best in the comp.Di
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Thank you for the comments, much appreciated. When I was writing it, the unicorn was what kept playing in my head, so yeah.
Storm
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Oh this is beautifully uplifting Autumn. You have captured a pure essence in these lines and it just spills thoughts of hope and serenity. I absolutely love this. Good luck sweety.
Vickie
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Thank you Vickie, appreciate your words hun.
Storm
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Good acrostic and nice metaphors, think when you wrote envelope you may have meant to leave off the 'e'! Sentiments are very lovely in this and I enjoyed it.
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Thank you for reading and commenting, much appreciated. Bad habit to put that e on the end, thanks for catching it.
Storm
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This seemed a nice cool perimeter of nature, and of course, I felt the Scandinavian type assent up hill climbs, lovely feel, the breeze of course, luxuriously placed, Much enjoyed, Titus
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Thank you for the comments Titus, much appreciated.
Storm
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I didnt realy get the flow of the poem AT ALL untill i realized it was ACrostic. very clever. most people when tey do an acrostic dont worry about the ryhming, but I am glad you did!! i greatly prefer poems that ryhme. not much can be said for the flow, considering the fact that it was acrostic made it a little choppy *forgiven* the rythm is much the same, but i loved the words you used, and the way you made it acrostic was very neat. Good Job
Great WRite and God bless
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Thank you for the comments, much appreciated. The flow does tend to get a little choppy when you write acrostic rhymes that don't follow traditional line breakage. But that is usually because people don't know where the breaks in the lines actually fall. Again thank you for the wonderful comment.
Storm
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