The written word
I don't deserve
Your caring lines
Of heartfelt tears
In what you don't say
Your hand displays
Your heart
Put out in lines
Your words of love
More than enough
Shedding tears
Of ink and blood
My heart gives a tear
To smear the meaning
Trapping forever
The mortality of ink
Your love resounds
In every sound
The silence grows
To fit your meaning
Author notes
its not supposed to make sence. its supposed to be lopsided. but it was a real chalenge. not only was i writting ON PURPOSE but i was also writting about something OUTSIDE OF ME. apparently im real self sentered when i write. this is about the poems my freinds have written me... thanks storm and mike.
A contest entry
- Prewrites Galore and Nothing More by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended February 22, 2007, 72 entries
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300 points, ended April 14, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options -- My very first contest by Unowhatthesis4.
1600 points, ended May 29, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie : Think you deserve a Gold? by FallingTwilight.
302 points, ended June 4, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Poems You Think Should Have Won A Contest by DavidTennantRocks.
475 points, ended July 13, 2007, 20 entries
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2100 points, ended August 22, 2007, 40 entries
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1000 points, ended October 3, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
is it abstract enough? outside of me enough?
Comments
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I love this one, how your talking to with the poem, how you speak out to poets every were. Well done.
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I don't know if I would call this abstract but it is good.
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Of course your poems great...why do I even look oh yeah because you rock lots of love G.
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This is GOOD. I man it- this shows your talent, and potential. The more you learn about poetry, the more powerful your poetry is gonna get.
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This is an awesome poem. I like the way you just let your feelings go. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Wow, thank you for this poem, I really enjoyed it. Writing about writing is never easy, and you've done a great job.
I think the last two stanzas are the strongest. The second to last because of the line, "the mortality of ink." That's a great line to express the permanence and yet impermanence of art, the way we try to capture fleeting moments in a way that will be meaningful through generations. There's a strange truth to that type of time recording and the odd relationship that a poet has with "the moment" (we're constantly outside of it, yet struggling, through words, to put ourselves back inside it).
The last stanza was strong because of that final image, "In every sound the silence grows to fit your meaning." I love that thought! The idea that silence grows as a response to the material we're trying to create (after all, a poem starts and ends with silence) is a really fun and thought-provoking idea.
So again, good write -
contest by unowhatthisis4 please read
ok so its not a published author. but he will be some day.and everything he writes means so much more for me. -
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:-D That's totally okay -- thank you for leaving me this note to explain. And there is still 8 days left in the contest, so I won't leave in depth comments on each entry until then --- but I've been reading the entries as I receive them and I've been really pleased with what I've seen. Good luck and have a good day!
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great poem. although, the few rhymes in it weren't perfect. at fault is the dreaded letter "s".
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You may not have purposely wanted to make sense, however to me, it kist of does. I guess this means I'm lopside.
Anyway, back on track, this was a great poem full of meaning and truth. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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the peoms beautiful
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hi meg this is hope
hey, i just got an account here. visit me, i'm rainy kisses. haha the name? iknow you were expecting something involving beating some one but no. any way this is an interesting poem. all of your work is joy to read. bye hun. -
omg, meg, what have I said about the poems that make me cry? *sniffle sniffle* hoochie, I love you too.
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your welcome,lol, i love this poem so much, it is on my top 5 favs thats 4 shure, i love it
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