The heavens roared with thunder
as lightning filled the skies
was this God getting angry
or Natures big surprise.
Is Mother Nature telling us
the best way that she can
to stop the interference
and abuse she gets from man.
We marvel at her beauty
each time we look around
then dig up all her treasures
from their natural burial ground.
We forget that Nature gives us
all that keeps us living
we take it all and still want more
but never think of giving.
We build across the countryside
progressing every day
but Mother Nature can't progress
for man is in the way.
A contest entry
- ISSUES FOR THE WORLD by kelbornro.
450 points, ended March 18, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Personal Best #7 (Prewrites Allowed) by aGent Lemon.
320 points, ended April 18, 2007, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LET ME HAVE YOUR BEST!!! by Ale E.
600 points, ended August 15, 2007, 65 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Big Yellow Taxi by SerenityNChains.
525 points, ended September 6, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Pre-Written Rhyme by poets whisper.
800 points, ended November 11, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tribute To Planet Earth - PW Closed - ONLY ENTER THIS TOPIC by DancingShadowCorpse.
650 points, ended April 19, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GOLD DIGGERS ONLY (just for losers) by tarcus.
950 points, ended April 8, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Mother nature will no doubt outlive us all for unlike humans she can and qill adapt to rid herself of the pests we have become.
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Very beautiful, touching, and it really grasped the topic. Wonderful work here. Thank you for entering, goodluck!
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I like the flow and the rhyme that is in this poem, it speaks wonders to your talent of the poet.
Thank you so much for sharing,
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You know I am so glad you featured this as its so true!,Hazel
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great.simply great.its no suprise you won so many contests for this.
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Wonderful!
no wonder you got so many trophys for this!
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Interesting. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks so much for entering into my contest and good luck.
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Intriguing write ...
and yes, you've handled the writing well enough. The poem, however, is too simplistic for what I've asked for in this contest. Not that it's a bad poem, but simply that it's not up to the standards of a number of other entries and thus has no chance in this contest. You might want to pull it and enter another since it's always possible I might find another of your poems more suited to this contest.
Thanks for entering and Happy New Year.
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they should both hook up and start another flood
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First let me say your rhyme is perfect, the flow smooth and flawless. After that...perfect meaning. I was awed by how deep this was. I usually prefer freeverse, but this rhymed poem is wonderfully penned. Thanks for the entry and best of luck.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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Wow very nice. I wrote something similar to this the other day actually. I really enjoyed this piece. Very nice, smooth flow.
This is my fav stanza:
We build across the countryside
progressing every day
but Mother Nature can't progress
for man is in the way.
This is going to be so hard to judge...arg..i guess thats' what happens when you ask for the best poems. Well thanks for entering. Best of luck.
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Wonderful
I agree with all the words in this poem. Very heartfelt. I actually became sad for mother nature and man destroying her beauty. Very Nice Job!!
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Excellent
Such a true heart felt poem here and yes The world is Gods house and we the people should be ashamed and mother nature one day will regain her beauty with or without us and like most women will do it her way
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Insightful
The title first caught my attention. The poem has a natural flow to it, and reminds me of the rhythm of nature. The poem's perfect rhythm seems to collide with the theme of conflict between man and nature. I enjoyed reading it!
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great way to show what is going on in the world. i hate what people are doign to the enviornment its just crue
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great write!!! Thats the first time i read something about nature like that, and you did a great job.
Its sad we are our doing to our world, in the end we both lose though, Man and Nature will fall, i just hope its not in my lifetime.
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brilliant poem i really enjoyed reading this and can see why kel added you to the finalists a brilliant wirte, i especially like the way you describe how we abuse the world and dont think about mother nature and the question at the begining leaves really strong imagery to the mind the rhyming words are brilliant and the title is a really good choice as it shows the fight between mother earth and ourselves, well done and good luck in the contest
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this is a brilliant piece of poetry with a really good rhyming pattern, thankyou very much for entering the contest, and you certainly have fulfilled my expectations
A briliant write
Kelbornro
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Ooh, wonderful! It really is important for everyone to do their part. Even though so many people realize it, just like you do, it's still not enough to make much of a difference. This poem rings true and totally hits home no matter who you are or where you live. Wonderful.
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Pretty interesting!
This is highly enjoyable to read Viewing all life as sacred my thought. I like the message you carry in having a sense of purpose in the quality and value of life and respect for all living things. Mother Nature needs a lot of dignified embraces from men because she is matchless in her natural resources and created by a matchless God. Not to try to compartmentalize an ultimate sense of mission in a personal cause in healing her is transcending the self.. Involvement is vital in preserving earth and every bit makes a huge difference 
Love and Blessings xx
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good writing here
I have a problem with the concept..man cannot hurt nature we just seem to be able to mess up our existence here..the planet will go on with or without us... but that's just my opinion technically this is good writing.
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I like the poem and the ryhme but I would have prefered it if you could have left a blank line after every fourth line.
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*sighs* it seems you have hit the biggest problem in our world today right on the head. This is a sad but true piece. Im glad there are people out there like yourself that can see that. Keep Spreading the word.
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a very true write. though i am not an 'environmentalist' i do believe in doing my part to keep this earth healthy. no aeresol hair spray for me. thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie
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Hi, this is really a great poem. It has a perfect flow, and a fantastic meaningful sober message. If only all poetry could be executed so smoothly. Very nice job. And great choice of background too - it gives the poem a 3d effect like it's supended in midair, and lighting's about to come and strike the whole poem down. Perfectly done. Great job.
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SOOO TRUE!!!
I love this poem. I am a nature lover,tree-hugging,peace seeking old hippie girl and I gotta say, you hit the nail on the head!!!
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I love the way you write and put the point across so simply but effectively. Keep up the good work and I'm going to enjoy reading more of your work. Thankyou.
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I am impressed.
I am a nature lover and this poem says a great deal about man's selfishness and stupidity. I will read your work with interest
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love it!
'man is in the way'
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