The room spins,
As the tile spreads the message
That I've drained myself of sins
Hand in hand, I couldn't grasp
The final lapse of my divide
And so it ends at it begins
In ink that bleeds as I have signed.
Author notes
For the record, if the off-chance ever came that I would meet my end in this fashion, I am now commited that I will handwrite this poem in my best handwriting and sign it in my own blood. Just as a footnote.
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Too rhythmic?
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short and concise..this did a fab job of delivering the feel of the write..there is pain after love..we just need to accept that...we bleed after cutting..in of course the deeper sense...pri
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not at all!
I love that you always use rhyme. I have a hard time rhyming because I think I put little thought into what I write... most of it just goes from heart to pen to paper. But I like that you think about what you write.
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Good job i really liked this one. I thought that it all went together well and it flowed smoothly. You have a lot of talent. Good job and good luck with the contest!!
Lindsay -
Well i should say, even though i can't really understand poetry (honestly lol) i really grasped this one. I liked how you brought the elements of that situation into such a short, but powerful, description. It's Great
good job
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short and deeply dark. very good job do keep it up!
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Wow
This poem is really deep. I like it very much. I understand what it is talking about and find it very intriging. Not in like a creepy way, but in a cool way.
-Ritsuka
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