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Beauty and the Beast

Beauty agrees to marry the beast - from Edmund Dulac's illustration to Beauty and The Beast
Upon his cash she’d gloat and feast,
his mind concerned her not the least.
She from his pocket book took note,
he on her beauty hung his coat.

Was this a fair exchange,  a beast,
to beauty bound ? Affection ceased :
a diamond river b[r]ought her vote
but could not keep his boat afloat.

From kowtow vow she sought release
while he refused her palms to grease,
soon each was at each other’s throat
nor sought to reconcile, emote.

Too bad amoral range should [s]team –
to add a moral strange would seem ...

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Edmund Dulac Beauty and the Beast
http://www.artsycraftsy.com/dulac/dulac_beauty_marry.html

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  • Brit-Girl
    August 1

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    This is a great tale of love the wording is good and it is well written. Your rhyme is not contrived and you did a great job writing this!
    thank you for your entry!
  • The background is beautiful but it cannot distract from the poem. The tale of beauty and the beast is always classic and the way you addressed it is more original then most I come across these days.

    "Was this a fair exchange, a beast,
    to beauty bound ? Affection ceased :
    a diamond river b[r]ought her vote
    but could not keep his boat afloat."

    I love your use of b[r]ought in this stanza which thus makes this stanza my favorite. I simply loved this piece and wish you the best of luck in the contest because this poem deserves recognition.

  • Cerbie20
    July 3

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    i agree with myself and i really do like this background. its beautiful!
  • Very nice ! This was wonderfully written, and the picture and background were beautiful and added a little more to the piece. I'm not sure if I can pick out a few favorite lines, because this was all in all a great poem :] The only thing I can recommend is the highlighting of the words. It is kind of hard to read and kind of distracts from the beauty within this poem. Thanks for entering :] <3
  • HMMMMMMM

    The background is brilliant, but along with the photo coloring, it's a wee bit hypnotizing. That out of the way,where on earth did you find a picture of my sister? heehee As usual, your imagery, outstanding. And the concept of this truthful penning is just brilliant. It's probably just me, but just a couple of things that bug me. I know, your thinkinhere we go.lol
    I'm not too crazy about the "highlighting", and call me crazy, I know you will anyway,lol, but what the hay is with all the {} jobbies? Sorry I couldn't make them like yours, I don't even see those on my puter!
    All in all, none of my ramblings are to be confused with me not caring for your piece. I love the bluntness. There are so many Beauty and the beasts roamin round all over this crazy society. I honestly know personally, a few sets of these myself. I hate chicks like that. But they won't get away with it for long, cuz karma WILL catch up with them, and bite them right in the ass! GOOD JOB, JR!!!! ALWAYS
    POETDONTKNOWIT
    WRITING IT HER OWN WAY

    . Rewarded 8


  • Zenda-Lokki gold member
    June 20

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    Beautiful

    Ilove the background you used for this poem, the colours are beautiful. Good idea to highlight the poem itself to make it nice and visible. I will steal that idea lol.
    Great poem.

    Del

  • Cerbie20
    May 2
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    wow... this is a great poem! i love it so much, and i like your choice for words... they were awesome! and i love your background! its really pretty, and it fits your poem. best of wishes!

    . Rewarded 4

  • This was an interesting poem, and the background was just beautiful. Excellent write, good luck in my contest.

    XXCrimsonRaineXX

  • Dead Hair silver member
    April 20

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    A very original write. I admire the way you told this filthy story so elegantly. Wonderful word usage!

  • Fourthaxis
    April 20

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    Amazing

    Rubaiyat is The Book! Love Khayyam and Fitzgerald for introducing me to writing poetry. The very first poem I read! A must read for all poetry enthusiasts.Besides I really loved your write!
    Accurate take of beauty and the beast, stunning vision, beautiful phrasing, good imagery, form; all the ingredients essential for a great poem!!
  • swimfallen09
    April 12
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    This is a wonderful poem. Your word use is beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
  • Very impressive!

    I admire anyone who can use Kowtow correctly in verse. your words flow with skill and you choice of BG is excellent.
    Ken

    . Rewarded 4


  • BigE
    April 9

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    Very poetic, so pleasing to read. Great use of language art. Super original, I thoguht it was great. Thanks for entering.
  • why are there smiles? i mean, frowns?

    to me it doesn't match the tone at all.



    this is dramatic and well acted. like a monolouge. tonight is a bad night of spelling. sorry about that. but could you explain the smiles? and i like the painting you used along with this poem.

  • alaskanamber
    April 9

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    This is a very pretty piece. You've taken advantage of the english language. I don't think it's forced, just not contemporary which is what some prefer. Nice imagery and a wonderful background. Thanks for entering and good luck.

  • jamiedoring gold member
    March 30

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    Fantastic Rhyme

    Your telling of this tale brings a wise and true message done with superb rhyme and excellent imagery. You have written a fantastic piece.

    Thank you for entering. I absolutly LOVE it.

    . Rewarded 4

  • kowtow

    Very wonderful start for my contest!! Thanks for posting this magnificent work of art!! This took on a different sort of twist and in made my chest ache... kinda also shows the extreme someone would go for beauty, like erasing their own happiness. Good job!! Thanks!!

    - - riah - -


  • KayJay46 gold member
    March 19
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    I really enjoyed this and thought it well told, well written and said...

    Ken

  • I found this quite intriguing, a little forced in some places, and a little on the short side- but i didn't mention anything about length, so that's my bad. I love the idea here, about money buying affections and it won't last forever, at least that's my interpretation. I really like the poem, but it could do with some expansion, it seems just a little too blunt. But I must stress, I do really like it, I don't know what that it is, but it's definatly got an 'it'
    good luck, and thanks for entering,
    xx

  • Unstoppable
    December 6, 2007

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    I loved this

    it is very abstract and thats what makes the poem. Great job, I hate gold diggers!!! lol I really like this poem and the message it gives. Good luck in the contest

  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    November 21, 2007
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    Great!

    Hey! This was a really great poem and I enjoyed reading this. I really like the rhyming scheme that you used. I also really enjoyed the metaphors that you used in your poem. This was a pleasure to read hun. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. Keep writing your talented.

    XChrissyX

  • Night Hope gold member
    November 11, 2007

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    "Too bad amoral range should [s]team –
    to add a moral strange would seem ..."

    Sighhh...Impeccably written & painfully wise, my Friend. Wanda


  • CresentFallenAngel
    November 9, 2007
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    I actually really liked this. It made me smile. Good luck in the contest.


  • WhenWillsCollide
    November 8, 2007

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    mmm
    taht was a nice read
    the overall feel of the poem was... light and easy
    and I am an easy kill for good rhyme, and I really liked yours

    very well done

  • oldphotosonlybringt
    November 4, 2007

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    wow, nice poem sweetie thanks for entering and good luck i loved it lots..xxxx

    btw: i couldnt find a fave part so yeah it was all kool-kool

  • wanted-forever-now
    October 29, 2007
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    i enjoyed this, it was a really good write

  • Emberlynn
    October 21, 2007

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    I love it.

    You sound so intelligent. I love how you weaved the words together, so they can slip right off your tounge. Thank you for entering and good luck.
  • PersuingHappyness
    October 19, 2007

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    I do love this poem... for once I can read a poem and see intelligence behind it... unfortuatly on Allpoetry it seems to be a rare thing. Very well written.. I love how see took advantage of him and used him for his money... While I would detest the girl if she was real... I find that the horrible things in life are the best topics for poetry.... Thank you for entering and good luck

  • Head-Full-Of-Sounds
    October 11, 2007

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    Wonderful job on this poem. I love it! I found only one problem was the title. This contest is for titles only, and you do not have a title that is posted on the contest page. If you would change it to one that maybe fits this poem. Then I will coment it. It will not be fair to the other contestants if you get away with breaking simple rules and they do not. Great job and I hope to see you change the title.
    ♥ head full of sounds ♥

  • captain howdy
    October 10, 2007
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    cute! Best wishes!


  • Trinity Dragon
    October 10, 2007

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    ha ha. Funny funny. I never imagined Belle as a gold digger, but I think I can visualize it fairly accurately now.

  • Moonlight Complex
    October 9, 2007
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    Great poem. You did a wonderful job with this, the rhyming is nice and flows well.
    Good luck.

  • cutekitten789
    September 29, 2007
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    this is a cool story and reminds me of my father in a way...this is a good and true poem
  • ecrivain01 silver member
    September 25, 2007
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    Not bad ...

    but I'd change none to nor in line 12. All in all, good job. Reminds me of the situation with Paul McCartney and his ex. Thanks for entering.


  • Phiona
    September 25, 2007

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    This is beautiful. I love the punctuation you used in the second stanza, it's great. Thanks for an absolutely fantastic entry into my contest and good luck.

  • Rachel21
    September 25, 2007
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    very well done, love the creativity in your words thank you for entering
  • tigress3737
    September 9, 2007
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    Wonderful poem-creative, skillful, and honest. Beautiful work! Thank you so much for entering!

  • Felix BlackHeart
    August 31, 2007

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    this is really good. it seems confusing to read at first, but then it's easy to understand it. thanx for entering!


  • DeepinRage
    July 27, 2007

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    This poem is very striking...very moving. There is one thing I really appreciate about your work and that is how you can move a person with just the descriptive images you put forth! Bravo...

    . Rewarded 4


  • crystallynnbradford
    July 26, 2007
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    interesting.......

  • Freakout
    July 17, 2007

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    This poem was little hard to follow, although it is a very good story and based on a good solid foundation. The title really does draw you in!
    Goodluck in my contest!
    Much love,
    Emily x

  • ms-cuddles
    July 11, 2007

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    Marry for Money

    So many people marry for this reason. Sometimes it works, sometimes not. I hope this is not written from your experience then it would truly sadden me to see you taken for a fool in love. Thank you for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles

  • QuackQuackTiffany
    July 11, 2007

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    The rhyming was beautiful. Usually when people, like I, try to make poems rhyme they sound terrible. I don't have any skill in that area, obviously you have a lot! Great write! Thank you for then entry.

  • These tears I cry
    June 29, 2007
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    Very good, I enjoyed it, thanks for entering.
    You are very talented.
    -Stormy-

  • suechtig
    June 22, 2007
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    wow!!! you should totally enter this in the cricket contest.

  • restful.soul
    June 21, 2007
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    beeutiful work! the language and ryhimg used was genius! the story as gorgeous and this poem was breathtaking x i have entered you into my finalists list which means that even if you do not win, you will be invited into my second round of this multiple rounds contest where more points will be at stake x well done and good luck
    peace

  • glued-to
    June 19, 2007
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    you did a very good job with rhyming effectively in this poem. I liked the imagery and the plot of this poem. poor beast who the beauty uses - an interesting twist i was expecting something along the lines of the classic beauty and the beast story but this suprised me in a good way. very clever idea. thank you and good luck

  • perfect relief
    March 1, 2007
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    This is a good work. I especially like the question that you ask: Was this a fair exchange, a beast,to beauty bound? In everyo other story that you read it seems that the beauty is the one that is attached to the beast, but you have made it more than apparent that that is not the case.

  • Sacrificial Love
    February 22, 2007

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    You are too much...

    I love your wit and the way you bite here and there...

    Keep writing ...
    and keep writing YOU...like only you can!!!

    Heidi

  • Sally the Ragdoll
    February 9, 2007
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    Nice! I really liked the first four lines:
    "Upon his cash she’d gloat and feast,
    his mind concerned her not the least.
    She from his pocket book took note,
    he on her beauty hung his coat."

    Keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest!

    -lly

  • Welcome-To-Hell
    February 3, 2007

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    This was amazing I can really picture these 2 people you did a wonderful job very well penned best of luck to you in the contest
    Bravo

  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    February 1, 2007

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    last read for this morning (maybe even day)but glad to have run across it. I enjoy sonnets, but can not do and therefore not critique well either...so to the write, of course no moral needed, sort of just rewards though for this beauty and beast. Seems as if both got a little of what they were after (of course the write reads much nicer than these harsh words of mine)I had considered this contest...but as usual, no time. Of course best wishes are a given,
    reenie


  • Cherokee
    January 28, 2007
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  • Shadow Wind
    January 27, 2007
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    wow...this was really good... a nice spin on the seemingly all too happy stories we hear these days... it flowed very nicely and i really enjoyed the wording. Good luck in your contests and keep up the good work.


  • Teenage Confessions
    January 20, 2007
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    I love the use of language

  • A u r i e l l e
    January 15, 2007

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    She from his pocket book took note,
    he on her beauty hung his coat.
    Was this a fair exchange, a beast,
    to beauty bound ? Affection ceased :
    a diamond river b[r]ought her vote
    but could not keep his boat afloat.

    this was creative and orginal

    i have to bookamrk i wishi though of that idea

    A diamond triver but didn't keep the boat afloat


  • hippy love
    January 15, 2007

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    cool i liked this poem and i love beauty and the beast i think you have done a wonderful job well done xxx

  • falcon25
    January 15, 2007
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    wow!

    I loved it! It's not simplistic, you have to READ the poem, and are rewarded with much deeper and complex emptions. Well done! I loved the tone of the song and that the message is not completely methodical and one sided.


  • Wasted Years
    January 9, 2007

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    Couldn't help thinking of the cartoon of this, but sort've in reverse. Instead of (this is my opinion of course) it being, "beauty in the end loved the beast," it sounded like "beauty in the end decieved the beast."

    No matter, it sounded well-written. I've never read sonnets before and honestly, from this alone it feels as if I read every single one and enjoyed all.

    This is, in it's own little way, amazing and well-thought out. Thank you very much for giving me the opportunity to read this!

    -King Nothing (Draacon)

  • MoonlightButterfly
    January 4, 2007

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    Snazzy

    It's really cool. I like how you put one letter in brackets to make the meaning totally different. I meaning hidden. It's cool


  • Room without doors silver member
    December 31, 2006
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    Outstanding.

    I liked the droll humour in this, that reflects the materialistic world which we see so much of today. I liked the light tone of this and the lines:
    She from his pocket book took note,
    he on her beauty hung his coat.
    This flows well and I liked the subtle use of irony.

  • pelo801
    December 17, 2006
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    that was pretty good. i like the line his mind concerned her not the least. good stuff

  • Deviantpoetess
    December 16, 2006

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    Beautifully written, with a question of,
    Can one buy love..
    I think not But wll say one may buy thier health now adays
    Love I believe is like a flower it grows, it wilts and like perrinials it grows again perhaps much more than the season before..You learn to love through the hurt, tears,joy,and even the fun and laughter..
    Glad I got the chance to view a few of your poems for you have talent
    Be well
    Lori~

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