When summer's sun hath kissed the rose,
And wilting blooms blossom fair--
An azure vault o'er earth's repose,
Bathed in gold, surpassing rare.
I know thy touch upon the winding path,
A crooked wandering amid lush grass.
Seek solace where bubbling crystal sings,
The heather's scented, twined morass.
A gentle urging of sleep's sweet wrath
Following a dying, crimson swell;
The deepening green of erstwhile spring.
Screaming to the mountains, an eagle's cry,
Slicing the veil of morning's gray.
Beating hearts sing where velvet shadows lie--
Our song of glory...hail the brave.
Drink you deeply the love of life, sleep with the night;
Glory in her rising grace, revel in the sun.
Then find my name among heaven's stars,
The deep calling of night-song, beheld by but one.
Captured in a silken sigh, the silver moon's wan light,
Borne upon drops of liquid fire--
Flames dancing wildly, worshipped from afar.
Even as spring dies her silent, painless death,
Giving way to the flare of summer's dawn,
So must summer draw her last, gasping breath--
Lured into autumn, slain by the siren's song.
Follow my gaze to a faltering, sun-kissed brown,
A soft remembrance of the season's flame.
Blue night's falling dew, hardened into winter's warning;
Men wither and die...still she calls your name.
Hearts conceal the senses' plea, forgotten moments lost,
Time strides past the barriers of hope--
The season melts...into a chill, winter morning.
Author notes
A member of my sophomore creative writing class bet me that I couldn't match Keats line for line in a poem about nature and the seasons. I don't know if I won the bet, but she did like the poem...and it ended up in our literary magazine. It's my favorite--mainly because I love descriptive words and rhyme.
A contest entry
- Poet Laureate of all AP for the year 2007 Contest # 87 at The Winkler by Andantino.
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Comments
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And again I return to your breathtaking writing. It seems so long since I read this; it was almost like reading it again for the first time. Sung a melody to my soul that sunk deep within and enriched me. Love how you wrote this. Wish I could keep giving clappy men, but it won't let me now.
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...but it will allow me to keep rating those lovely comments a 5, and so I will.
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I love coming back to this amazing and magical write. This is perfection in beauty and sublime divinity. I cannot say enough wonderful things about the magic in your quill, my friend. Breathtaking...
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First off, I love this line "A gentle urging of sleep's sweet wrath" You described the power and lure of sleep perfectly! I also love how you say the sun "kissed" the rose, makes the beauty of nature so much more intimate. "Then find my name among heaven's stars" <---so beautiful!
I would quote more verses, but i'd end up pasting the entire poem again. This one really is a masterpiece, Lone Defender!
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Such a brilliant write so full of love and emotions. Wow is all I can say. Amazing, good luck in my contest
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Beautiful piece fulled with love and nature... Also love the way you have used old English. Normally it doesn't fit but on the topic of love and nature it does, as the classic poets wrote so very well in these genres and we shouldn't forget their style any time soon. In with the new, but keep the old as well... A bit of variety within the poetic world is a must I believe.
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wondrous !
... thou art found words in thine age ...
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Excellent!
Beautiful form, rhyme, flow and word usage!
You should have won the bet!
This is amazing!
TY for entering my contest!
Lynda
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This poem has some of the strongest descriptive word choice I've read on AP so far. I could start listing particulars but then it would easier to just quote the whole poem! The description is simply astounding. There are some things that could be done to improve flow however as there are some deviations in line length that can be a bit awkward and one or two places where rhyme is a bit ambiguous. Overall an excellent poem and when it comes to poetic description, I think you might just give Keats a run for his money. Thanks for enteringa and good luck.
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Dreamy
I was caught in the lyricism of this piece. A dream like quality that captured me. Honestly made me cry, for it expresses, to me at least, more than just season changing....perhaps the season that is our lives that changes. Beautiful! Good luck!!!
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Beautiful wording, so much imagery. I love it, hon, really. Thanks for entering.
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Beautiful, Will! Oh I love this... The words are so descriptive, full of imagery and life; the flow and rhyme scheme are perfect. I believe this is one of the best poems I've ever read, ever. The first line had me totally entranced, and the rest was magical. Perfection!
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what a beautifu write, such perfection in description with words, you use words like on that i ahve never seen, great work!
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very lovely deep write. very captivating.
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Surperb does not even begin to describe the usage of the seasons used here. This poem draws the reader in from beinning to end. I have to agree the content, and imagery you have captured here is outstanding. Good luck in your contest! ~Sie;f
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Truly wonderful
What can I say , where do the words come from to do justice to this exemplary write.I love everything about it, subject, content,and such amazing imagery.Good luck with this, though luck is not needed. It is a superb piece and thank you for sharing....mal
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