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Bound & Chained

 

 

 



Come,

touch me.

Become scorched

&

branded

by my heated flesh.



Feel

the intensity

of the fire within.



Look

in my eyes.

Bare witness to

the blazing inferno of

anger

&

pain

that dwells beneath

the surface.



My

rage swells

to monstrous heights;

consuming me, itching for release.



Set

on destruction,

internally

&

externally.

Clawing at my insides;

screaming desperately to be

unleashed.


Collared

&

chained,

kept bound from

escape is the demon

spawn known as my

wrath.


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  • In Too Deep1
    September 25, 2007

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    Oh my! What have I done to deserve such a fate! It appears that the gentleness of your eyes hold as well an intense darkness that haunts innocense as if .. boogie woman. Great job,, but I am closing the basement door... and double locking it!


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 8, 2007

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    Very strong! This one seethes with "I dare you to open the door" Whew! Glad it is not directed at me Excellent piece, intense and powerful.


  • Lj-
    January 5, 2007

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    This was great.

    I really loved how all your description really came from verbs instead of adjectives.

    Really good job.

    Thank you for your entry.

    Good Luck!


  • Daoine
    December 18, 2006

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    We need to run together on those nights...let's hunt and howl...a lil blood and bone will make it all better.


  • nichtmich silver member
    December 15, 2006

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    Deep

    This is not only dark, it is raging from your very core. The format and those frightenly angry words leave me stunned by the sheer force of unbridled wrath. The only thing I would think of changing is Line #4, the word Bare, I think it should be "Bear" Otherwise, sublime. Best wishes in the competition.


  • Despairkitty
    December 12, 2006
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    This was great. It really reminded me of my really explosive temper. It is sometimes like a beast that you just cannot contain. There is nothing here that I would change. You did a great job, and the poem flowed well. Thank you so much for entering my contest.
    Despair


  • Blazing White Wolf
    December 11, 2006

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    *sigh*

    Oh honey don't stuff this leet it just flow within and out you... transmute it and release it It hurts to see and feel you in such a state
    love you my sweet lioness
    Love,
    Master

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