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Wish upon a golden star...

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My Christmas wish

Wishing I could hold you

through the night my little

one, time is precious and

the world awaits your

presence.

 

I am told you will become a

man, but will die for all our

sins.  You are but minutes

old as I look into your eyes

of the man you are to become.

 

My only hope is that you never

forget what it is you were sent

to do. 

 

The wiseman are here to see you

now, I will fade into the background

my son as you shine through this

holy night.

 

I wish upon this golden star to

keep you safe my precious little

one.

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  • Lady Ireland gold member
    August 5
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    Worth the read and worth the gold cup.
    very nicely done indeed.
    D. x


  • Swan song gold member
    October 30, 2008
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    Another stunning beauty and well deserving of the Gold


  • Kappa Pyua
    August 14, 2008

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    Tis a wonderful remeberance of what he has done for us, and how he came about in humble place of birth. The lines are as simple put as can be an also convey true meaning, thanks for sharing this piece.


  • libithina
    January 18, 2008
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    Stunning write, loved tht 'fade into the background' deeply meaningful, all love Lib x x


  • unmasked synergy
    December 1, 2007
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    liked it, should that be the 'wise men' in the fourth stanza?

  • eternal-devotion
    December 1, 2007

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    Beautiful.

    You have truely written a beautiful poem about Christ the babe and the man. You truely deserved the gold for such an aweinspiring portrayal in this well written poem. I would imagine that the Christ Child did shine out to all mankind and He was surely sent to save mankind and was such a precious gift that is treasured by all who believe. I really enjoyed this poem.


  • tlsledge
    December 1, 2007

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    Very precious write. Beautiful beyond mere words. Keep on keeping on. May the Lord guide and bless you at all times.


  • karma-n-peace
    December 1, 2007

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    AWe.. what a beautiful tribute.
    Your poem is so moving and a nice twist on an old story, to hear from another's point of view perhaps.
    Very much deserving of the gold and so glad you featured it.
    I truly enjoyed it very much, thanks for sharing this!
    Blessings to you and yours


  • ebaby
    August 25, 2007

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    I read your featured poem, you need not love me, then I jumped to your profile to see more of your writes, This is so beautiful, as is you need not love me......... I was filled with such joy reading these two poems and felt like a found a rainbow. You are a wonderful poet! I look forward to reading more of your love.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    June 10, 2007
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    beautiful scenery

    Most wonderful poem!
    Smile.
    Judy


  • Lucian Valcor
    April 8, 2007

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    interestiing story and a true one i am told any way by the mass population, great job sie you did wonderfully

    Your baby brother robert hahaha


  • Paladin Warrior
    April 7, 2007

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    what story telling

    this is so well writtin and telling of the personal side of mary, like some other have said this is so well written it seems mary couls have thought and said these things...............joe


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    March 31, 2007

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    I am in awwwwww of how special your writting is. Such power style and grace all at once. You are such a gifted poet.

    I can see why you won gold with this poem, because this poem is just that special...


  • Rose Angel gold member
    February 24, 2007

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    Worthy of Gold..and Won!

    This is the most beautiful short I have read with Christmas and the Nativity ..Marys'prayerful musings,so beautifully written! How do we know that she didn't say these very things or think them..Powerfully Moving.So believably down to earth...Every home should read this at Christmas! Bravo! Good Write!


  • thelastknight silver member
    February 13, 2007
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    Excellent

    Beautiful perspective. I really like this one.


  • Mr Fluent 4 Fun
    February 3, 2007
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    Lovely little poem

    I really enjoyed this one lots,
    So soothing to read.


  • I will stand by you
    January 25, 2007
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    such an excellent poem even if I am an atheist


  • panegyric ink
    January 21, 2007
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    really liked this.


  • Jarrod
    January 5, 2007
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    awesome piece here, you made it a point to see jesus in the eyes of God, but I like how there is a bit of hesitation from him giving him to us here on this world. Excellent piece and congrats on winning the gold, it was well earned!!!

  • Cinnarry gold member
    January 4, 2007
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    Rapturous


  • emeraldheartXX
    January 2, 2007

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    very special

    i love christmas!!!!!! thats so amazing that you gave birth around christmas, because its such a special time of year and you should spend it with family. a beautiful poem!!!!!


  • Princessdove
    December 31, 2006
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    very nic


  • Frozentearz
    December 24, 2006
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    Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem
    with us all and Congratualtions on the Gold
    a wonderful job you have done with this write,
    Warm thoughts, God Bless and a very Merry Christmas to you.
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • Rele anmwe
    December 24, 2006

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    HO HO HO, MERRY CHRISTMASS!!!

    Fantastic, fantastic piece of work. You really nail the coffin here. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing. YOu have a bless one


  • knitonepearlone
    December 24, 2006
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    Such a lovely poem to read on Christmas Eve. Thanks for sharing! Kath

  • chrisky1
    December 23, 2006

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    So Sweet

    I have no gifts to bring. You brought a gift for all of us to share as his birthday is nigh and on that silent, holy night I think we all will be blessed, Thanks merry Christmas, Chris


  • December 23, 2006

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    A Rare Gem!

    I like your poem very much. It has a true message within it's threads. Your imagery is simply great! I could almost feel an inspired hush as I read the poem! I think the flow is just a little bumpy. A little work on the rhymes and the structure may help the flow become more smooth. Good luck in the contest.


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    December 23, 2006
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    aw.. a sweet write.

    The christmas theme relates the boy back to jesus, i don't know if you are writing about your son, or jesus (hope its your son ) but either way.. itw orks nicely.

    ongrats on the gold
    jess


  • ShaShay
    December 23, 2006
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    Excellente!

    A wonderful tribute and so much said in a very few words. Thanks for sharing.


  • Cannonsfire
    December 23, 2006

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    What a sweet lullaby that Mary whispered to her infant. You have been blessed to write such wonderful words that would have been heard that night. Blessed be. Have a wonderful Christmas.


  • TangibleTattoos
    December 23, 2006

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    amazing

    this is amazing! I love how you were talking about the nativity from Mary's point of view. Lovely, just lovely.

  • The Elder
    December 20, 2006

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    this was a great poem. keep up the good work!

    your friend
    joe


  • December 20, 2006
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    this is good...you're my first comment.


  • One Eunique Pixie
    December 20, 2006

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    Wow

    This poem is so beautifully written, and alarmingly emotional. I absolutly love the wording, and especially the flow. It took me to a place that I could completly relate to, and I love it. Thank you for sharing such a master piece. Keep writing, I can't wait to read more. Love and Peace, Charlene.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    December 20, 2006

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    Very nicely written. I loved how you wrote this from the eyes of a mother. Well done description of the birth of Christ.
    Soulful Woman

  • Eulb kcalB
    December 19, 2006
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    The wiseman are here to see you
    now, I will fade into the background
    my son as you shine through this
    holy night.

    I wish upon this golden star to
    keep you safe my precious little
    one.

    Quite lovely indeed!!!


  • Pammers
    December 19, 2006

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    Beautiful

    This was just amazing written beautifully and you presented what christmas is and all i have to say is that this is absoutly beautiful! Keep up the amazing work! -Pammie-


  • melphleg gold member
    December 19, 2006
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    Good Christmas Reminder

    Nice perspective from a mother's point of view. I doubt at the time Mary understood what her son must do. Still this piece has the right perspective reminding us of the purpose of His birth. It also shows Mary's love and humility.


  • honey bear
    December 19, 2006

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    beautifull

    this is a very loving and tender write ,beutifully written and easy to understand how you won a gold trophy with this one a lovely point of view from the christmas nativity scene,thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work .christmas gretings to you and yours,beautifull poem


  • ImpaleRose
    December 18, 2006

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    This is an adorable poem!
    It's so meaningful and thought out I hope you and your (future) baby have a wonderful Christmas!

  • thecuteness
    December 18, 2006
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    cool


  • Nicole Cudworth
    December 18, 2006
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    I truly love that you have given Mary a real voice... she was a mother, first and foremost... I don't know if I would have had the courage to "fade into the background" as she did. Great job putting your own spin on this age-old tale.

    Love to you and yours this holiday season.


  • Lady in Love
    December 16, 2006

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    Nice poem Sis, just thought I would pop in and read one of yours. Nice change focusing on Mary, many people only think of Jesus, but I have to agree with the rest of the comments fantasic poem.


  • Darkdreamer2185
    December 16, 2006
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    awe thats very cute i think its great. good job.


  • Bettyboop24
    December 16, 2006

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    Quite an upbeat poem at the beginning then it gets sadder and drifts off into [silence]

    Great words and nice picture I get from reading this. I like how you incorporated Christmas time into this. I have yet to ready many Christmas poems.

    Thankyou for sharing and keep up the great work

    Bettyboop

  • Rose Angel gold member
    December 16, 2006
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    Excellent!

    Reading it one gets the perspective and thoughts Father God had at sending His precious Son to earth..He never forgot why He came, though He had a boyhood much the same...The Father God was always communicating with Him......What a lovely perspective and write!


  • unco
    December 16, 2006

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    This a beautiful poem Whilst reading it, i found it hard to envision Jesus as 'the Messiah' because in your poem, you give him a sense of mortality that makes it sad to think a man went through so much suffering for the sins of the world. And the way you described Mary... it's like she's just an ordinary mother giving birth in a hospital and waiting patiently whilst family members conclude the 'oohs&aahs' that come with new life... This poem makes you remember that these were, in fact, ordinary people in the most extraordinary way... Great write and a lovely poem to distrubute to family memebers at Christmas


  • FisherCat
    December 15, 2006
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    WONDERFUL!!!!!!!

    What a great spiritual read! For this time of the year! I love it! You have done a great job showing what the season is about, not all the commercialization and hype that we see everyday!!! Best of luck in the contest! Keep that pen flowing!!!


  • Alice Is Falling
    December 15, 2006
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    What an extramly interesting take on a story that everyone knows! I'm stuned, and incredably impressed! I love things that make you look at the world in a new light and you did that perfectly.
    ~Love from Alice


  • squink
    December 15, 2006

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    Its an interesting angle to a story everyone knows. I must admit I havent really thought about how mary must have felt during the whole event


  • Phoenix Renaissance
    December 14, 2006
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    this is Christmas

    Finally, i guess im not the only one that has not forgotten what Christ-mas is about. this is a wonderful poem with a very orginal idea of writing from Mary's point of view. It brings a nice little twist on the story that makes it all the better. wonderful poem with wonderful orginallity
    Dagon


  • Summer Dawn
    December 14, 2006

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    i like the approach you took on this as to speak for the father himself. gives a soft loving touch to it. very nice.


  • masterblaster gold member
    December 14, 2006

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    Hi, pretty poem, sadly every time man wages a war or abuses a child etc he is nailed to that cross yet again, let's hope man changes, a sweet poem, all the best in the comp, Di

  • unknownpleasure
    December 14, 2006

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    If only she did choose to fade into the background as you say there. I don't she seems the most publicity grabbing of them all - the britney spears of her day in fact...


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    December 14, 2006
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    Rated: A, for Awesome!!

    A wonderful Christmas poem, with very beautiful imagery!!!

  • Son of Jim
    December 14, 2006

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    As I read this I was torn, wandering is she referring to Jesus, or making an analogy to a dying baby in her arms. I worked out the Jesus part, which than makes me see this as a Mary perspective poem, and one that I have not read like. Does anyone ever picture Mary as a caring doting mother? Or do most see her as a dot in his shadow? Again intesting.
    Jim


  • paullallady silver member
    December 13, 2006

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    oh wow

    this was beautiful. It is so sweet and tender, beyond words. I really loved this. The tranquil way you wrote it was awesome.

  • afireinthisheart
    December 13, 2006

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    heartwarming

    A child was born to die...to give the final sacrifice so no more would have to be made...instead of the blood of rams, sheep and offerings of birds...the ultimate gift of love was born in Bethlehem and died on Calvary...He only lived about 33 yrs, but made such an impact that has lasted for 2000 years...beautifully and precious this poem is...smile...hugs and love, David


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    December 13, 2006

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    This is a very well written poem, and touches my heart, as it is a very important, but never really portrayed part of that glorious night, when Christ was born. To only imagine, what was going through Mother Mary's mind, as she gave birth, to the Son of God, and to know, what His purpose, in life would be.
    WOW, I really love this piece. Great writing and good luck in the contest!!


  • undertones
    December 13, 2006
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    Wow, that's a different perspective and I really appreciate your sharing of this. The Nativity scene is really something that we get used to--- but we hardly think of it from the mother that was pushed into the background while her child shone through. I just enjoyed the different perspective.


  • Ladybug
    December 12, 2006
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    oh this is just precious for this time of the year
    we all need a gentle nudge reminder what Christmas time is here for.
    may I print and frame this piece?
    I did so enjoy this immensely
    thank you for giving me a smile and twinkle in my eye.


  • Iohagh
    December 12, 2006

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    Sweet Jesus

    Darling

    Jesus upon his tenth
    saw those who came
    and remembers their tents
    before his future fame.

    Yes title and introduction
    and Christ baby dear
    need no more deduction
    yet he's still unclear.

    Your poem is sweet
    but I request more
    describe him more complete
    baby Jesus I implore.

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • babybrat140
    December 12, 2006

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    good

    it was very emotional which really got my full attention... and it made me realize just what the holiday is celebrated for....


  • WelshDragon
    December 12, 2006

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    WOW. You have quite a 'following' Sie, and no wonder with writes likes this. Very powerful ! Beautifully portrayed story of the 1st Christmas .
    Bravo


  • troyias silver member
    December 12, 2006

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    Beautiful

    Lovely sentiment. beautiful write. quite a different prespective on the birth of christ.

    *Go with God* my friend,
    Valerie


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    December 12, 2006
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    awww so beautiful,
    very touching and lovely.
    this write made me feel even more blessed.

    " i wish upon a golden star "
    I really like that...

    great job...
    writing written and the story within is precious.

    joyce


  • Keith Drew gold member
    December 12, 2006
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    Perfect Praise.

    What better form of praise, then of a child just born?
    For innocence is love in perfect form. Untouched, unstained, new born, fresh perfection in a simple,yet complex,creation.
    That this child be the savior, of us all.
    Beautiful sweet lady, simply beautiful.
    And perfect.


  • bluejeans51
    December 12, 2006

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    Right On

    You did a fantastic job helping all of us to remember Jesus. This is his time of year and we all should pray for forgiveness. My favorite part of this poem is
    The wiseman are here to see you

    now, I will fade into the background

    my son as you shine through this

    holy night.
    I liked the background. May god grant you every wish you make.


  • Rita Krocha
    December 12, 2006

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    Oh Beautiful!

    M mesmerised by clicking this. Don't know if it's the captivating background or the nicely penned poem.I guess it's both that has swept me by. Just love it the way it is.


  • drybones
    December 12, 2006

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    Beautiful

    Tis sad that many have forgotten the first Christmas gift was the gift of a child. A child who was born to die. I have often wondered about the thoughts Mary kept hidden in her heart. How much did she understand about the mission her Son had been sent to fulfill? You have created a beautiful work of art.God bless.


  • Keeper Of Peace
    December 12, 2006
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    Brill

    Thats it! 1 word to sum this poem up....BRILL!!!!!


  • combateye
    December 11, 2006

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    Wow I love this very well done keep them coming and Happy Holidays to you and yours hope the are filled with joy


  • green mother rose
    December 11, 2006

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    Very Nice!

    Any about this subject this time of year is golden to me.. Great work.. Blessed Be!

    Green Mother Rose


  • A Point Of Light
    December 11, 2006
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    this poem is great! i really like ur style. its a short poem..sort of but still tells so much

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    December 11, 2006

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    This is beautiful, wonderful imagey you have created, to draw in the reader.... tis the wonder of Christmas

    Karen


  • forty-one
    December 11, 2006

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    Very Nice

    Who knows the heart of a mother... better than a mother? This was very touching, and I really enjoyed it.

    Prince


  • Spiritvision angel
    December 11, 2006
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    This is very touching. It is an emtional and heartwarming poem. I love it!!

  • sunkissed07
    December 11, 2006
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    This is soo wonderful, especially during this season, so many people forget the real meaning of Christmas and this is a great reminder. I love the thought and feeling it is absolutely beautiful, great write.


    • Nature Song silver member
      December 11, 2006
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      Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. Glad you enjoyed it~Sie

  • Goobie5
    December 11, 2006
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    goobie5

    good


  • Slyder
    December 11, 2006

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    I read something similar to this, about Mary's words to the infant Christ. I love the sentiment you pen here. I can't imagine her anguish in knowing her perfect child would give his life for all the sinners of the Earth. I don't ever think of her as a background image in the Nativity, but as the foundation, and the source of the Christ Child's own light. Very nicely done!
    Slyder

  • Cannonsfire
    December 11, 2006
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    I could just see Mary saying in this in a peaceful moment between mother and son. And the anxiety she would feel for having given birth to the son of man. You have beautifully set this out and it was a joy to read.

  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    December 11, 2006
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    WOW

    This is one of the best CHRISTmas poems, I have ever read, Sie. I love it, the words and thoughts of Mary,
    so beautiful. I admire her, and I know it had to hurt deep inside, to know, that Jesus was born to die for our sins. Excellent write, this is what the season is truly about!!!

    • Nature Song silver member
      December 11, 2006
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      Jeremi, I am glad we could collaborate on our christmas poem we did together, that has meant so much for me. I'm praying for you being in the hospital this time of year...has to suck! My heart goes out to you my friend. With love ~Sie


  • Sgt B
    December 11, 2006

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    Thank you!

    For helping some remember
    the He is the reason for
    the season.
    Very well written & I
    love the message.

    ~Ron~

    • Nature Song silver member
      December 11, 2006
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      I was hoping you would enjoy this one. I love to read your spiritual poems. I was inspired by some of yours just wanted to give something back! ~Sie


  • Perfect
    December 11, 2006
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    that was very emotional i think just like you you also have very good endings.

    • Nature Song silver member
      December 11, 2006
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      Thank you dear one, I am glad you enjoyed this poem. I was trying to envision what it must have been like for Mary. Glad you liked it ~Sie

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