A mother and a child relax on a serene afternoon
They have come to the garden to watch the flowers bloom
This little time is precious for the world goes by so fast
Little moments like this one never seem to last
Soon the child will be older as you can plainly see
And she will have no time reminisce in memory
The time is short and the shadows are long
The child wishes that time didn't have to go on
For the precious moments will slowly fade and pass
But hopefully more can be made before time goes to fast
But with each year that seems to go by
They drift a part and don't know why
When the daughter sees her mother she wants to cry
But refuses to and just says goodbye
They part their different ways each path their own
But there is so much that is not known
The mother refused to see what the daughter can be
The daughter cries silently "Why me? Why me?"
Then the daughter remembers a serene afternoon
They went to the garden to watch the flowers bloom
She remembers that time is precious
For the world goes by so fast and memories may fade and pass
But her love for her mother will always last
Author notes
I grew up in foster care for half of my life. Over the years as I got older I took on more responsibilities and grew up rather quickly. When my mother came back into my life I was no longer the child she remembered. This proved to be a very trying situation for myself as well as her. But when I sat down and wrote about it this is what I came up with. I know that rebuilding our relationship will take time but it will not be impossible.
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this is a really beautiful and emotive write....bravo
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A deep & emotional piece...
Touching in its reminicence & familiar in its heartfelt sentiment as fathers & sons often drift apart in much the same way....
Impressive work...
Keep it up...
Well done!!!
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My what a heartfelt poem....
Deep and emotional
I could feel the emotions jump right off the page.
Good luck in contest, thanks for entering -
Hi Veronica
This is a lovely heartfelt poem which I'm sure will inspire many others who also have difficult relationships with their parents.
You are courageous and strong to be able to share deep feelings in your work. You have my admiration. Well done, it deserved the gold.
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This is a poignant and very touching piece
Very well written about the relationship repairing and all the emotion involved.
Thank you for sharing; this touched my heart!
I wish you the best!
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Thank you!
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Your Author Notes explained everything so clearly -
I can only imagine how hard it must have been for you and your mother to rebuild your relationship!
What this poem reminded me is all the books about war, where children are sent away for their own safety, but then when they return, they are no longer the kids that their parents remember - and often, struggle to make amends and live together once more -
You had some very personal moments in this, and descriptivie images - nice job and thanks for entering
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wow....so beautiful.
have you ever read the book They Cage the Animals at Night by Jennings Burch? I think that book would really speak to you. if you haven't read it already. it is if not my favorite book a close second. i read it at least three times a year. and every time, i still come away from it a different person.
your poem reminded me of that book and my goodness am i coming away from this with something different. simply transversial .
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A work of life and art.
Superb!
Time marches on lass...
it has no heart...
no memory ...
no time to stop...
those thing are all left to us...,.
to try and capture it...
hold....
feel it....
in pictures and poem and letter and song,
just to try to slow it
cause it just slips by so fast.
Made me ponder lass,
great write.
Peace,
Lowell Poe.
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Thanks.
Thank you. I realize that which is why I try to live my life to the fullest and the best of my abilities. I try to not dwell on the bad and just enjoy the good. I believe that life is what you make it.
Veronica
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The mother refused to see what the daughter can be
The daughter cries silently "Why me? Why me?"
Then the daughter remembers a serene afternoon
They went to the garden to watch the flowers bloom
She remembers that time is precious
For the world goes by so fast and memories may fade and pass
But her love for her mother will always last
This is exactly right. I loved this part simply because it is so true. As a mother I know that we will always see our children as the babies that they were. You children are always your babies even if they are twice your size. Thanks for the great write -
I love the picture you've painted for us...and I feel it. We all suffer from loss and I hope your current life brings you joy. Thank you for sharing this with the world. I enjoyed the time I spent with your poem. Write on, poet. Blessings,Myth
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Very well written and thanks for the story at the bottom explaining this write so well. I will be re-reading all entries closer to the end of the contest do that they will all be fresh and clear in my mind. Thanks for entering.
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