Writing rhyme is winding wisdom
in tethered wind of flight and prism
to cross the sky in darkened nimbus
like sponge to squeeze the verse within us
in precipitation’s grand elixir
of inspiration's soul, as fixer,
descending page to stained Mascara,
blinking vision for the wearer
as fluttered wish in subterfuge
parched before the last deluge
of words to find this poem's Phoenix,
raising soul, as Love he picks
to piece his mind within his Monster,
as void, where nothing moves one's blur
in blinder cuts from duller scissors
filling crevasse to wider fissures,
these phrases born in nonchalance,
as feather dancing debutantes
evolving plenty, as pulse in plethora,
conjugating verb, deciding debt or a
wish to raise a want from chaos,
as simple flower of prayer to play us
Summer music spun in fuchsia,
like scarlet petal dripping confusion
lost inside the blue hydrangea
we planted years ago to change a
notion of words in lines like cabbage,
never liked at all, but sacred passage
to new dimension as printed corpse,
a rhythm rising, as it morphs
in heartbeat looking for a stapler
to bind itself in push to table or
anything left to hold the window
etching ego... to fall as domino.
Author notes
So I used all 17 words in the bank...
A contest entry
- Mission: Difficult by shewalksintomine.
1287 points, ended December 18, 2006, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"to cross thesky in darkened nimbus
like sponge to squeeze the verse within us"
amazement pierces the soul to find
a world within us to etch from stone
a canyon to net the imagination
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LOVE THIS!
This is one that I would call...BRILLIANT!
I don't know how you do it but you are always topping your best!
I really am in awe of this!
Lynda
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You have done a masterful job with these rhymes. Many of the pairings you used were extremely creative. Favorites: scissors/fissures, nonchalance/debutantes. You have penned an impressive piece. Thanks for entering and best of luck! --->pixxie<---
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you used all 17, it's true, but you didn't make them glaringly obvious. i must admit to being a fan of the nonchalance/debutantes rhyme.
overall, well done, and good luck -
When you squeeze that sponge that is within you, Rich, it is poetry that flows from it...and impressive poetry it is. I don't know which words you had to use, but wow...this is something really special as it flows so naturally. You are so good at rhyming - well, actually, being the true poet that you are, you can write anything, anytime. A rich tapestry of word, Rich - and once you write the first word, the rest just falls like dominos. Like Wanda said, a beautifully detailed piece of poetry.
~ Nicolette
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To use all of the words is one thing. To make it sound like you didn't is another. Just great. Just...great. Wonderfully done.
Please don't respond to comments made by frae, pixxiepoetess or myself until the end of the competition. Thanks much for entering and best of luck.
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"these phrases born in nonchalance, as feather dancing debutantes evolving plenty, as pulse in plethora" Sighhh...Gorgeous penning, Scribe...It's very impressive that you used the entire word bank is such an elegant display of finesse, my dear Friend...Beautifully detailed piece, Sweetie...Good luck in the contest...
Wanda
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