I've come to awaken from this nightmare,
For life's malady I could no longer bear.
Laying here looking at the ceiling,
I willfully inhale the asphyxiating air.
Acquiescing to the certainty I am unremembered
Befallen in the silhouettes of a cold december.
Shouldering the jape that swallows facilely
Accepting death to this embodied burden--my cure.
The stone engraved internal contrition
Set free from melancholy disposition.
I'm laying here looking at the ceiling,
Dilapidated by a the ultimate volition.
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"She was a girl in the shodows
a pallid painted rose.
here, may she finally rest in peace
this girl that no one knows."
Author notes
1.Music sooths alot of people but it also tells a story, so pick your favorite song that describes how you feel and use a line from that song or rewrite the song if you wish but tell me which song you chose and the artist.
(title was changed from +The End+ to what it is now.)
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D.O.A by Bloodrock
Laying here looking at the ceiling
Someone lays a sheet across my chest
Something warm is flowing down my fingers
Pain is flowing all through my back
I try to move my arms and there's no feeling
And when I look I see there's nothing there
The face beside me stopped it totally bleeding
The girl I knew has such a distant stare
I remember
We were flying along and hit something in the air
I remember
We were flying along and hit something in the air
Then I looked straight at the attendant
His face is pale as it can be
He bends and whispers something softly
He says there's no chance for me
I remember
We were flying along and hit something in the air
I remember
We were flying along and hit something in the air
Life is flowing out my body
Pain is flowing out with my blood
The sheets are red and moist where I'm lying
God in Heaven, teach me how to die
I remember
We were flying along and hit something in the air
I remember
We were flying along and hit something in the air
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i chose the line "Lying here looking at the ceiling"
i guess this is done, fuck it can be short why not...
razor, i hope this poem suits your contest.
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Its the picture i had up before my paid membership expired:
http://i82.photobucket.com/albums/j262/x420buderfly420x/DeviantArt/61.jpg
A contest entry
- The Ghosts Of My Tears by Bruised.Roses.
375 points, ended December 24, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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well this was great and I loved every line...I can really feel your pain and can relate....I think you did an excellent job on this and I thank you for entering :0 good luck and keep writting
~Tasha~ -
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when death begins to look so fine
you fall into a sleep, devine
spill your blood and drink the wine
everything will be just fine.
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....awesome job, sweetie!!!!
this deserves GOLD!!! I would say more, but i'm beat tired right now. I just had to stop by and tell you how much i care and ....love your writing - and wished for the power to heal your hurting heart! 
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Cold & Colossal Like Everest
my dear friend, always dreaming....
(i'll just stick to the penmenship)
i really like the words and rhyme, you're starting to become a little human dictionary yourself there, wicked.
-cheers
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Wow hun!
Wow this is such a great piece. There is so much emotion and feeling in this poem. I can relate to this so much. I read the song lyrics and I love them but I love your poem even more..Anyways keep writting you are great at it. You are very talented. Good luck in the contest!
~Chrissy~ -
i adore this... and i LOVE the picture...
this poem is simply bewtiful.
i hope you are ok dolly.
you are wonderful!
goodlck in contestio xxxxxx -
bravo !!!
The pic was all enough to describe ur poem....lol..
POem has a depth and thats the art which u possess...
Good one from ur side, and I m looking forward to read ur more poems ..
PAIN is flowing....all over the body !!
Excellent work, hope to get more such pieces from ur side !!
take care...
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i love everything about this poem... your background as awesome, but I wonder if it may be a alittle distracting? i wouldn't change it though, cuz it looks frickin' awesome! your words are sad and meaninful, a mournful tone is definitly snesed here. good work and good luck!
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wow, first of all that picture is a little disturbing lol. but this poem is amazing it is very well written. You have quite a talent, i look forward to reading more of your work.
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