While your skies
Are dark with clouds
And rain mingles
With tears
While your seas
Are deep and dangerous
And caves
Release your fears
I am here within your storm
Relieving what you endure
Be your lighthouse through the night
Until you’re safe to shore
When the grey
Turns into black
And colours fade
To dust
When the floor
Crumbles underfoot
And there’s no
Handrail to trust
I will reach out my hand for you
Share my strength and safety
Be your fortress in this fight
Until you’re trouble free
For I have seen this darkness
And shed so many tears
You’ve been my strength, now I am yours
Unconditionally through the years
Author notes
Option 3
This literally poured onto the page (which was nice after a few weeks of writers block). I think it is pretty self explanatory and I plan to send a link to those who are closest to me.
In a list
A contest entry
- My first year on AP by forever dreaming.
450 points, ended June 17, 2007, 45 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the metaphors that flow seamlessly through this piece. They gave the reader a real sense of your compassion for others and the habd you extend in tmies of need. This piece has been crasfted using simple yet evocative language that appears to flow very well throughout. It is a poem of pure, honest emotion and compassion and the friendship enriched by years of experience. Excellent poem. Well worth the read.
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aww... think i am gonna cry reading your poetry. so beautiful. and i so know what you mean, the last stanza hit me the hardest:
For I have seen this darkness
And shed so many tears
You’ve been my strength, now I am yours
Unconditionally through the years
actually makes me think of the relationship i have with my mother.... and some others... i can actually see this poem from both the one writing it and the one it is written for.... in different situations, i'm sure. very well done! thank you!
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Glorious
One of the best & most emotional writes I have had the pleasure to read. a true work of art. Amazingly brilliant. " Your Still the Girl" & always the poet
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And thats the best way; just letting it pour out. i really like this poem. it was personal and deep and heart felt and just longing to come out after all that time away. very glad your writters block has passed, i am currently in an, almost, 2 year writteres blocks. i never seem to be able to think of anything that i really want to write about...hopefully ill think of something soon. Anyway, enough about me; really good poem, nicely written; well done!!!
Saz -
very good
hi i thought your poem was very heart felt and deep and it was really good to read i also like the way you said it just flowed on to the page as they always seem to be the best ones i think as that is how i write all my poems i never sit and think about what ill write just kinda comes glad you have got over writers block to
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good poem
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This is such a beautiful piece of writing.....the words and lines flow perfectly...I must say I really enjoyed this! thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work.
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AWSOME i loved it.. such deep words in parts some mistakes but other then that.. nice ♥ kimmy
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Straightforward...
And thats a good thing. I'm seeing a lot of "work" here that causes pain to read. This work of yours is a straight portrayal that could be used to teach. Thank you.
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nice! :)
Very deep and heartfelt. I especially like this part;
I am here within your storm
Relieving what you endure
Be your lighthouse through the night
Until you’re safe to shore
When the grey
Turns into black
And colours fade
To dust
your emphathy to other is one of your major assests in life and shall serve you and them quite well
love ya!
Dad ...
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Congradulations on releasing this...
Darling
You are a cataract
feeding pools of life
overflowing, always coming back
relieving others suffering strife.
Smoosh
Janet
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