The first morning wind blew off the strand
tangled in seaweed and salty brine, curled ‘neath
the eaves. Mewed for a warm toddy soaked
with rum to chase of the first chill of winter to come.
Laced with traces of a winter’s edge, I rose to pour
more coffee into my cup to clear my head for dawn’s
perfection. The soft warm promise of your breath caressed
my nape and chills escaped along my skin. Your fingers ran,
a stiff breeze across the grass, brushing the taut hairs
upon my forearm. I turn and find you wrapped in wind’s breath
lace that graces you to the trace of your lithesome waist.
Our lips brush like pinions touching in flight.
I know, I am but a kite upon the breeze to be tossed
played with as you need.
The swirl of winds rising from the south, the bodies caught
tossed about. The panting breath with roaring
sounds, breaks from chests as we are swirled around. Until,
the waves crest and break, foam tossed, crashed
cause the spirit’s quake
'fore spreading thin
disappearing.
I steal away the soft mist across your skin with my cooling breath.
Watch your breast surge to the whisper of a kiss. Your wings
ride across my face. Catch all the love that cascades forth,
you ride the currents writing songs of joy in all the winds
that haunt my chest. A ray of sun halos your face. Light
graces our loving nest, a catch of breath and then you sigh.
Your wings enfold my chest, you descend. Come to rest.
The wind unwinds from beside our house full of scents
promised with aromas blessed. Tosses limbs bare of leaf,
as if to wave good bye before it leaves. The sun, fully arrayed
fills our room with lights parade. I breathe in the last salty
brace as we meld our breaths into a thankful prayer of blessed grace.
For Lane
Sunday Dec. 10, 2006
Alexandria, VA
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This is a good piece, but I must say I was to start with a little put off by it's structure - that's just one of my little things though, I don't like poems that appear more like prose, and when I say I don't like them, I just mean their appearance, this has nothing whatsoever to do with the content, or the poem itself!!
You have some very lovely wording in there. It's a good job.
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Poetry is not line length or form. Yes these structures can help to support a poetic effort and for many if it doesn't rhyme confusion sets in. I like a lyrical edge so I stress the music in poetry. I find that metaphor plays a part in speaking to the human who lies below the expectations, walls and masks, but so do symbols, vision and the ability to touch upon something that rings in the heart. We humans are of such variation that no one will ever sing to every soul. Thanks for the insights and review, I appreciate deeply the time and effort taken.
Peace, Tom B.
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I've heard of this before, love that feels comforting and kind.
'Tis a beautiful concept indeed.
Ah, but to find as part of reality as such is suggested here.
Oh my...
That's excetional indeed.
I'm well pleased there are realities caught up with breathes of love which reflect what you have written here.
That's very warm and beautiful to consider as being true.
Exquisite verse, I love it.
Reads like a dream.
Like love.
Keep very well,
'Anna
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Thanks. I think the universe has many facets and there are always more to be seen.
Peace,
Tom B.
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This was a beautiful piece, it had a very elegant flow to it. However, I ask that you put what inspired you in your AN. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
--Pretty Disaster
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I know the contest is over, but just so you know. I had been talking to Lane about doing a poem together. I had been talking about breath and wind and the way they were one and the same. We never collaborated. But, I wrote this as a result of our conversation.
Thanks for enjoying my piece,
Love, Tom B.
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I think this is truly a beautiful piece...sigh...
Poetry such as this just reaches out and touches the heart and soul of a person
Love and light to you, my friend!
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Thank you for enjoying this piece so much. Dalaney and I had talked about a collaboration and I started thinking about breath and all the things it could be. So instead of writing a piece for us to collaborate on, this showed up. Appreciate all the love,
Tom B.
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I was here reading this again ....adding to my list to use for the poem of the week series...sigh...It is still my favorite poem of yours....
Lynda
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AWESOME!!!!!
My dear-sweet tomisb::
Your writing is forever the most amazing I've ever read, and gets better with each and every write.....
The metaphors, the imagery, every word is in the proper place.....
Thank you ever so much for sharing your wonderful gift with me and all others.....
Blessed be with love and light always,
Forever,
AngelicMistress...Tanya
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Thanks Tanya. I am always so pleased that you are so delighted with my work. Have a Happy Thanksgiving.
Love, Tom B.
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This is a very nice piece.Thank you for taking the time to enter.Goodluck in the contest.Best Wishes
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I think that you have done the right thing, with words, metaphors, descriptions. Sensual and deep feelings are visible within all lines. Interesting poetic style.
~Sonja~
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This was or is a study in breath. I was still developing my sensual style. As always the use of assonance and consonace makes it a feast for the tongue. When read at open mics, the room becomes mesmerized. Definitely a delight.
My style has definitly grown and changed from this. Origami Dreams which is listed for AP book project 2 is a beautiful example of how I still can take a single metaphor and explore its permutations, but the words are a little more precise and the vision a little clearer I think.
Thanks for listening and for sharing a insightful review. I take much from peoples simplist thoughts.
~ Tom B.
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So many lovely sensual metaphors here. This encounter is a cross between a dance and a prayer. Exquisite.
Karin
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I wanted to catch as many different forms of breath I could think of in a way that brought love to the door of her heart. Such is love.
~ Tom
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This is so sweet an lovely. I like your wording an imagination you put into this. Keep up the good work Tom. -
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This was just a study on breath and the way it expresses itself in the world of two lovers. Glad you were so willing to share your joy in this. Love, Tom B
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Awesome
This is a great write Tom, I LOVED this line "I know that I am but a kite upon the breeze to be tossed
and played with as you need." very good imagery here...Scott
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Thanks this was a study of breath. Admitedly I used deeply sensuous images but it seemed appropriate. Thanks for sharing the joy you received. Love, Tom B.
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"The wind unwinds from beside our house full of scents
promised with aromas blessed. Tosses limbs bare of leaf,
as if to wave good bye before it leaves. The sun, fully arrayed
fills our room with lights parade. I breathe in the last salty
brace as we meld our breaths into a thankful prayer of blessed grace."
this is so earthy, and sensual, and organic...i lrealy like the style...alot of ppls seem to be leaning towards this style now adays, and im definatly not too bummed...very nice write -
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I have been playing with sensual writes for some years now. Trying to sing to the senses, I guess, it the best way to describe it. We need to be awakened from are technological sleep and become alive with life.
Love, Tom B.
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Very sweet
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Thanks. May my words always sing for you.
Love, Tom B.
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beauty can be written x this is pure proo
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Very sweet praise, I hope I am worthy. I just wanted to explore the way we breathe and how breath moves us. Love,Tom B.
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my god!! so fresh and delicate...
I like this art from you aswell. It seems i am liking your writes becaues of your soft and feeble approach to express everything you write...
God Bless you!!!
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Not sure what you mean by feeble. But, I am glad that this one sang for you. This was an exploration of breath. Thanks for sharing your joy.
Love, Tom B.
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Freshness breathed off the page.
A spellbinding cascade of intertwined word images flowing(no rippling) down the page....
Mezmarizing ...sitting back, reflective of the scenes displayed...a breath...another...this work makes awareness of breathing and the many facets thereof a vital necessity to be observed...as is the interplay of breathes formed by nature- the breeze,wind,wave motion,leaf fall..all here in your piece..
APPLAUDS .. But actually...sitting clapping at this one..sorry ..all my bunnies have been spent.. so please accept my applaud..it is truly meant.
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Thanks Alan. It all started with a conversation with Lane about breath. She liked it. I appreciate all the praise. Glad it sang for you.
Love, Tom B.
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I absolutely loved this - so sensual and sweet. whispers of the divine. both of you are truly loved and that is a blessing indeed. I would like to invite you to write something for my contest please.
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2335231
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Love provides the joy
We only begin to know how to whisper words for the reasons the seasons open to us. Relationships travel their own roads, Love provides the fuel to find what is beautiful in the journey. Love, Tom B.
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awwwwwww.
this is amazing.
amazing.
amazing.
life and love at its best.
you capture everything.
almost how when i'm bored in school i colour in the "o"s and the "d"s and every letter that has a fitting space.
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My hands aren't big enough
And my heart is too busy keeping me alive. I have just brushed a quick sketch and you have allowed your own passion to fill in all the spaces inbetween. But you are special. Your passion is still expanding your aliveness and vibrancy. I am just fortunate to be aware that when we share cookies on the bench the sweetness on my tongue is from the chocolate chips and the sweetness in the day comes from your company. Love Tom B.
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Another beautiful poem. You trully know a way into a persons heart.
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Then I am glad to have taken yours
This was really on a study in breath. We all must breath. The sensual exploration was to make you more aware of your own senses. When this happens we become more a part of the world. We may be alone but we are no longer lonely. We become connected, vibrant and our aliveness is contagious. I am glad that I got it all over you 
Love Tom B.
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Beautiful
Oh Tom
You have teken my breath away with this very sensual piece of writing and you are right I am very pleased my sweet friend very pleased indeed...
Thanks for letting me know about this one...
Love ya bunches
Tes
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A feather on the breath of love
The opportunity to share a bit of the joy of being alive should never be passed up. It is sad how hard it is for us to do this in the everyday world. Love, Tom B.
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Beautiful!
Tom,
This is so lovely and sensual...
Breathtaking...
Thank you for sharing it with me! I bookmarked it so I can read it again and again
Lynda
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I only offered what I know you love
You told me once that you enjoyed this adult stuff only if it was in taste. I thought this one might comply so I tried to provide you with a moment of bliss and am glad to see that you believe it is worth praise and not boo hiss.
Love, Tom B.
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This took my breath away with its passion and the flow of engulfing words that hit my heart. Great write as you always do.
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Many thanks
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what can I say but such cliches as "every breath you take" meant to be "every poem you write" you leave the reader "breathless"
much love
xoxoxoxoxo
reenie
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Watch out
you are becoming a groupie with such non discriminatory praise. Not that I would ever want you to stop. I came up with a few phrases talking to Lane and she is the one who said I should write a poem Then after the open mic last nite at the IOTA. (I should take the Sunday off next month drive to Annapolis and steal you away for the day. ), I found myself with more inspiration and came home and it wrote itself. It truly was a joyous moment. Thanks for everything Reenie.
Love, Tom B.
Merry Christmas
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VERY VERY DELIGHTFUL POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well hello there Tom, I must say I am glad you sent me this link. It was to say the least beautiful and breathtaking. A very sensual write. When passion rises it is breathless. Your imagery was soft and tender and very tantalizing to read.
I did enjoy reading 
Made my mind wander afar. A truly wonderful poem I shall bookmark. Thank you for sharing this with us. I must say it was quite delightful. Take care, Sandy
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An early present
I realized I hadn't heard from you in a while. At least, since all the changes and I thought I should renew the aquaintance. I felt that this would brighten your day and I am glad to find i wasn't wrong. Thanks for all your kind words. Love, Tom B.
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Soul sailing...
There are so many joyful images that leave a feeling of exhilaration here! You leave the spirit soaring with the tantalizing breezes. I was caught in the very first line. Something about the wind and the ocean makes one feel very small, overwhelmed, but free. It's powerful when the heart sets sail on such all encompassing forces! ~K.
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Just to make your eyes shine
I thought you would enjoy the spirit behind the poem as well as the story line. If it put a lift into your day than I did all I meant to any way. Love, Tom B.
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AMAZING
I absolutely love this. It is so descriptive, such vivid imagery. You capture the reader and carry them along on an emotional, sensual coaster ride that leaves them breathless. You are so talented, it is amazing.
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Far too kind
These writes are explorations of the senses. This one was all about breath. I use sex because it is where we are the most alive or the most shut down, at least in my experience.
I can only thank your for all your kind words and for sharing your joy with me. I could ask for nothing more.
Love, Tom B.
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I hate that enter button ~
The poem is great ~At first I felt it ran on a tad ~
Then this came along >>> The soft warm promise of your breath caressed
my nape and chills escaped along my skin. Your fingers ran,
a stiff breeze across the grass, brushing the taunt hairs
upon my forearm.
Very pretty ~
...and this is great >>>I know that I am but a kite upon the breeze to be tossed
and played with as you need.
This is really pretty as well >>the waves crest and break, foam tossed, crashed
to cause the spirit’s quake before spreading thin disappearing.
This is gorgeous...should be in framed print
>> :you ride the currents writing songs of joy in all the winds
that haunt my chest. A ray of sun halos your face as light
graces our loving nest, a catch of breath and then you sigh.
Your wings enfold my chest, you descend and come to rest.
And you finished it off beautifully with this >>
The sun, fully arrayed
fills our room with lights parade.
Very lovely write ~
Most simple chosen words without for full affect without all the cliche's ~
Loved the flow as well ~
I didn't need a picture to understand this write, you showed me, and imagery is something I am passionate about ~
Well done Bubba ~
Bear ~
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For the roses
Roses are just to keep the click over from becoming tangled in something and not workable. Maybe with you it should be coffee cups.
Your joy in my work was a very high compliment. I should of saved this poem for the play off. Oh well, I write when I am under the spell. Thanks again for all your support.
Love, Tom B.
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Wonderful!
Love the tone! I am also a fan of cool breezes, and winds that are gentle, and tame. Yours made me want to come out of my sweater instead of adding one. LOL I love the rhymes within, and out of the lines. This is sensual, and lends itself to the delight that is shared with intimacy.
As usual Tom, this is one that makes the women swoon. Your words take us on an adventure that is parallel to magical music while making love. Simply beautiful! I can see so much transpiring.
The imagery is stellar. The writ on a whole, inticing...blowing itself into sweet meditations of my mind... for days on end.
Well...guess this is the last read for me for the night. This makes me feel an urgency to cuddle up next to hubby!
Goodnight!
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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A study in breath
From the earth's to lovers to the light's I tried to incorporate breath. I tried to catch my sense of wonder and joy, find new ways to express my sensations. The reason I never spend much time describing the physical act is the sensuality of the moment enfolds us and is really the resource for the magic. Besides, what heightens my senses is anticipation as well as the moment itself and the wash across the senses after it over.
Thanks for all the joy you have shared with me. There is no greater gift or compliment you can share with a poet.
Love, Tom B.
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A deeply intimate write Tom. Very well versed, captivating the reader to engage by absorbing the words and floating through the write. You did a great job! Second stanza last line, seems "thin disappear" should have a comma or possibly I am reading that line wrong. I shall look again. Lovely write, great flow and my pleasure to read....I don't know why you are not showing up on my favorites page, I know you were there before the transition. I shall add you again. ~Tia
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A study in breathing
Really. Thin and disappear but I left out the and so I was taught no comma. Thanks for putting me back on your favorites. I tuly enjy your review. Glad you enjoyd this poem.
Love, Tom B.
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This is great. A sensual delight. I kind of wish it was written in line form, but we each have our different style. The more I read, the more I find I have a lot more growing to do as a poet.
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Line form?
There is a playing with blank and free verse in here. There is also a desire to keep all the rhymes hidden and make people, if possible looke at things differently. Thanks for enjoying it.
Love, Tom B.
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A Brilliant work of Perfection
Before I finished reading it I found myself wrapped up within each word. It was like you stole away in to one of my most ardent moments.This piece took me on a trip of pleasure and beyond...excellent, brilliant.
luv ya!....ennovy
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half the fun of choclate is taking off the wrapper.
You like this one yeah, it felt good writing it. Somethings just sing to you. I think I had been warming up to write this one.
Love Tom B.
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...and you've taken mine away with this.
We talked about writing a poem about breathing
but I never expected something as lovely as
what I have just read. You paint with words -
a true artist, by all means, and I can only
stand by and watch the colors fly...
Love, Lane -
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there are rythmns and dances
so don't lose it for long. Life is too rich and too full of song.
Love, Tom B.
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