Sad without you,
Alone, I miss you more each year,
Sad without you,
And there is nothing I can do,
I feel so lost without you here,
But, In my heart...you're always near,
Sad without you.
Author notes
Written in Rondelet form.
A contest entry
- Why so far away? by MalevolentDesire.
400 points, ended May 15, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I must admit, this is the first rondelet that I have read. This, however, has not detracted from the fact that I think this is a great piece, and full of emotion.
To miss someone is something that has a different effect on every single person, but also somehow bonds us together, through our pain of loss.
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A sweet rondelet, I think the form of this poem really brings out its nature. A very expressive piece in it's brevity. Well done, thanks for entering my contest, and good luck!
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Filled with love, I feel your pain... Good Luck in the contest!
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A short form one but one that can be difficult and when done well one that can convey quite a lot, and you've certainly done it well. It is simple but very endearing and sad. You've also done great service to the form. Everything is dead on in accuracy. The only thing I might suggest is possibly use enjambment around the "Sad without you" line as it would help to really tie it all together. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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i love this poem. i can really relate to it. thanks for this entry
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thank you
thank you for entering my contest. im almost finished juging and ill keep you in mind very nice job thank you for sharing it with me. -
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thankyou
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a good piece, ah sorrow, it is nearly always linked to love. i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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i love this poem, i can relate to it alot. please put the option, thanks
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Very Nice
Is this about someone who has passed away or a relationship ended? Either way it's well written.
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a good form poem. i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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this is the first time ive ever read this form of poetry, & i enjoyed it very much. this was a sad, sweet poem. absolutely lovely.
thank you for entering & good luck! -
Congrats !!! on the nice shiney silver ... well done !! proud of you me lil owl
... loves ya..smiles ~cheeky~
xxx 
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Beauitful
Such bittersweet emotion in this write blank. Full of emotion. I really like this and I too haven't heard of this form but I think you have done an excellent job. Keep up the great work
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I like this
Hi Blank.I really like this.I'm not familiar with this kind of poetry,but,I think it's great.Love,Don.
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Thanks Don
Hey Don, thanks for having a read at this one.
I only wrote it for the contest, I hadn't heard of this style before.
I usually like to write something a little longer so this was a change for me.
Next time i might write an epic to make up for it..lol.. :-) just joking.
Hope you are ok.
Blank.
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you have done a fine poem with this rondolet its the first time ive seen then...good luck in the contest... smiles ~cheeky~ x
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Aw thankyou
I hadn't seen them before this contest either.
Thankyou for reading Cheeky. :-) xx
Blank.
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