we are all born sunbathers
sunbathers in the light
the light eternal
eternal light of love
slowly we learn to dance
dancing in the shadows
shadows cool and indulgent
indulgence brings comfy cozies
but, I remember my origin
origin of life and love
love that calls me to dance
dance into the sunlight
and I lose all my comforts
comforts that belong to me
me that is pure insignificance
insignificance evaporating in the sun
and I have nothing
nothing but my dance
my dance and my gratitude
my gratitude for the sunlight
I have it all
Author notes
If this is not self explanatory, remove all clothing and dance in the sunlight. It will either become apparent or you will feel silly.
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A contest entry
- Your Comfort by mysticstorm.
550 points, ended December 21, 2006, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think...
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wonderful poem, aah to see the sun as Im bathing in the light makes me want to be one dancing fool..... good luck with this contest.........
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I'll even let you lead!
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What a lovely technique ...
to mesh one line with the next and the next and the next .. like the gossamer rays of the sun, touching every limb, every pore, every cold niche ... until the entire body, mind and soul are drenched in the warmth of Love and the whole dances within the Whole.
Always Myra
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Technique? I have technique?
If you say so... light is a fluid, like water, and cascades all around, from point to point. I was trying to capture that in the words. I can't sneak anything by you, now can I? Thanks for the comment.
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Okay 1st off. LOL the authors comment is great!!! So try, I hate when someone says I would have enjoyed your write more, if you had explained it. Well no you wouldn't, for if I have to explain, you would not get it anyway.
Nice job! Another strong wonderful entry in the contest. Everyone is doing such a beautiful job, I am so excited. Yet judging is going to be tuff.
Nice form write. Very well done, great flow and wonderfully comforting. I can close my eyes and feel the warmth of the sun on my body. Very touching and brings a smile to my face.
Thank you for your wonderful write and entering this contest!
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