silence paints the walls
the flickering light turns to black
the days die down
suspense drips from the ceiling
going unnoticed until times breaks its limits
tell me your story and I'll be your hope
the walls will be painted with joy.
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Silence paints the walls....how perfect of picture...well done..and you were able to carry it along quite nicely.
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Thought this was very nice
I read this and thought it was very nice with some very good images, particularly the suspense line, as others said too. Tried to get you a few more comments but people weren't commenting much I guess. I still like it though - good job, YF.
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unusual
.....I'm not really sure what to say about that one. I feel depressed....yet hopeful, intresting to say the least. I shall ponder......
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hmm, I'm not sure what to think of it really. I'm not saying it's bad because it's certainly not, I'm just not used to reading such short poetry. It has a good strong message for being so short though that's for sure.
"suspense drips from the ceiling
going unnoticed until times breaks its limits"
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awwww this was so sweet,
a nice write for wrote for someone special.
a short write with a lot to say,
you have done a very good job on this.
i really enjoyed this a lot.
joyce
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Nice sweet short poem. I like the line "suspense drips from the ceiling".
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