Standing in a field of vast open emptiness
Darkness envelops
No one, nothing is there
Only cold air that cuts through skin and flesh
To feel warm sunshine once more
Strengthen and soothe
A yearning for the clouds to lift
Warm breezes embrace, encase
Tear-drops fall far
Meaningless as they seem
Grief and happiness are terms interchangeable
Desires and emotions are lost, tossed aside
Falling
Never reaching the bottom
Always sinking deeper
Never rising.
Author notes
One I wrote ages ago, NOT a reflection of my feelings now.
Please tell me what you think
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Depression
The hidden illness that can slowly eat away at your heart, mind & soul...We the cursed & those the lucky just cannot seem to understand
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Glad to read that previous admission. - author's note Darkness and emptiness are felicitous descriptions of depression.
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I don't understand. How do you mean?
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"NOT a reflection of my feelings now." is the previous admission I am\was glad about. well chosen or appropiate descriptions.
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The "previous admission" is\was you stating that you'd done this a time ago and that feeling passed with the time. I saw your author's note after I'd read it is all.
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Excellent
Hay Di that was a great pom i loved it. How are u? i missed u so much. What u been doing Sis???? anything much i have to see u sometime soon maybe during the week i might be going to loois this week maybe i could see u then.
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sombre
well that pretty much explains my life, from one minute to the next.
"falling
never reaching the bottom
always sinking deeper
never rising"
what a way to end this piece. brilliant!
so how's the weather way down there? seen any daddy long leggeds lately? ha!
rich
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Thank you and yes I think a lot of people can probably realate to this one.
Its cooler today then what it has been, and windy and rainy here today. As you know we are in drought here so the rain is very welcome, hope it lasts!
LOL no spiders either its been too dry for them, they only come in the house in wet weather, so maybe one will freak me out soon but it better watch out for the bottom of my shoe if it tries!
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I have commented twice on this piece. I have still not changed my view on it.
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Thanks for your comments and applause, much appreciated. I have been buisy on storywrite lately, but will comment on your peoms shortly (yes, i have been reading them
). I have a lot of catching up to do here! take care 
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brilliant an dark
Exactly how I felt. This is dark, yet a beautiful piece. Deep foreboding. Depression runs through this. Imagery and feelings are brilliantly displayed.
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