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Comparing Fruits

 

The Witch in her great wit, did grate on us a whit

As we did lament the unfair way the world was knit

We asked her then to kindly, please cast the fateful bones

To show how we might make them, that oppressed us, atone.

When with no wealth or weight,
they regard contributions we do make.

Never vest our opinions with a voice,

heeded not, regarding any choice.

The crone did crouch then and croon

Reading our ruin in the runes

Portentious prophecy parlayed

with each dire prediction made.

She foretold the Chalice and the Blade

growing ever more the same.

What way does justice weigh

when nothing lies on the swinging plates.

When polarities centralize,

And progeny is synthesized.

What then may tap deep in the soul

with no breathless differences to extoll?

Creation strikes a monotone

while only shades of gray play the Hippodrome.

We will not recall the way to celebrate

and the dirvish will whirl out of the gate.

Our looking glass will reflect the very same

image as it does to our mate or date.

We will suffer a strange yearning to yearn,

craving not to gratify, but to anticipate.

What joy lies in a kiss

marked by a monochromatic sameness of the lips.

Misinterpreting an old wive's tale,

Its precautionary note does not prevail

Apples and Oranges cannot be compared

There's no flow chart to be prepared
Thier intrinsic qualities are not shared

So value difference should not be declared

But those fruits to whom we'd always been devoted

Showed no concern that we felt moded.

From our fragrant citrus-ness place

Which apples had forgotten to appreciate

We saw those apples getting ala mode

and so we felt cheated and we felt owed

So we abandoned the ways of orange zest

and declared ourselves capable of apple-ness

We could not see the time ahead

when the zest of orange-ness was dead

Then the little fruit-lings we did breed

Had no one present to teach them a creed

Their lonely latch-key hearts felt great hollowness and need.

No one taught them otherwise, so they filled their empty up with greed.

The crooning crone finally paused

Expecting the epiphanies in ooo's and aaahhh's

But we had grievances to vet

So we proceeded to become Suffragettes

Never realizing the lofty power we already had

We left our pedastals and stepped down with man

It should have been obvious, I suppose.

That we were shorter standing toe to toe.

If only we had listened to the crone drone.

Perhaps now our children wouldn't be at home alone.

Now when we are faced with comparing fruits,

In hind-sight the point is sadly moot.

 

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  • Anjole-Of-The-Artz
    December 12, 2006
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    Well

    Hm I don't know what quote you used, but it's interesting. I'm not sure you read the rules. I felt the rhyme at the beginning comes off as a bit forced, but it began to flow around the part about Applez and Oranges. All in all a pretty good write. Thank you for entering =]


  • Hatstand
    December 12, 2006
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    Ha! This is excellent - I guess at the end of the day we're all fruits...
    The rhyme scheme works well throughout and for a long(ish) poem it read quickly, which is a bonus in my books. I wonder if 'dirvish' is meant to be 'dervish'? That's my only nitpick with this - good fun all round


  • deadcolor dreams
    December 10, 2006

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    I usually havea hard time reading poems without breaks in the lines- I lose my place really easilly, I have bad eyes.

    But I did like this poem. I noticed the use of alliteration, which really did wonders to the lines- I am a big fan of those poetic tools. Alliteration, similes, metaphors- ect. Your right, this does have a very 'free-verse' feel.

    I think in part, because it utilizes more than just rhyme- it's layered with several different poetic tools, so your not just focusing or realizing the rhyme when you read it- you see everything else, too.

    Great job! Didn't think I'd like this, but I did.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    December 9, 2006
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    A rolling stone gathers victims nearer the bottom of the hill

    My dear, true, I may be dumb but I'll have you know I'm not near as smart as I look.



    JD


  • catz Moderators member
    December 9, 2006
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    Ummm

    This is kind of a crazy poem, DK, but none the less, interesting and a fun read. I see a lot of truisms in this piece, and contradictions, which I see is the reason for the contest

    A very cool write, good luck in the contest

    Dee

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