I've been with my husband for twenty three years
Fell in love with his guitar pickin hands,
Who would have known, that after all these years
He still plays in his classic rock band
Now don't get me wrong, I love the band
And I stand up for what it's all about,
Just one thing that gets in my crawl
Is when he practices, and blows my windows out
He is wonderful in the kitchen
The man can cook like a chef on tv,
But all the while he's in there
He's tearing up jack, you see
Can never put up what he gets out
Swinging cabinet doors, spices everywhere,
Or just follow him after he showers
You may find deodorant in your underwear
He can tear up an anvil with a feather
Mess up my house with just one look,
May find the vaccum cleaner in the freezer
Or open my oven and find a guitar player book
He'll be late for his own funeral
He's the light of my life,
Even though he's like he is
I'm still proud to be his wife
Author notes
WRITTEN 7/17/2006
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A contest entry
- Make Me Fall In Love With...(Contest) by trista.
525 points, ended December 30, 2006, 37 entries
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Comments
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this is pleasant to read..i really like it..and i also play guitar..you gotta love me..lol
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What a treat to read ...
a happy marriage! Wow. I am so impressed and don't you think it is the most precious gift a husband can give to his wife, and vice versa?
Thank you for leading me to your charming words, filled with such humor.
And: thank you for reading my words ... hopefully you saw the peace in my sorrow.
Love
Myra
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Ahhhhh...this is adorable and soooo sweet. You're really in love, huh? I love the rhyme, humor and apparent spark between you too. I have a crush on a boy who sounds an awful lot like your dear hubby. the best line was in the ending stanza:
"He'll be late for his own funeral"
that's priceless; it speaks volumes in a line. That would make a great song, don't you think?
Hope you guys have long and happy lives together!
Cheers!
~Hippie
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your mad
never ever marry a musician..your sonnet makes me feel like i live in your house , i have my ear plugs on..great stuff thanks , ps can i download him on demoid < hehe
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Yet again the same rhyme scheme, nearly the same rhythm of nearly all that I've read so far. Individually, not too shabby. Collectively, mediocre.
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talent in there
great stuff and thanks -
i love it. everything just flows so well. and it puts a picture in your head. i like the first stanza the best. keep it up
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ahhhhhhhhhh.......
definitely very very cute on this one!!!! all through out you have stolin' my heart and thrown it into the river for great memories and sweeetness with these, your thoughts that seem like a certain kind of wonderful magic forme!!!!!
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Lol, Awww that's really sweet.
I love all the creative locations for household objects. Did you ever find a vacuum cleaner in your freezer o.O
Anyway, awesome.
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such a lovely poem
this is a good poem I laughed at some points. -
You've done a great job with this poem, because even though it sounds like he'd make a mess of everything, he also sounds like a definite "keeper".
It's so good to see or hear about a married couple who still have a great affection for each other despite all their little quirks. I bet he loved this when (if) you showed it to him!
The flow of the poem is a little off in some places, and in line 7 did you mean "crawl" or "craw" ? You might try reading the piece out loud, which should help you hear where the rhythm of the poem isn't quite right. All in all this is a good poem though, and I love the desciptions. Thanks so much for your entry and good luck in the contest!
Best wishes,
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Such A Pleasure To Read!!!!!!
This was a wonderful poem. A pleasure to read. It was so nice to read about a marriage that lasted and is happy. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy
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This is very nice...I love humor
I like the descriptions, I like the humor. You are very talented you write very well.
All your lines are exceptional.
You have painted a great picture here.
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I agree with silverbutterfly this is very sweet and very well written.
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Adorable!!!!!!
this is the sweetest and cutest write I've ever read about a husband!!!! Absolutely an adorable piece!! GBY 
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