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I Need You

I Need You ...
to stop my mind  from screaming

I Need You ....
so I can bring my nightmare musings
to an end

I need your touch
so that I can drown my sorrows
in our river of dreams
and your scent
is the air
-of -
a new beggining


I Need you darlin'
because ONLY YOU
can end my morbid fairytale

I Need your touch.....
to wake me up
from ...
my melancholic slumber

Even If
I can ONLY see you
in my dreams my love
Your touch will unlock my prisoned soul

How I wish you were real my love
and I wish I can see you in daylight

but it doesn't matter if I can't see you at dawn
because I know I can hold you

in my arms at midnight
and your voice
will always be my soothing serenade

Even if you only exsist in my dreams mon amor
I will need no one else
but...
YOU

Author notes

This poem has been inspired by the fantasies I've been having the past 2 weeks., and I hope you like this piece because i think i have lost my touch when it comes writing romantic poetry.The picture is my fictional muse and he exsists only in the novel of my favorite author . This is a revised piece of what i have written during my 15 minute lunch break at work today.

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  • ams1020
    December 5, 2008

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    wow

    i was almost out of the AP frontpage when i saw your poem. the first two line caught my eye. very good job! after i deleted all my poems (i have reasons , i wanted to write what i am feeling at the moment. - now i dont have to, i'll just read yours again and again.
    good luck.


    • Scarlet Ambrosia
      December 5, 2008
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      Arms,
      Aww, thank you for your sweet words, I am glad you enjoyed this little piece of mine...

      Scarlet


  • Willie66Boy
    November 27, 2007
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    I not only see your sentiment with this writing but also feel it. I have wriiten a song with basically the same message. This is extremely moving to the soul.


    • Scarlet Ambrosia
      November 27, 2007
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      Willie,
      Thank you for the wonderful comment , and gald you enjoyed the piece ...
      thnks, Scarlet


  • Desire gold member
    November 20, 2007
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    Holy Mother of Pearl Jam!!

    You did a Magnificent job on this romance piece and love the images along with emotions You have brought forward!!

    I can see You have the man of Your dreams up at the top
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Love this!!

    Best wishes to You in all You do Beautiful!!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • georgie
    November 20, 2007

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    well i certainly dont think youve lost your touch at romantic poetry... this is beautiful. unfortunately not all love is so happy... a few parts really captured me in this piece... especially this one 'Even If
    I can ONLY see you
    in my dreams my love
    Your touch will unlock my prisoned soul' as my true love and was jailed on our wedding day n ive not seen him since except once thru perspex. so that bit made me cry a bit. when you can do that to someone u know u have written a fantastic poem
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


    • Scarlet Ambrosia
      November 20, 2007
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      Georgie,

      Thank you for oyur wonderful comment Im glad you ejoyed this little piece ,
      thanks again for your kind words.

      Scarlet


  • vampire.lust.death
    November 19, 2007

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    you did it

    hem its love its destant its beautiful good work my gifted one
    keep on with the mistafing


  • Griswold silver member
    July 23, 2007

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    A beautifully written poem from the heart. I appreciate you sharing with me. You have not lost anything...Scott


  • sublimewriter
    March 29, 2007
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    romantic

    you are a year older than me. i was taken in by the romantic feelings and emotion in this poem. it was real and a great read. the longing of the lost lover and the longing for intimacy was well written. oh, it's my second day on allpoetry. mind if i add u as a favorite?


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    December 17, 2006

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    absolutely wonderful

    I was here yesterday, had to come back for a proper comment...Its just so wonderful, screaming out your love....yes..I liked it a lot and was way speechless for a moment...
    My favorite part:

    but it doesn't matter if I can't see you at dawn
    because I know I can hold you
    in my arms at midnight
    and your voice
    will always be my soothing serenade

    That will prob be personal for me too
    So I recognize this feelings a lot
    XXJeannette


  • Theater Of Dreams
    December 11, 2006

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    Surprised!

    WOW- Di you really shocked me with this one. It's a romantic poem and filled with rich feelings that you rarely express!

     Based on fantasy? Hey, we have ALL been there... (I am the expert...lol) the feelings can explode with realism.

    Nicely done...very HAPPY to see this from you!

    -Godfather James. Wink


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    December 11, 2006

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    A very deep and passionate write. Very good job, I would have to say you have not lost your touch. Thank you for entering and good luck to you.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • goddesskevauna
    December 10, 2006

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    exquisite

    This is very beautiful! I had a feeling this was a dream the way that this started out. Kinda nice to have those kinds of dream fantasizies. I love mine!
    I just love your background, it is very beautiful!

  • GarbageCan
    December 9, 2006

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    oh hun this is absolutly beautiful!!! I love the word choice and the feelings it is just...breathtaking, and you think that oyu've lost your touch


  • countrybabe gold member
    December 9, 2006

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    Great write

    Great piece of work here little sis, you have done a marvellous job. A very captivating write indeed. Good luck with this piece in the current contest you have it entered in.

    Keep writing

    Love Your Big Sis
    Countrybabe


  • pattyann4500
    December 9, 2006

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    So, who is the cutie in the picture? This is really very sweet, passionate and emotional. Very nice piece, Di. Hugs, Gramma


    • Scarlet Ambrosia
      December 9, 2006
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      :D

      His name is Nick and he is just a character from the novel of my favorite author....even though he is just fictional he inspires me alot.... just wish he was real Gramma u think i have lost my touch for romantic poetry?


      thanks for the lovely comment
      Di


  • panegyric ink
    December 9, 2006
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    like sweet chocolate deep with cherries.

    Unbelievably beautiful in all of your words deep textures.


  • HisOneTrueLove6107
    December 8, 2006
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    The third to last stanza, I think you meant only one real, Mummy. Other than that, it's lovely. I love all of your work. ^.^

    Keep it up, Momma!!

    Love, Ashleigh.


  • csflut
    December 8, 2006

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    wow

    fifth from last i think it should b this will be my soothing serenade just me i thought it was amazing itr was written from the heart i know the feeling when u want to hold someone be with someone and there face name alone makes u happy it sorta tells how i feel righ now i need someone to free my soul open my heart make me love again but bak 2 poem it was a kickas piece written from the heart a window into the soul a heartfelt piece 2 thumbs up


    • Scarlet Ambrosia
      December 8, 2006
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      Thank You

      Glad to know i havn't lost my touch yer when it comes to romantic poetry.... thank you for your wonderful comment my friend..... and I am glad you enjoyed this piece

      Scarlet

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