You said before
You'd never let me go
But It's just to bad
Forever had to show
And I guess forevers over
And I guess that you are gone
But what I really want to know
Is
Why did you say forever
If forever wasn't even a day
Why did you say forever
So many others things you
could say
You could have said
you wanted me
you could said you really liked me
but no
you said
you loved me
and you'd NEVER let me go
So now I guess It's never
I ask you what is your thing
Why can't you understand
Your the one for me
I didn't smile, I didn't laugh
I didn't love and you were there and I knew
That I would forever Love you
Why did you say forever
If forever wasn't even a day
Why did you say forever
So many others things you
could say
You could have said
you wanted me
you could said you really liked me
but no
you said
you loved me
and you'd NEVER let me go
So now I guess It's never
Author notes
he said FOREVER and now...it is just NEVER
Please tell me what you think
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i like ur writin a lot , u inspire me alot
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Another thing people say is I will never hurt you....Well I guess I stepped right into never never land because this last one cut the DEEPEST that I have ever been cut, I put all kinds of trust and love into them and now forever has arrived.....Great peice here!!!
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yeah... men lie
but good poem...
forevers come and go...
i like it
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good
messed up the "to" should have been "too" at the begining but I liked it
-jessie
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i seriously feel like i'm about to cry. If my sister wasn't here I'd be balling. I can definitely relate to this kind of work and I'm sure I'm not the only one. Love can be so complicated and just plain hurtful. But all you can do is learn from past experiences and be stronger. This is a tear jerker!!! My favorite so far! LOVE IT. You have a big talent
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THis is really good sweetie.
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Very well written!!!! Unfortuantly, forever just isn't as long as it is for the rest of us!!!! It makes you wonder if they've ever read a dictionary!!!!
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i can completely relate to this sometimes....great!!
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thanx for the comment!
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that was a really good poem...i could feel what you were saying
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oh hunny men suck sometimes
they lie a lot trying, they dont communicate well and they are the soul reason why people get their littles hearts crushed.. 
cheer up, hes a loser and you'll find a better one sooner..
however when youre pissed and sad you do create some amazing poetry...
*Abused
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Yes, definitely lyrics with the refrain... now as lyrics the other important aspect is how they 'sound' when sung (song) or spoken (rap); rhythm will play a part there too... as for your relationship, a problem you had is you were too passive! I can see you being more active (and more of a skeptic!) in your next relationship, and not just letting things happen to you and then complaining about it!
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Well Said
I think this is something everyone here can relate to. What someone says in the throes of infatuation and what happens in reality can be far apart. I like the way line #8 stands by itself to connect to the rest of the poem. Line # 16, 'you could said' might sound better as 'you could have said. Lines #22 and #26 are a little vague to me and break the flow of the poem (maybe just me
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This poem is good and could be even better, it reads like lyrics to me and I like it. You could tighten it up by leaving out some of the 'and' words and proof it, eg. your vs. you're, to vs. too, etc. just those nitpicky little things and make it look polished and professional. I can see it's a big hit and no wonder! Best wishes, Poetess. CCG
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I sorta know how you feel the only thing is the guy and I was never dating but kept telling me he really cared about me and he always would but then he jsut stoped talking to me...
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Very touching...
Well it is really a very depressed poem where the heart is in the ache and every feeling is bringing the profundity of the love time and again...The script is very softly revealing there a story of the core which demands for the universal joy of the tenderness instead of the bitter truths of the life...The crescendo of the thoughts hauled here are truly amazing and beautiful..Very impressive work is this... -
Great Write.
This poem was totally awesome. I know how it feels to have someone say forever and then turn around and break it off. I really could feel this poem. I hope that I get to read more of your poetry very soon. Great Write!!!
Luke
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There is a special covictiveness...
...here that speaks just that truth!!! IT'S OVER!!!!
Nicely said. Sometimes this is what it takes, to get all of those feelings out ....and in to the open!!!
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I love it all... the poem, the background, the topic....it's all great. there is a depth and undertone to this that goes and flows excellently. keep writing......you have a lot to offer. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways
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loved it!
forever is not as long as people think it is... forever could mean an hour or two... but to some people forever is a long time, but now a days it's not so long....
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WOWW
That is so true. I love this piece because I just got out of a relationship and he said he'd NEVER let me go, but now on gone, moving on and he wants me back. I don't think there'll be a second chance for him to have a second chance to say that.
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Amazing
That was a cool poem there you have doone. Very nice words put together very well, it had a nice flow from it. I love have you started the poem. It makes the readers wanna keep reading until the end like it did for me. By reading it i got the deep feeling that a person very close to u died. They would be still with u even if their not there in pyhsical. who ever the person is their will b always looking over u and helping u when u need it.
Great job on the poem.
Keep it up and better things will come from u.
thank u for the read
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The feel of silk and disappointment
An expression of painful disappointment but without the anger and retaliation one usually expects. This is a gentle message of appeal - well written and honest.
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How many people can relate to this? Besides everybody. This is a very sad yet heartfelt piece. One can feel your pain in this. You might want to check out this piece by Sunshinegirl http://allpoetry.com/poem/2274618
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OMG sisssy this is a good poem and forever always comes sooner then you want it to
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